Because of Mary
It would be a teenage peasant girl that God would choose.11 total reviews
Comment from evilynne
A very interesting and thought-provoking poem. I am not sure I understand all of this, but is certainly well stated overall. Best of luck in the contest and Merry Christmas! Evi
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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A very interesting and thought-provoking poem. I am not sure I understand all of this, but is certainly well stated overall. Best of luck in the contest and Merry Christmas! Evi
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2024
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Thank you Evilynne. It won the contest!-bill stephenson
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Congrats! Evi
Comment from karenina
Oh...this is very wise! Labels slip away, scorn is silenced...
Who among us would have welcomed the thought of a fifteen year old virgin...impregnated and carrying the son of God?
(She must be on Fentanyl)
Walls would be built! Birther-baby crises would be debated.
Faith would sear the cable news wire!
Jesus was born homeless...
How many would loudly declare there is no room at the inn?
Hypocrisy is an icy altar, isn't it?
Way to turn the mirror and show us our reflection!
Sardonic and sharp as a switchblade.
Brilliant!
Karenina
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Oh...this is very wise! Labels slip away, scorn is silenced...
Who among us would have welcomed the thought of a fifteen year old virgin...impregnated and carrying the son of God?
(She must be on Fentanyl)
Walls would be built! Birther-baby crises would be debated.
Faith would sear the cable news wire!
Jesus was born homeless...
How many would loudly declare there is no room at the inn?
Hypocrisy is an icy altar, isn't it?
Way to turn the mirror and show us our reflection!
Sardonic and sharp as a switchblade.
Brilliant!
Karenina
Comment Written 20-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Karenina, you could have written this! What a wonderful review. Thank you.-
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No...but you wrote it so well I fe!t inspired!
Comment from Teri7
Bill, This is a very well written Free Form Christmas poem about the Marys of this world today. I still say Jesus is the Reason for the Season in my eyes. Everyone has their own opinion. This was a great poem my friend. Thank you for sharing. love, blessings and Merry Christmas! Teri
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Bill, This is a very well written Free Form Christmas poem about the Marys of this world today. I still say Jesus is the Reason for the Season in my eyes. Everyone has their own opinion. This was a great poem my friend. Thank you for sharing. love, blessings and Merry Christmas! Teri
Comment Written 20-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2024
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Why they put this "out front" amazes me. This was for a contest where we were to remain anonymous. Yes F/S chose to reveal me. But Teri, thanks for your wonderful review.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I enjoyed this tribute to Mary here as she plays a key role in the nativity as the virgin Mother. A sweet and endearing poem full of faithful words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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I enjoyed this tribute to Mary here as she plays a key role in the nativity as the virgin Mother. A sweet and endearing poem full of faithful words, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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To have a premier member review is so gratifying. Thank you.
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You are most welcome x x x
Comment from DonandVicki
A very interesting poem about the return of the Messiah, these last lines brought this poem home to me: "Brace yourself.There's a birthquake coming! Because of Mary." Excellent
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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A very interesting poem about the return of the Messiah, these last lines brought this poem home to me: "Brace yourself.There's a birthquake coming! Because of Mary." Excellent
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thanks for your review. "Birthquake" is what we call an apotheosis.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
I like this original and modern take on the Virgin Mary and the reason she was chosen to show the world that we all count, even the most humble among us. The emphatic structure of your free form verse with the repetition of the line: Because of Mary - is effective in driving the message home. I also like the conversational tone of your poem which make it all very readable and engaging. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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I like this original and modern take on the Virgin Mary and the reason she was chosen to show the world that we all count, even the most humble among us. The emphatic structure of your free form verse with the repetition of the line: Because of Mary - is effective in driving the message home. I also like the conversational tone of your poem which make it all very readable and engaging. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. This was not a poem to denigrate or alter the love I have for Mary. She is such a powerful person in the Gospels. She is there at birth and at death.
Comment from nomi338
Mary's story is basically a story of trust. Mary trusted the angel of God who told her she had been chosen to bear the Messiah. Joseph trusted Mary and as a result, the greatest story ever told is repeated not every year at Christmas, this story is told over and over again, every day as new converts to Christianity are made aware of this great love story.
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Mary's story is basically a story of trust. Mary trusted the angel of God who told her she had been chosen to bear the Messiah. Joseph trusted Mary and as a result, the greatest story ever told is repeated not every year at Christmas, this story is told over and over again, every day as new converts to Christianity are made aware of this great love story.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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You are right on, It truly is a love story. A love by God to us. Thank you for a wonderful review.
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Awww, how sweet. Mary did take on quite a responsibility and had none of the trappings of the elite or well to do. She was a simple peasant girl who God chose to carry the King of all of us. She was obedient and kind.
Great job, and best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Awww, how sweet. Mary did take on quite a responsibility and had none of the trappings of the elite or well to do. She was a simple peasant girl who God chose to carry the King of all of us. She was obedient and kind.
Great job, and best of luck in the contest,
Rhonda
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Rhonda, for a wonderful review.
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You're welcome.
Comment from Avery Daniel
This was a beautiful poem! I love the continuation of the "Because of Mary..." I also really admire the way this poem sheds light on the fact we all truly matter. This was a really good poem. In my humble opinion, I would've liked a bit more about the joy Christmas brings even to the rejects, and I don't like the use of the old Buick, but it made sense you decided to do it that way, but it was pretty weird that you compared a Buick to a donkey, which I get used to be a symbol of class, but comparing it to a crappy car now was weird to me, but I respect your choice in words, just curious as to why.
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reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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This was a beautiful poem! I love the continuation of the "Because of Mary..." I also really admire the way this poem sheds light on the fact we all truly matter. This was a really good poem. In my humble opinion, I would've liked a bit more about the joy Christmas brings even to the rejects, and I don't like the use of the old Buick, but it made sense you decided to do it that way, but it was pretty weird that you compared a Buick to a donkey, which I get used to be a symbol of class, but comparing it to a crappy car now was weird to me, but I respect your choice in words, just curious as to why.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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A donkey was all that Joseph and Mary would have had. The Buick represents the invisible. They don't travel in late model cars. But both are humble forms of transportation.
Comment from Elizabeth Delaney
This is a great poem.
Great writing with powerful repetition, really drawing the attention to a deeper meaning of christmas.
Bringing into light current problems and our current societies blind eye.
Well done and Merry Christmas!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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This is a great poem.
Great writing with powerful repetition, really drawing the attention to a deeper meaning of christmas.
Bringing into light current problems and our current societies blind eye.
Well done and Merry Christmas!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Elizabeth. Now if I could get this system to honor my edits. Very frustrating.
