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Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I don't get an image of a wife heartbroken over the loss of her husband here. I get an image of a death that was traumatic and she's almost glad he's gone. Maybe it's just me.

 Comment Written 12-May-2024


reply by the author on 12-May-2024
    It's okay to have your own interpretation. That is normal with haiku.

    Thank you very much, Barbara

    gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
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cool... love the comparisons between thorny roses, a cold gravesite, and blood and tears - quite interesting and thought-provoking

great imagery and smooth flow and cool pics
thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 12-May-2024


reply by the author on 12-May-2024
    Thank you very much, Shelley

    gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
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I find this one to be morbid.
The words are strong, and I am not sure if tg we intention is to express pain or hate. Either way, I felt both pain and hatred coming t h rough as I read it.
Thanks for sharing.
RJ

 Comment Written 11-May-2024


reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    Thorns puncture finger thus blood drops in juxtaposition with the tears of pain of losing her husband.

    Thank you for reading and reviewing my poem.

    Gypsy
Comment from Jumbo J
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Hi MariVal,
firstly may I say... a very stunning presentation... the image you chose, the colour scheme the layout... yes, perfect.

You have injected a lot of pain and possibly a darker side to the story of a husband's demise. One can only think, emerse and create their own conclusion.

Always enjoy anticipating what your brilliant-creative mind will serve up with each new post... which of course I have not been able to keep up with... and I'm sorry for not being there to read and support each of your truly wonderful creations.

With our thoughts we create...
the convenience of time.

Warmest regards,
James.

 Comment Written 11-May-2024


reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    Hello, James, it's so good to hear from you.

    I appreciate your warm encouragement and kind words, my friend.

    I spend a lot of time with my presentations, usually more than the poems. The words flow easily. But I enjoy creating the presentation... I'm very picky. (*÷*) I appreciate your kind words... you, sir, spoil me LoL

    Con cariņo,

    Tu amiga, MarVal

    Marival
reply by Jumbo J on 11-May-2024
    I wish I could spoil you more and with more regularity dear lady... Reina Lobo Gitana.
Comment from GWHARGIS
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I always think of people who give roses with the thorns on them as people who punish themselves. As if the pain of gathering them is part of the present. Maybe that is just me. Lol. I liked the imagery of this. The gift of the flowers and the tears and blood that drip down on the grave. Beautiful. Gretchen

 Comment Written 11-May-2024


reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    In Spain, when I was little, people inflicted pain to themselves for religious repentance. Catholic religion was harsh back then. I don't know if it has changed. I hope so.

    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind feedback.
Comment from lyenochka
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Oh dear! Those roses can be dangerous but the pain of the thorns isn't felt because the widow is in so much pain because of her grief. Well told story in your gogyohka poem!

 Comment Written 11-May-2024


reply by the author on 11-May-2024
    Thank you very much, big sister. I started with a senryu but I needed more lines and syllables.

    Love

    Marival