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2024 Japanese Poetry

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Comment from lyenochka
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That is so sad when the birds which mate for life are left alone. Their calls would definitely be the "sound of loneliness"! Great job with this haiku with the lovely pictures!

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024

reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
    Big Sister,

    Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my poem. 😊

    love,

    marival
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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This is a poignant one in which that beautiful bird seems to have been abandoned and alone, left behind to mourn the loss of his mate. We can almost hear his echoing call. Thank you for sharing, Gypsy. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much 😊

    Gypsy
Comment from Wendy G
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This is poignant and meaningful, and often reflects the life of people as well, perhaps especially as they age. Beautiful words and presentation.
Wendy

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much 😊

    Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
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wow i didn't think haiku could be more than 17

poor blue jay
left behind
i feel him---
a great haiku
with deep emotions,
great imagery.
and smooth flow

thank you for sharing!
shelley :)

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much 😊

    It's classic haiku so it should be 17 syllables or less in 3 lines. I got carried away lol I fixed it.

    Modern Haiku is 1 to 4 lines with no syllables limit but as brief as possible. Thank you 😊

    Gypsy
Comment from RJ Heritage
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I love to see the Blue Jay, they are so brilliant, so much like the sky in thier heavenly plumage. Rich and breathtaking colored that are complimented by your beautiful verses. Thanks for sharing.
RJ

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much 😊

    Gypsy
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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We have numerous Blue Jays in our backyard year-round. They are beautiful but very loud birds, and really not very nice. They don't appear to share well with others. I enjoyed reading your poem and the presentation.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much 😊

    Gypsy
Comment from Jacob1395
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This is a really sad piece, I could feel the loss and the blue jay's heart aching for another blue jay to be with him. This is something, sadly, I think, many people can relate to as well. An excellent piece.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much 😊

    Gypsy
Comment from royowen
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There seems to be a number animal and bird species that this complex social system that we have, but they must birds that get lost, such a sad and, as always, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2024

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2024
    Thank you very much 😊

    Gypsy