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Whale Song

Haiku contest

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Comment from patcelaw
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This is very well written for the contest and I am so happy that you have made progress with it. May you have a wonderful day and may God bless you. Patricia.

 Comment Written 20-Sep-2024


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Comment from CrystieCookie999
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I liked reading this nature-based haiku about the migration of whales. I caught some 's' alliteration with emphasized words steadfast, songs, summon. Bet we could all benefit from our own songs of destiny, great phrasing on that.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2024


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Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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I write in a formalist style of poetry and am not well versed in the Japanese styles. Your verse here expresses the story quite well. You deftly describe the motivation and the action of the whale. Well done.

Z

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024


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Comment from kahpot
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What a wonderful short poem about the whales and their migration, I think their songs are truly magnificent, very well written for this prompt, best wishes for your contest****kahpot

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024


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Comment from tempeste
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Ciao mystery poet, you have your first vote!

Your poem stood out from all those autumn entries.

And for me your poem has a strong impact on the reader even without artwork.

Such majestic creatures and their song is haunting .

We cause these gentle giants much stress with our oil rigs.

And ships , boats that invade their migration paths to get a glimpse of them.

We should learn to leave them in peace.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024


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    You are welcome! 🙂
Comment from Amelie Johns
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I enjoyed reading your nature Haiku poem. While it is pictureless as is required, your words transformed into a motion picture in my mind. Great job and best of luck in the contest.
Amelie

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2024


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