It's Called Spam
Can a mother dupe her own son?2 total reviews
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
CM,
This is a great story of family life in the 60's and 70's. I grew up poor and more often than not we had some of that fancy ham and wonderful cubed steak. Unlike you I like wax beens. You are a very good writer. Don't ever doubt yourself.
I have one suggestion and I found one misplaced period.
The house and the land came complete with a list of never-ending chores, ranging from cutting grass to painting fences, trimming trees and bushes to hand digging the basement, the latter being a story itself. ---I would suggest breaking this sentence up as it stands it's a run on sentence.
sugar on top(. )of them.
Well done and good luck in the contest
Cecilia
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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CM,
This is a great story of family life in the 60's and 70's. I grew up poor and more often than not we had some of that fancy ham and wonderful cubed steak. Unlike you I like wax beens. You are a very good writer. Don't ever doubt yourself.
I have one suggestion and I found one misplaced period.
The house and the land came complete with a list of never-ending chores, ranging from cutting grass to painting fences, trimming trees and bushes to hand digging the basement, the latter being a story itself. ---I would suggest breaking this sentence up as it stands it's a run on sentence.
sugar on top(. )of them.
Well done and good luck in the contest
Cecilia
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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Thanks for taking the time to submit a review and pointing out some improvements
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CM,
You are welcome.
Cecilia
Comment from Sarah Probe S.
thanks a million for such a poignant nostalgic story, about childhood memories ( this has left me captivated until the last paragraph ) despite of your lack of experience in English littérature, You have been able to trigger the emotions of your reader here,
Well done,
Many thanks
Sarah
Sarah
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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thanks a million for such a poignant nostalgic story, about childhood memories ( this has left me captivated until the last paragraph ) despite of your lack of experience in English littérature, You have been able to trigger the emotions of your reader here,
Well done,
Many thanks
Sarah
Sarah
Comment Written 27-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2024
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good good ; ) we encourage You to write 💎🩵