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Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "End of the Road for Jane"Two very real women in not so real situation.
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Comment from LJbutterfly
I am finally back at my computer. I've been lost in Florida's Hurricane Milton for a week, without electrical power or internet. I'm glad I'm back for this episode. Delicious! I've been waiting, knowing you would eventually explode. This chapter was humorous and very satisfying. Bye-bye Jane.
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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I am finally back at my computer. I've been lost in Florida's Hurricane Milton for a week, without electrical power or internet. I'm glad I'm back for this episode. Delicious! I've been waiting, knowing you would eventually explode. This chapter was humorous and very satisfying. Bye-bye Jane.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 15-Oct-2024
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So sorry to hear about your fallout from Milton! Any damage done to your place?
Thank you for being such an avid and devoted fan!! Xoxoxo
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Rachelle.
I believe I would not want to spend any time around Jane since she sighs like a hippopotamus. I hate it when people do that and I have heard people do it. That is far worse than annoying. It's amusing that Jane referred to another person as a low-class Dixie Chick. The Dixie Chicks have become so unpopular that they've changed their name to just plain Chicks. That is certainly a poor reference. I had to laugh when I read some of the names, and Exchanges, between such fine ladies. I've never been a redhead, but I understand. How that temper could flare up in this situation. My hair is gray and I found it aggravating. If there is going to be poetry, as mentioned, make it a CUBE16. HAHAHAHAHAHA
Jane won't last 5 minutes in a limo. Good job!
Robert
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Hello Rachelle.
I believe I would not want to spend any time around Jane since she sighs like a hippopotamus. I hate it when people do that and I have heard people do it. That is far worse than annoying. It's amusing that Jane referred to another person as a low-class Dixie Chick. The Dixie Chicks have become so unpopular that they've changed their name to just plain Chicks. That is certainly a poor reference. I had to laugh when I read some of the names, and Exchanges, between such fine ladies. I've never been a redhead, but I understand. How that temper could flare up in this situation. My hair is gray and I found it aggravating. If there is going to be poetry, as mentioned, make it a CUBE16. HAHAHAHAHAHA
Jane won't last 5 minutes in a limo. Good job!
Robert
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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A cube of Jane's dirty poetry. Now THAT's enough to give you a redhead's temper, Robert!!
If the truth be told, I'm not a natural redhead anymore; I, too, am gray (maybe even white!) but I just can't imagine being anything but a redhead, and my husband says he can't imagine being married to anything but a redhead. So buy L'Oreal stock; I'm in it for the long haul!!
Thanks for this delightful review. You know I always love reading whatever you have to write to me. xoxox
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You're very welcome. I like the sighing Hippo. Made me laugh out loud.
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Thanks. I was worried that was too "out there" to be funny. I appreciate the validation! xoxox
Comment from Jim Wile
This chapter was short but terrific, Rachelle. Such a sweet exchange between you and Rebekah. I loved these lines in particular: "sometimes you don't need to know someone a long time to know they're a perfect addition to your life, and that is exactly how I feel about you. You're this wonderful, shining light that warms up my whole heart." I also liked the laugh you shared with her about having to put up with Jane some more.
And then I admired your resolve to not let Jane spoil the rest of the trip and the convention for you. You gave her fair warning about the consequences of her rudeness, and when she flagrantly insulted Gretchen, you followed through. Atta Girl!
So, you may not be totally rid of her after all. I can't wait to see if she ends up at the convention.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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This chapter was short but terrific, Rachelle. Such a sweet exchange between you and Rebekah. I loved these lines in particular: "sometimes you don't need to know someone a long time to know they're a perfect addition to your life, and that is exactly how I feel about you. You're this wonderful, shining light that warms up my whole heart." I also liked the laugh you shared with her about having to put up with Jane some more.
And then I admired your resolve to not let Jane spoil the rest of the trip and the convention for you. You gave her fair warning about the consequences of her rudeness, and when she flagrantly insulted Gretchen, you followed through. Atta Girl!
So, you may not be totally rid of her after all. I can't wait to see if she ends up at the convention.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Did you read our soft-hearted Southern Belle's chapter? OY!!!
Thanks for such a warm and affirming review, Jim. Xoxo
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You made me smile with yours and Gretchen's humour here Rachelle as you deal with Jane with a swift despatch when you drop her off! It sounds like she has another lift all arranged though. Perhaps the rest of your trip will be plain sailing now. A wonderful chapter with a successful closure to the Jane problem, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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You made me smile with yours and Gretchen's humour here Rachelle as you deal with Jane with a swift despatch when you drop her off! It sounds like she has another lift all arranged though. Perhaps the rest of your trip will be plain sailing now. A wonderful chapter with a successful closure to the Jane problem, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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No such luck, Dolly. Read Gretchen's version, and you'll see what I mean.
