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Viewing comments for Chapter 34 "End of the Road For Jane"Two very real women in not so real situation.
24 total reviews
Comment from Neonewman
Oh. My. Gosh. We have Sodom and Gomorrah in the backseat. This was the best description for Jane Babie.
Low-Class Dixie Chick! Hella funny.
This was a long time coming, and I love how you put her in her place.
Outstanding chapter, Gretchen.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Oh. My. Gosh. We have Sodom and Gomorrah in the backseat. This was the best description for Jane Babie.
Low-Class Dixie Chick! Hella funny.
This was a long time coming, and I love how you put her in her place.
Outstanding chapter, Gretchen.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. Sodom and Gomorrah was the only Southern Baptist thing I could come up with. Lol. Gretchen
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Well, that nailed it! Fit perfectly.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hahaha.... I'm so happy you put Jane in her place. I know she is a fictional character but I met a few in my life. Luckily I don't fall for their manipulative tactics. I wonder if she has acted in some oof her daddy's porno films.... ew.
Well done, we must be getting close to the end.
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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Hahaha.... I'm so happy you put Jane in her place. I know she is a fictional character but I met a few in my life. Luckily I don't fall for their manipulative tactics. I wonder if she has acted in some oof her daddy's porno films.... ew.
Well done, we must be getting close to the end.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 19-Oct-2024
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She is a disgusting piece of work. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
The phrase that caught my attention is "low down Dixie Chick." As of these days, there is nothing much lower than a Dixie Chick. They damaged themselves so badly, they had to change their name to "Chicks." Jane is a pain, for sure. A limo would be a great place for her as long as she has to pay.
Robert
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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The phrase that caught my attention is "low down Dixie Chick." As of these days, there is nothing much lower than a Dixie Chick. They damaged themselves so badly, they had to change their name to "Chicks." Jane is a pain, for sure. A limo would be a great place for her as long as she has to pay.
Robert
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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I'm not a fan of theirs but I don't like people telling me their political views. But Jane is still on the chopping block so she needs to behave or find another ride. Gretchen
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Make her pay for the limo. She will be even madder.
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your down-to-earth, non-pretentious personality comes through in your writing with statements like this..."I have to look out the window so I don't start laughing," and "Oh. My. Gosh. We have Sodom and Gomorrah in the backseat."
Googling Jane to find out her background was a creative addition to the story that adds another aspect to follow. I look forward to your next episode.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Your down-to-earth, non-pretentious personality comes through in your writing with statements like this..."I have to look out the window so I don't start laughing," and "Oh. My. Gosh. We have Sodom and Gomorrah in the backseat."
Googling Jane to find out her background was a creative addition to the story that adds another aspect to follow. I look forward to your next episode.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. You're the only one to catch or appreciate the Soddom and Gomorrah remark. So, thank you. I appreciate this fun review. Gretchen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
You have done an excellent job of making it very clear how difficult Jane is. Just think what it would be like to have a father who tried you out in a couple of porn movies to see if you were a "natural".
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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You have done an excellent job of making it very clear how difficult Jane is. Just think what it would be like to have a father who tried you out in a couple of porn movies to see if you were a "natural".
Comment Written 16-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Jane is definitely over the top. Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
this was an interesting look at Jane's backround. It would probably at least explain her foul language and interest in writing pornographic prose. However, it doesn't excuse it. Many people are dealt a large bag of caca in their lives, but they manage to make something good out of it. Thanks for sharing this gal. I'm interested in seeing where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Hello Gretchen,
this was an interesting look at Jane's backround. It would probably at least explain her foul language and interest in writing pornographic prose. However, it doesn't excuse it. Many people are dealt a large bag of caca in their lives, but they manage to make something good out of it. Thanks for sharing this gal. I'm interested in seeing where this goes.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much. Gretchen
Comment from Sankey
Finally got around to reading this right through. Very good as usual. I need to get more of my video stuff up. Dropped my beloved Nikon camera the other day. Hoping they can fix it for me.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Finally got around to reading this right through. Very good as usual. I need to get more of my video stuff up. Dropped my beloved Nikon camera the other day. Hoping they can fix it for me.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Hope your camera gets fixed quickly. Thank you so much for this. Gretchen
Comment from Jim Wile
Alright, Gretchen! You figured out what Jane is all about now. How kind of you, though, not to foist her onto an innocent limo driver. This was another great and humorous chapter in this story, and now it sounds like she might make it to the FanStory convention after all. That will be a hoot if that comes to pass.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Alright, Gretchen! You figured out what Jane is all about now. How kind of you, though, not to foist her onto an innocent limo driver. This was another great and humorous chapter in this story, and now it sounds like she might make it to the FanStory convention after all. That will be a hoot if that comes to pass.
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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She will get there, just might not be with Rachelle and me. Lol. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
What a laugh! Our Miss Irritating is the heir apparent to a pornography kingdom.. That was a fab characterisation. And she flaunts it too ! Anyway what follows could be entertaining..
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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What a laugh! Our Miss Irritating is the heir apparent to a pornography kingdom.. That was a fab characterisation. And she flaunts it too ! Anyway what follows could be entertaining..
Comment Written 15-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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She's a piece of work. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This sort of gives of background information on why Jane is a pain, but it's still no excuse. I am really liking this story. You and Rachelle work well together.
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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This sort of gives of background information on why Jane is a pain, but it's still no excuse. I am really liking this story. You and Rachelle work well together.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Barbara. Gretchen