Air Tension
3-5-3 poem6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This 3-5-3, Air Tension, has the proper formatting and enters the poetic challenge with either a reverence to the thickness of the tension metaphorically, or a resolution born of stress.
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This 3-5-3, Air Tension, has the proper formatting and enters the poetic challenge with either a reverence to the thickness of the tension metaphorically, or a resolution born of stress.
Comment Written 06-May-2024
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I like this piece. It's pretty clever and works on a couple of different levels. This is nice work for such a short piece.
All syllables present and correct too.
Best of luck to you
GMG
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Hi there,
I like this piece. It's pretty clever and works on a couple of different levels. This is nice work for such a short piece.
All syllables present and correct too.
Best of luck to you
GMG
Comment Written 05-May-2024
Comment from juliaSjames
Thus seems to be about a coming storm that can be averted by magic
In any event the abrupt last line effectively "cuts" the almost sing song effect of the preceding end rhymes.
Striking work (sic)
Good luck in the contest
Blessings, Julia
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Thus seems to be about a coming storm that can be averted by magic
In any event the abrupt last line effectively "cuts" the almost sing song effect of the preceding end rhymes.
Striking work (sic)
Good luck in the contest
Blessings, Julia
Comment Written 04-May-2024
Comment from Mark Jackson
Very clever. I like the approach; a play on words. You have also rhymed. The final line is the winner though. I wonder how well it will do against some of the other more 'generic' entries.
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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Very clever. I like the approach; a play on words. You have also rhymed. The final line is the winner though. I wonder how well it will do against some of the other more 'generic' entries.
Comment Written 04-May-2024
reply by the author on 04-May-2024
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Thanks for your review, Mark. Glad you liked that last line because I wasn't sure about it. I hate it when you know what you want to say but not sure how to express it.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the 3-5-3 'Air' poem writing prompt. As a former Floridian I know exactly what it means to cut the air with a knife! It makes me uncomfortable just sitting here remembering it. Nice poem using only 11 syllables. Good luck.
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An excellent entry for the 3-5-3 'Air' poem writing prompt. As a former Floridian I know exactly what it means to cut the air with a knife! It makes me uncomfortable just sitting here remembering it. Nice poem using only 11 syllables. Good luck.
Comment Written 04-May-2024
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I like your poem. It is powerful. The picture is good choice for the words. Nice rhyming. Good luck in the contest. Use a knife is so clever. Great job
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I like your poem. It is powerful. The picture is good choice for the words. Nice rhyming. Good luck in the contest. Use a knife is so clever. Great job
Comment Written 04-May-2024