Tattered Vision
For the cloth can never be whole . . .31 total reviews
Comment from poetwatch
What you wrote is very true, Yvette. When feeling lonely and blue what memory stirs hopefully is a happy one. :) Yet, most times it just cuts even deeper. That's when a sip or three makes me happy. :) Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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What you wrote is very true, Yvette. When feeling lonely and blue what memory stirs hopefully is a happy one. :) Yet, most times it just cuts even deeper. That's when a sip or three makes me happy. :) Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Always so good to hear from you, Jose, and thanx much for the review here... I see that you feel where I was coming from... Been away with the hustle of the holidays -- had a little time this morning, but now it's back to the 'busy-ness' (and work!)!! Take care and Merry Christmas!! ;) Yvette
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-4-2, Tattered Vision, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that time is an investment that pays us back through memories and recollections for life.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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This 2-4-2, Tattered Vision, has the proper formatting and reminds the readers that time is an investment that pays us back through memories and recollections for life.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanx so much for stopping in on this one, sir -- so good to hear from you!! ;) Merry Christmas! ;) Yvette
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
The image seems perfect for the words you've written, as so many of the colorful lights of Christmas look sharp enough to cut. And these shards contain memories that travel back to us through time.
A lovely thought for this contest. Good luck.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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The image seems perfect for the words you've written, as so many of the colorful lights of Christmas look sharp enough to cut. And these shards contain memories that travel back to us through time.
A lovely thought for this contest. Good luck.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanx for your review on this one, Pam -- appreciated you stopping by and invite you to stop by any time!! ;) Merry Christmas! :-)
Comment from Sue Smith
You've used the imagery of shards piercing emotions very well in this poem. My only comment is that I like to read a poem aloud before I comment and that was difficult as I automatically pronounced memories with 3 syllables, which then ruins your syllable count for that line (it makes it 5). But that aside you've managed to convey a lot in very few words
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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You've used the imagery of shards piercing emotions very well in this poem. My only comment is that I like to read a poem aloud before I comment and that was difficult as I automatically pronounced memories with 3 syllables, which then ruins your syllable count for that line (it makes it 5). But that aside you've managed to convey a lot in very few words
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Thank you
Comment from TPAC
Memories do have their existence, accompanying us throughout life. A good, bad and ugly presentation of sides: or veils. I found it to be a profound shout. All in my stated viewpoint.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Memories do have their existence, accompanying us throughout life. A good, bad and ugly presentation of sides: or veils. I found it to be a profound shout. All in my stated viewpoint.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2024
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Thanx so much for stopping in on this one. Have a great day! :-)
Comment from Nicki.B
This is beautiful, very carefully chosen words to express such a lovely message. And I also see where you are coming from with ignoring the dark shards, avoid the negativity at all costs lol!
Good luck with the contest it will be a great runner!
Best Wishes
Nicki x
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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This is beautiful, very carefully chosen words to express such a lovely message. And I also see where you are coming from with ignoring the dark shards, avoid the negativity at all costs lol!
Good luck with the contest it will be a great runner!
Best Wishes
Nicki x
Comment Written 14-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanx for your review on this one, Nicki -- appreciated you stopping by and invite you to stop by any time!! ;) And I apologize for the delay, but with the hours at the store (crazy time of year!!) and getting ready for Christmas, I've been away from the computer longer than usual! ;-) :-) You take care out there and Merry Christmas! ;)
Comment from Trina Layne
Ooh ... This is quite nice! Just a little bit of light in the darkness can make a world of difference. Congrats on your writing and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Ooh ... This is quite nice! Just a little bit of light in the darkness can make a world of difference. Congrats on your writing and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanx for your review on this one, Trina -- appreciated you stopping by and invite you to stop by any time!! ;) And I apologize for the delay, but with the hours at the store (crazy time of year!!) and getting ready for Christmas, I've been away from the computer longer than usual! ;-) :-) You take care out there and Merry Christmas! ;)
Comment from kahpot
Well, if this is what crazy is I want in, yes, memories do take us back in time, and hopefully for the best, but not always unfortunately, a beautifully written and presented 2-4-2 poem, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Well, if this is what crazy is I want in, yes, memories do take us back in time, and hopefully for the best, but not always unfortunately, a beautifully written and presented 2-4-2 poem, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Hey -- everyone's always welcome .... although, I warn you, the blonde crazy is a special kind (lol!)! ;) Thanx so much for the review, sir -- always good to hear from you... And I apologize for the delay, but with the hours at the store (crazy time of year!!) and getting ready for Christmas, I've been away from the computer longer than usual! ;-) :-) You take care out there and Merry Christmas! ;) Yvette
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This concise verse brings up something that would be doctrinal, so to speak, with a reference "time's veil." Those glimmers of brilliance, even in 'bright shards,' must pull on many if not all of us at different times of life, so that we start to remember something better, even if it is just in this earthly set of experiences.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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This concise verse brings up something that would be doctrinal, so to speak, with a reference "time's veil." Those glimmers of brilliance, even in 'bright shards,' must pull on many if not all of us at different times of life, so that we start to remember something better, even if it is just in this earthly set of experiences.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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You always provide me such thoughtful and, yes, insightful reviews, my lady, and I am so very grateful... thank you!! :-) And I apologize for the delay, but with the hours at the store (crazy time of year!!) and getting ready for Christmas, I've been away from the computer longer than usual! ;-) :-) You take care out there and Merry Christmas! ;) Yvette
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I find the sad memories come through when my arthritis is giving me hell, it's like they kick me when I'm down, but you, crazy blonde poet, have said it creatively in your 2-4-2 poem. Loved both the verse and the notes, LOL.
cheers
valda
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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I find the sad memories come through when my arthritis is giving me hell, it's like they kick me when I'm down, but you, crazy blonde poet, have said it creatively in your 2-4-2 poem. Loved both the verse and the notes, LOL.
cheers
valda
Comment Written 12-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thanx so much for your review and your understanding on this one, my lady -- so glad I could put a smile on that beautiful face of yours! ;) And I apologize for the delay, but with the hours at the store (crazy time of year!!) and getting ready for Christmas, I've been away from the computer longer than usual! ;-) :-) You take care out there and Merry Christmas! ;) Yvette