Snuggle
couple cuddling by the fireplace as snow falls5 total reviews
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Certainly one very good side effect of the cold winter weather, yeah? :-) Wonderful entry for this limited form and best of luck to you in the competition! ;)
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Certainly one very good side effect of the cold winter weather, yeah? :-) Wonderful entry for this limited form and best of luck to you in the competition! ;)
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This is a great 5-7-9 poem. The 3 lines send a power message of love on a cold wintery night. The picture you chose is perfect for the poem.
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
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This is a great 5-7-9 poem. The 3 lines send a power message of love on a cold wintery night. The picture you chose is perfect for the poem.
Great job and good luck in your contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
you might want to have a recheck on your syllable count here.
The second line only has 6 syllables rather than the required 7.
You might want to recheck the first line as well as most syllable counters have fire as a single syllable which would only give you 4 in the first line as well.
All the best
gmg
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Hi there,
you might want to have a recheck on your syllable count here.
The second line only has 6 syllables rather than the required 7.
You might want to recheck the first line as well as most syllable counters have fire as a single syllable which would only give you 4 in the first line as well.
All the best
gmg
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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giraffmang,
Thank you for your helpful review. I noted and corrected the syllable count in lines 1 and 2 to meet the contest requirements.
All the best,
BB50
Comment from SimianSavant
**rating revised up after edits by author. Further opportunity to improve this with formatting and titling **
Hey there, your first line has too many syllables and does not comply with contest rules. It should be five, but you have six. I also suggest doing a bit more with the formatting to make your entry stand out a bit visually. Maybe a dark background with orange or yellow text, to make your words like the fire light. Let me know if you revise so I can revisit the rating.
Regards,
🦍
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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**rating revised up after edits by author. Further opportunity to improve this with formatting and titling **
Hey there, your first line has too many syllables and does not comply with contest rules. It should be five, but you have six. I also suggest doing a bit more with the formatting to make your entry stand out a bit visually. Maybe a dark background with orange or yellow text, to make your words like the fire light. Let me know if you revise so I can revisit the rating.
Regards,
🦍
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Simian,
Thank you for your helpful review. I noted and corrected the syllable count in line 1 and revised the poem to meet the contest requirements.
All the best,
BB50
Comment from ESOSTINE
I love your word play here. Your beautiful poem tells a tale of romance by the fire side in the cold of winter. Consider taking a second look at the syllable count of the first line. Thanks for sharing your creative work. Best regards.
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I love your word play here. Your beautiful poem tells a tale of romance by the fire side in the cold of winter. Consider taking a second look at the syllable count of the first line. Thanks for sharing your creative work. Best regards.
Comment Written 20-Nov-2024