Thank you for this fun review. I always look forward to your feedback each week. xoxox
Comment from Lori Mulligan
Love the metaphors about Jane, especially,
"Jane's sigh, even through our closed doors, mind you, is so pronounced and overexaggerated, it sounds as if a hippopotamus just deflated a pool raft by landing on it with all four feet." this is good stuff!
So was the eyes coming out of the sockets that might op out with slightest bump.
I love the ending with the limo driver. I mean how spoiled can this girl be!
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Love the metaphors about Jane, especially,
"Jane's sigh, even through our closed doors, mind you, is so pronounced and overexaggerated, it sounds as if a hippopotamus just deflated a pool raft by landing on it with all four feet." this is good stuff!
So was the eyes coming out of the sockets that might op out with slightest bump.
I love the ending with the limo driver. I mean how spoiled can this girl be!
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Read Gretchen's version, and you'll learn why!! And also why she writes dirty poetry!
Thanks for this very nice review, Lori, and the extra stars, too! I totally appreciate your generosity on both fronts. xoxox
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Rachelle,
Well, it took enough time, and the patience of Job, but it sounds like you might finally be rid of Jane. What a piece of work she is.
It would seem to me that Rebekah would be overwhelmed with the prospect of jumping full scale into learning about the music industry. I never realized things like posture came into being, but then, I don't know anything about the process.
I don't understand the whole muting process. It seems kind of infantile. It runs in my mind that someone wanted me to join them in muting someone, but I'm not into playing games. I don't have the time or interest in doing anything like that. We're supposed to be honing our skills here. Oh well. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Hello Rachelle,
Well, it took enough time, and the patience of Job, but it sounds like you might finally be rid of Jane. What a piece of work she is.
It would seem to me that Rebekah would be overwhelmed with the prospect of jumping full scale into learning about the music industry. I never realized things like posture came into being, but then, I don't know anything about the process.
I don't understand the whole muting process. It seems kind of infantile. It runs in my mind that someone wanted me to join them in muting someone, but I'm not into playing games. I don't have the time or interest in doing anything like that. We're supposed to be honing our skills here. Oh well. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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I think the Muting system for a WRITING site is about as stupid as it can possibly be. I mean - we're WRITERS!! We're supposed to be able to be masterful with our words, right? So, instead of using your words when someone rankles you, you go radio silent? Why? Are you too inept with your words to talk it through? Or how about this: just IGNORE them. But to "mute" someone - like what are you, Amish? They call their act like that "shunning" - as in, you've been bad - but it amounts to the same thing. And now to hear that someone contacted you to join IN on it? Pa-THET-ic!!
Anyway, I have bad news for you. Read Gretchen's version of this chapter. Jane's not as gone as we'd hoped. Gretchen's heart is WAY more tender than mine. (And she has way fewer Mutes, too! In fact, it wouldn't surprise me if she has none!!)
Thanks for the review, Tom. It's always a pleasure to hear from you.
xoxoxo
Comment from lyenochka
Really? That's a poor limo driver indeed!
I'm also sorry to learn that you've been muted. How do you know? They don't inform you. I have muted one person who claims he reads but never reviews my work. I never heard from him so I doubt he actually read my work. Another I muted because he actually copied word for word another writer's poem. Is it possible accidentally? Maybe.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Really? That's a poor limo driver indeed!
I'm also sorry to learn that you've been muted. How do you know? They don't inform you. I have muted one person who claims he reads but never reviews my work. I never heard from him so I doubt he actually read my work. Another I muted because he actually copied word for word another writer's poem. Is it possible accidentally? Maybe.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I know because when I tried to read their work, I receive a little banner that tells me I am not able to do so. Definitely no "accident." I rankled one person, who then cried I'm A Victim to the masses, and next thing I knew, six of her buddies did likewise. I find it amusing that purportedly "strong, independent women" present like a clique of eighth grade girls. But I file it under "WHATever!" and use it as a running joke. One member joined in on the frivolity and suggested I set as my goal to get every last FS member to mute me. I would be legend. lol
Myself, I don't mute anyone. As nice as you are, though, Helen, I think it speaks volumes more about those two people you muted than it does about you. You're kind and considerate to everyone and always give people the benefit of the doubt.
Anyway, thank you for reviewing this. I hope you check out Gretchen's version, though, because it changes the ending drastically.
xoxox
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Yes, I did check out hers. I liked that yours had more about Rebekah as you would have that special connection with her. From hers, I thought that the communication from Tova was while you were driving so I'm relieved that it was only after you stopped.
