Awake
Writing in the midst of a noisy night.12 total reviews
Comment from Nicki.B
I really enjoyed this 3-6-9 , I think may of us can relate to symphony next to us in the bed lol! I love what you did bring in the sounds of night and morning. Good luck with the contest!
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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I really enjoyed this 3-6-9 , I think may of us can relate to symphony next to us in the bed lol! I love what you did bring in the sounds of night and morning. Good luck with the contest!
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 16-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Nicki, it's funny how we all just come up with random things depending on what's going on that inspires creativity.
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That's so very true Lana!!! x
Comment from Tim Margetts
Don't you just hate it when inconsiderate owls and snoring bed buddies disturb the creative process.
In my case its either the dogs snoring or the cats purrs messing with my thoughts.
Great poem and good luck.
Tim
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Don't you just hate it when inconsiderate owls and snoring bed buddies disturb the creative process.
In my case its either the dogs snoring or the cats purrs messing with my thoughts.
Great poem and good luck.
Tim
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Tim, we used to have an owl that I could hear every night and I haven't heard him lately so I miss his hooting. But kitty and doggy cuddles are the next best interruptions or inspirations.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are interesting, clear and creative. The poem flows
and connects well. I liked the format the author used along with the
background color. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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The author's words are interesting, clear and creative. The poem flows
and connects well. I liked the format the author used along with the
background color. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your detail review. I took that picture while my hubby was sleeping. I'm glad that you liked it.
Comment from royowen
I do a lot of my writing and reviewing while my wife sleeps quietly by my side, it really helps to know she's here, and that God's silent presence is likewise here. A beautifully composed and written entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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I do a lot of my writing and reviewing while my wife sleeps quietly by my side, it really helps to know she's here, and that God's silent presence is likewise here. A beautifully composed and written entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Roy, it is peaceful having your spouse sleeping next to you while you're awake hoping to be able to write a piece that others will appreciate. And it's often times in God's presence that I too get inspired.
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She's asleep now, it's 5:00 am here.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This all sounds vaguely familiar to me lol This is a good entry for the 3-6-9 contest. I think writers and creative people in general must get the worst sleep of anyone! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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This all sounds vaguely familiar to me lol This is a good entry for the 3-6-9 contest. I think writers and creative people in general must get the worst sleep of anyone! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2024
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Thank you. Yes I can imagine how many of us Stay awake or wake up with an idea of what to write about.
Comment from EeanBlack
You should find poetry in that snoring thing beside you. The rules are simple. Listen to anyone except me. This is a wonderful place to try new types of writing. You will figure out the politics and who those trusted few are. We all have our own style. Make them like you. don't just leave it up to them. Be bold. Good luck. I look forward to reading.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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You should find poetry in that snoring thing beside you. The rules are simple. Listen to anyone except me. This is a wonderful place to try new types of writing. You will figure out the politics and who those trusted few are. We all have our own style. Make them like you. don't just leave it up to them. Be bold. Good luck. I look forward to reading.
Comment Written 15-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Yes, that's funny, because apparently I did find poetry in the snoring because of the snoring. Thank you for your review.
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Any time.
Comment from DonandVicki
A nice composition,Lana. Do I get a sense of irritation at the interruption of your creativity in the second stanza? Good luck in the contest, I have an entry as well: "Shrouded". May we both do well.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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A nice composition,Lana. Do I get a sense of irritation at the interruption of your creativity in the second stanza? Good luck in the contest, I have an entry as well: "Shrouded". May we both do well.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you, I'll have to look yours up as well. I wasn't really quite irritated, but it worked out well to add that to a second but yes, there are times where different noises interrupt my thought process.
Comment from ESOSTINE
I love how you capture the atmosphere around you in the poem. All the three verses are perfectly rendered and reflect the feeling around me. Well done, dear Lana. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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I love how you capture the atmosphere around you in the poem. All the three verses are perfectly rendered and reflect the feeling around me. Well done, dear Lana. Great job. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your review, well wishes and your kind words.
Comment from Zach Gallows
Very relatable. Nothing quite like lying awake with ideas racing through your head only to be interrupted by all the outside distractions. Good structure, follows the scheme perfectly. Not sure if it needs to rhyme but you did rhyme every third line which I enjoyed.
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Very relatable. Nothing quite like lying awake with ideas racing through your head only to be interrupted by all the outside distractions. Good structure, follows the scheme perfectly. Not sure if it needs to rhyme but you did rhyme every third line which I enjoyed.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you kindly, sir. I'm happy you enjoyed it!
Comment from Sally Law
Hey, you! It's so great to see you on FanStory, Lana Marie! Welcome back! A great poem in a most challenging form. Sounds strikingly similar to my life, LOL! Looks like a ribbon winner to me. Again, welcome back, and my best wishes in the contest.
Take care!
Love,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Hey, you! It's so great to see you on FanStory, Lana Marie! Welcome back! A great poem in a most challenging form. Sounds strikingly similar to my life, LOL! Looks like a ribbon winner to me. Again, welcome back, and my best wishes in the contest.
Take care!
Love,
Sal :))
Comment Written 14-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 15-Nov-2024
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Thank you, Sally! I've been meaning to come back for a while, but life excuses got in the way and one day I just decided, regardless of how busy life can be, I needed to try again because I hadn't been being too creative. Thank you for the review and your kind words and your enthusiastic welcome! I'm glad to be back.
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Most welcome! :)) Sal
