Willing Hearts
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Comment from Douglas Goff
I would take a cheeseburger girl anytime. Ha!
Great chapter. Lots of losse ends getting tied in. Also very realistic as far as the chain of events in a sec trafficking scheme.
Great job here!
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I would take a cheeseburger girl anytime. Ha!
Great chapter. Lots of losse ends getting tied in. Also very realistic as far as the chain of events in a sec trafficking scheme.
Great job here!
D
Comment Written 16-Dec-2024
Comment from Wendy G
A fine chapter! A lovely visit first off, and then a very difficult one, but it is good that Sami is interested in looking after Myra, although it will be an ongoing risk for her with those who want vengeance. And she is young and inexperienced with the requirements of being a foster carer for those who have been through significant trauma. Well told.
Wendy
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A fine chapter! A lovely visit first off, and then a very difficult one, but it is good that Sami is interested in looking after Myra, although it will be an ongoing risk for her with those who want vengeance. And she is young and inexperienced with the requirements of being a foster carer for those who have been through significant trauma. Well told.
Wendy
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I think her young age and Myra's deep needs would weigh against her. As well as Noah not wanting Sami to go places by herself. Noah cannot take on anymore. And as long as he is in the FBI his time is not his own. It really could never work. However, she could help out with whoever does take care of her. Karen
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I think her young age and Myra's deep needs would weigh against her. As well as Noah not wanting Sami to go places by herself. Noah cannot take on anymore. And as long as he is in the FBI his time is not his own. It really could never work. However, she could help out with whoever does take care of her. Karen
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
Comment from judiverse
Great chapter. I especially liked Amber's dialogue. She sounded so natural. I figure there will be more about her, or you wouldn't have brought her in at this point. You might want to include Amber in the dialogue. You might want to check your punctuation in this: "three grandchildren, two boys and one girl. Makes it sound like 6 total. Maybe a dash instead of a comma after grandchildren. Very touching visit with Myra at the hospital. She was really badly treated when she was being held. Seems a lot of responsibility for Sami to be her foster parent, as she is so young. It would certainly please Myra. judi
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Great chapter. I especially liked Amber's dialogue. She sounded so natural. I figure there will be more about her, or you wouldn't have brought her in at this point. You might want to include Amber in the dialogue. You might want to check your punctuation in this: "three grandchildren, two boys and one girl. Makes it sound like 6 total. Maybe a dash instead of a comma after grandchildren. Very touching visit with Myra at the hospital. She was really badly treated when she was being held. Seems a lot of responsibility for Sami to be her foster parent, as she is so young. It would certainly please Myra. judi
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
Comment from jim vecchio
This was excellent reading, as are all your chapters. These two visits revealed much and showcased Noah and Sami's commitment to each other. I appreciate your prose which could have included many expletives, but you took the creative way out.
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This was excellent reading, as are all your chapters. These two visits revealed much and showcased Noah and Sami's commitment to each other. I appreciate your prose which could have included many expletives, but you took the creative way out.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
Comment from estory
The future is starting to take shape in this chapter for Sami and Noah. First she gets some encouragement from Amber and some advice, to stay focused on the relationship and not let work interfere with it. Noah seems to take it to heart too. There's a couple of little technical things like repeating "moisture filled their eyes" consecutively that I think seem a little awkward, but that's an easy fix in editing. The dialogue is pretty realistic, as always, although the characters seem a little quick to tears, especially for people who don't really have that close of a relationship, but that can be fixed too. The real step is when Sami starts considering adopting Myra, and as the social worker suggests her application would fare better as a couple, Noah quickly steps in and gives his support. So we can see them in the future as foster parents for this battered and damaged girl. Like I said, we see the future taking shape in front of them here. estory
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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The future is starting to take shape in this chapter for Sami and Noah. First she gets some encouragement from Amber and some advice, to stay focused on the relationship and not let work interfere with it. Noah seems to take it to heart too. There's a couple of little technical things like repeating "moisture filled their eyes" consecutively that I think seem a little awkward, but that's an easy fix in editing. The dialogue is pretty realistic, as always, although the characters seem a little quick to tears, especially for people who don't really have that close of a relationship, but that can be fixed too. The real step is when Sami starts considering adopting Myra, and as the social worker suggests her application would fare better as a couple, Noah quickly steps in and gives his support. So we can see them in the future as foster parents for this battered and damaged girl. Like I said, we see the future taking shape in front of them here. estory
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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I'll take a look at that. I added a moisture filled eyes as I posted. Probably need to remove it. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Aw Barbara, this was a lovely chapter, regardless of all the heartbreak within. Now, Noah is taking Sami out for a treat. I'm really looking forward to that. Great writing and story. Hugs, Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Aw Barbara, this was a lovely chapter, regardless of all the heartbreak within. Now, Noah is taking Sami out for a treat. I'm really looking forward to that. Great writing and story. Hugs, Ulla xcx
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Barbra,
This is a great chapter to your book. Poor Myra she has a long way to go. I vaguely remember the chapter where she was rescued.
I don't know why when you write I don't get notified.
Well done my friend.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Barbra,
This is a great chapter to your book. Poor Myra she has a long way to go. I vaguely remember the chapter where she was rescued.
I don't know why when you write I don't get notified.
Well done my friend.
Cecilia
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I have no idea either. If you've fanned me then maybe need to ask Tom.
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You're welcome. I will reach out to Tom and find out why.
Comment from Begin Again
I wonder if Sami would have had the strenth to be with Myra if it hadn't been for Noah. He seems to be the cement in her foundation now. Very good chapter. The truth in the girls recovery sends chills through me.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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I wonder if Sami would have had the strenth to be with Myra if it hadn't been for Noah. He seems to be the cement in her foundation now. Very good chapter. The truth in the girls recovery sends chills through me.
Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
An interesting chapter. I am used to how Sami (female leads) are portrayed emotionally now. The writing is solid and nothing amiss stood out.
notes:
"I can't answer that. There's evidence she engaged in rough sex. Most girls at gentlemen's club engaged in sex."
-Wait. How is the doctor telling her any of this? He'd lose his job.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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An interesting chapter. I am used to how Sami (female leads) are portrayed emotionally now. The writing is solid and nothing amiss stood out.
notes:
"I can't answer that. There's evidence she engaged in rough sex. Most girls at gentlemen's club engaged in sex."
-Wait. How is the doctor telling her any of this? He'd lose his job.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.