Breath of Life
O, yes!2 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your haiku beautifully captures the importance of oxygen. In just three lines, you painted a picture of the connection between humans and the air they breathe. The simplicity of the language adds to the poem's impact. I love how you ended it by emphasizing that it is oxygen that animates our existence.
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Your haiku beautifully captures the importance of oxygen. In just three lines, you painted a picture of the connection between humans and the air they breathe. The simplicity of the language adds to the poem's impact. I love how you ended it by emphasizing that it is oxygen that animates our existence.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Much appreciated, Michael. Have a good day.
Comment from Mark Jackson
Does it, does it really? Oxygen doesn't animate air in my mind. Oxygen is part of air 21%. I feel you could find a better word than animate which means move. What does oxygen actually do for us. I hope this makes you think, at least no need to change anything but have a think. Thank you.
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Does it, does it really? Oxygen doesn't animate air in my mind. Oxygen is part of air 21%. I feel you could find a better word than animate which means move. What does oxygen actually do for us. I hope this makes you think, at least no need to change anything but have a think. Thank you.
Comment Written 05-May-2024
reply by the author on 05-May-2024
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Thanks, Mark. I think the original, literal meaning of animate is to bring to life and that was the notion I was trying to convey. Oxygen is a basic requirement for the maintenance of life in all of God?s creatures. Best wishes.
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Ah, yes I see. I knew what you were going for but didn't see it. Frankenstein's monster was animated.
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