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No, I am definitely NOT a distracted driver!! I'm in the car all day when I'm not in lessons, so I absolutely know better than that!! xoxo
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Good for you! Your students depend on you to arrive safely!
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Yes; good point.
Comment from judiverse
I enjoyed the way you handled the good-byes of Rachelle and Rebekah. It sounds like they will have a lifetime attachment. Rebekah will have a wonderful environment in which to study voice, so different from her home. She will definitely make it has her teacher is definitely in her corner. It looks like they've found a solution to the Jane problem. A limousine is being sent for her? that's going to great lengths to be rid of her. No wonder Rachelle has misgivings about how she would be received at the FS Convention. Absolutely love the story, but I'm going to want to know what happens at the Convention. judi
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed the way you handled the good-byes of Rachelle and Rebekah. It sounds like they will have a lifetime attachment. Rebekah will have a wonderful environment in which to study voice, so different from her home. She will definitely make it has her teacher is definitely in her corner. It looks like they've found a solution to the Jane problem. A limousine is being sent for her? that's going to great lengths to be rid of her. No wonder Rachelle has misgivings about how she would be received at the FS Convention. Absolutely love the story, but I'm going to want to know what happens at the Convention. judi
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Oh, believe me, you'll not just KNOW what happens, you'll be able to participate!! Can't wait to see you there!!
And as far as the limo, read Gretchen's version of this chapter. Read it and weep. xoxox
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I would love to be there! I haven't read Gretchen's post yet. I'm in a snit because no one is reading my latest script. I'll get to it tomorrow when I'm in a better mood. judi
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Even though I've spent a lifetime in the creative and performing arts, I don't love reading scripts that I'm not going to be performing. That's why I haven't done so myself. But I love your work, so I'll go do that next. I can't be contributing to my beloved and talented friend, Judi, being in a snit!!!
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Thanks so much for your support. I think a lot of people feel the same way. That's probably why there aren't many script writers on the site. I like writing scripts because I don't have to go into all the details about setting, etc. A lot of it's left to the actors and directors. judi
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Thanks so much for your support. I think a lot of people feel the same way. That's probably why there aren't many script writers on the site. I like writing scripts because I don't have to go into all the details about setting, etc. A lot of it's left to the actors and directors. judi
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Yes, as I was reading it, that point dawned on me. What I found, though, was that once I got into, I wasn't as distracted as I thought I'd be by the stage cues. Previously, I considered them interruptions, but I changed my mindset and just went with the flow, and then it became a non-issue.
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If you have too many stage directions, directors will change them and actors will come up with their own. I've had some one-act plays performed at the college where I taught, and they were so good about following the directions in the script. The director didn't want me around during rehearsals. though. judi
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That would probably be intimidating. But at least he was true to your directions.
Comment from Carol Clark2
I was thinking the same thing: Limo driver???! What happened to the bus?
Sometimes a girl's gotta do what she needs to do! I would imagine the rest of the trip will be plenty peaceful without Jane's whiiiiiing. At least Maria is in good hands. Good chapter!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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I was thinking the same thing: Limo driver???! What happened to the bus?
Sometimes a girl's gotta do what she needs to do! I would imagine the rest of the trip will be plenty peaceful without Jane's whiiiiiing. At least Maria is in good hands. Good chapter!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Wait - don't get too excited. You've got to read Gretchen's version. It'll break your heart.
Thank you for this delightful review, though; I do appreciate it very much. xoxoxo
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You're welcome. I'll look for Gretchen's version. Thanks.
Comment from Wendy G
For the ways you look after Rebekah and for the way you have stood up to Jane - six stars. Love the dialogue in both areas. There are the not so subtle comments about your being muted - goodness, you must have rubbed a lot of people up the wrong way! Oh dear!
And Jane has been properly disposed of - six stars for that too.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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For the ways you look after Rebekah and for the way you have stood up to Jane - six stars. Love the dialogue in both areas. There are the not so subtle comments about your being muted - goodness, you must have rubbed a lot of people up the wrong way! Oh dear!
And Jane has been properly disposed of - six stars for that too.
Wendy
Comment Written 13-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Actually, I rubbed one person the wrong way, and the attendant minions - some of whom I don't even know or have never even once read or reviewed - followed suit! I find it fascinating that people who look for all the world like grown, independent women actually conduct their lives according to others' edicts. As the kids say: WHATever!!
Anyway, don't be so sure about Jane's disposition!! There are kinder people on the trip than I who fold. (And we were SOOOO close, too!!)
Thanks for the extra stars, Wendy!!
xoxoxo
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Oh dear me. Gretchen is TOO NICE!
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Isn't she, though? Must be that Southern Hospitality thing...
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Lol. Yes, perhaps ...