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Suck it in your nose.2 total reviews
Comment from Shanbreen
You have done a good job keeping to the 3-5-3 syllable count. I didn't quite understand what is meant by Air cycle. Just the same, it is well written. All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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You have done a good job keeping to the 3-5-3 syllable count. I didn't quite understand what is meant by Air cycle. Just the same, it is well written. All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thank you!
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I have to admit I read this several times. Wasn't quite sure of the message. I think your haiku captures a fleeting moment - the "air cycle." Note, there is a typo in your first line - that confused me. I'm thinking it's about a time of day when the air feels especially refreshing. Your poem sure made me think!
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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I have to admit I read this several times. Wasn't quite sure of the message. I think your haiku captures a fleeting moment - the "air cycle." Note, there is a typo in your first line - that confused me. I'm thinking it's about a time of day when the air feels especially refreshing. Your poem sure made me think!
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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It's fixed. Thank you for your help and review!