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Willing Hearts

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Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?

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Comment from Lisa Carter1
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The store is very cute and romantic alike. I was not expecting it to be so as I read the other two poems before this one. It's in lightning to hear a romantic story as I don't generally listen to romantic stories. Thank you for sharing have a wonderful day keep writing

 Comment Written 28-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 29-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from bhogg
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A great post. I'm going to have to circle back and read some of the other chapters. You're such a romantic and it comes out in your writing. Good, clean romance. Not enough of that around. At one time, I had a romance with a lady who worked for me...Very awkward!

 Comment Written 20-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 20-Jul-2024
    Hello, stranger. I've missed you. Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Noah and Sami have problems to work around.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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"I'm impossible..." is a good description of Sami's character.

Even Bob and Sarah realize Noah and Sami are a couple, though that violates everything about Noah's professionalism.

Apparently, Sami has too much free time on her hands, and as Bob grinned, needs something constructive to occupy her time.

 Comment Written 18-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
    She does. I'm wondering where this will lead Sami. I have a feeling it will lead her somewhere. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Barbara,
I was thinking something major had happened to Sami when they couldn't find her. I don't know if there is a way out of the attic to the outside or not. I'll be glad when they capture the bad guys and hopefully recover the missing girls. I'd like to see a little more action, but that's just me. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
    This is a romance, so I won't go into the action. Sorry. Use your imagination. I know you have a great one. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Douglas Goff
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Number Six? Oh we gotta push this higher than that. Very good read.

I like the attic addition. That was interesting.

This is moving along nicely. Well done, Barbara!
D

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the kind reivew.
Comment from Daylily
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This is an excellent relationship chapter. I like that things are heating up, but still are going slow in important ways. Maybe Sami will go back up into the attic and find something exciting. I cannot imagine what it would be, however. Some times, it is just good to think about things. :-)


 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
    Sami does find something interesting in attic. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
reply by Daylily on 17-Jul-2024
    Wow!
Comment from Sanku
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How every one panicked when Sami went missing .They are a bunch of caring lot and I like that Bobby and Sarah knows about their feelings and are in full support...

 Comment Written 17-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BOO ghost
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Greetings, Barbara! It's been many moons! I see you're still around. Well, guess I jump in, although, I missed a heap of chapters. Guess, better late than never! The character list is a welcome. Reading..."You heard everything?" Oh, a snoop! You reward us handsomely for reviewing! You believe in your prose and promote it! "Bob, Sarah, come here." When they stood in the kitchen, Noah continued, "Sami's missing." Hum, this peaks BOO'S interest, allow me to read on... interesting plot and dialogue. Like I always tell writers, use show more to enhance prose. This is professional penned, I saw no flaws. may take me a couple of chapters to get into the zone. Learn the characters and swagger of the prose. Every person has their unique writing voice as you know. You put in the time and doubloon! Hard work pays dividends! It's good to be back!

BOO!

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 17-Jul-2024
    Thank you for returning and leaving this encouraging review. HUGS!!!
Comment from A.Z. Schott
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I like your writing style. You don't tell the reader who the characters are. You use dialogue and action to allow the reader to see for themselves. Noah seems like a tough guy, but he's really an old softy underneath it all with the way he stayed up at night to comfort someone.

Minor observations were that "border-line" is one word "borderline", and unless that's his nickname, there should be a comma after "Chuckling" before "Noah". Thanks!

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
    I appreciate the help and have made the corrections. Thank you for dropping by and leaving this helpful review.
Comment from patcelaw
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This is very well written and it reads very well when it is read aloud I wish you the very best with all of your writing you are indeed a very good writer. Your sentence structure and your paragraph is excellent. Have a wonderful weekend and may God bless you. Patricia.

 Comment Written 16-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 16-Jul-2024
    Thank you for the encouragement.