Nature at rest
The season when nature lies fallow and waits.19 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
You project an excellent sense of peacefulness and stillness in your 5-7-5 as the land gives up its role to await a warmer awakening. You've done well to create this image of winter so evocatively without a visual to accompany it. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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You project an excellent sense of peacefulness and stillness in your 5-7-5 as the land gives up its role to await a warmer awakening. You've done well to create this image of winter so evocatively without a visual to accompany it. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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Thank you. Winter snow is a favorite thing of mine.
Comment from godlucifer
winter is such a memorable season. the memory of snow is especially fun and giving for a time of nature. your poem was well crafted. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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winter is such a memorable season. the memory of snow is especially fun and giving for a time of nature. your poem was well crafted. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2024
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And than you for reading.
I like your pen name.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Nancy, I'm now trying for the third time to write you a review. The site keeps on telling me that it's AI generated and stops me for giving you a review.
Your haiku describes a true winter picture all painted in white.
Now a haiku is always written in lower case. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Hi Nancy, I'm now trying for the third time to write you a review. The site keeps on telling me that it's AI generated and stops me for giving you a review.
Your haiku describes a true winter picture all painted in white.
Now a haiku is always written in lower case. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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I am a real person
Thank you, I did not know that about haiku.
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I know you are for real. I don't know why this is happening. I don't trust AI. It's doing things it shouldn't do. Ulla xcx
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No argument from me on that
Comment from jake cosmos aller
nice haiku about the winter's snows covering the land like the image and the feeling of this poem as we end a long hot summer and early fall season
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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nice haiku about the winter's snows covering the land like the image and the feeling of this poem as we end a long hot summer and early fall season
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you. It felt cooling just to write it.
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Nancy,
This is such a lovely haiku. You give winter a sleepy, peaceful quality.
Excellent imagery without a photo!
Best wishes,
Cindy
I like the ending too. I imagined the flurry of joy of an upcoming spring.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Nancy,
This is such a lovely haiku. You give winter a sleepy, peaceful quality.
Excellent imagery without a photo!
Best wishes,
Cindy
I like the ending too. I imagined the flurry of joy of an upcoming spring.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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That's what snow means to me--especially before even the birds have made a mark in it.
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😊 ❄️
Comment from HarryT
Not sure the word drear fits. I believe it means dark, bleak or dreary so it modifies night it is not a separate entity. It is a dreary night. One does see the picture you tried to create.
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Not sure the word drear fits. I believe it means dark, bleak or dreary so it modifies night it is not a separate entity. It is a dreary night. One does see the picture you tried to create.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Drear is an archaic us, for sure. It means dim or lightless. Thank you for noticing the use and questioning it. I am glad the image is clear anyway.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Since I am not a student of Japanese style poetry, you meet the prescribed rules of syllable count and lines. The words describe a clear visual image, And the last line is a clear summary and resolution to the story.
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Since I am not a student of Japanese style poetry, you meet the prescribed rules of syllable count and lines. The words describe a clear visual image, And the last line is a clear summary and resolution to the story.
Z
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2024
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Thank you. I appreciate that time you took to consider my work.
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, winter is a very similar time in nature to refreshing sleep for the tired and exhausted human being, a form of restoration for the vegetation and restoration for the ground, it is actually a commandment in the bible, to let the ground be fallow, every seventh year, beautifully written Nancy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Oh yes, winter is a very similar time in nature to refreshing sleep for the tired and exhausted human being, a form of restoration for the vegetation and restoration for the ground, it is actually a commandment in the bible, to let the ground be fallow, every seventh year, beautifully written Nancy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you. It is one of my favorite nature scenes--hushed and serene.
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Well done,
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Thanks
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Most welcome
Comment from estory
I thought you had perfect balance, a great nature image, and the first line especially just jumped off the page for me. The second line was pretty strong too, and you had built up a great sense of time and emotion standing still. The third line just didn't quite reach into that realm of epiphany to make a truly outstanding haiku. You need to connect the image of stillness and purity to some human experience like love or death, hope or transformation. It is kind of a mysterious line that speaks of patience maybe, but it just didn't jump for me. estory
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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I thought you had perfect balance, a great nature image, and the first line especially just jumped off the page for me. The second line was pretty strong too, and you had built up a great sense of time and emotion standing still. The third line just didn't quite reach into that realm of epiphany to make a truly outstanding haiku. You need to connect the image of stillness and purity to some human experience like love or death, hope or transformation. It is kind of a mysterious line that speaks of patience maybe, but it just didn't jump for me. estory
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you for your comments. I think I was looking at the prompt as being the "feeling " of the season rather than specific human emotion--but I see your point. Thank you.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
There was no picture needed for THIS exceptional haiku! You set the vibe of peaceful dormancy well with each well-chosen syllable. The picture you brought to my mind was vivid and very strong. Really well done. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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There was no picture needed for THIS exceptional haiku! You set the vibe of peaceful dormancy well with each well-chosen syllable. The picture you brought to my mind was vivid and very strong. Really well done. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 19-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
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Thank you. I love the scene described as I watch out the window at the complete stillness of an unbroken snow.