Australia pt2
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Comment from Gayla putnam
The story is intriguing, but this section feels slightly clunky compared to the first installment. It repeats words and phrases, such as "scared to death and laughed." You might try "frightened and giggled or chuckled." One sentence I didn't understand is:" Two of the girls were old hands at it, and me and will call her Mary were the rookies of the pack. This sentence might read better as 2 sentences. These editing suggestions are just suggestions. It's not like I am an expert myself. gayla
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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The story is intriguing, but this section feels slightly clunky compared to the first installment. It repeats words and phrases, such as "scared to death and laughed." You might try "frightened and giggled or chuckled." One sentence I didn't understand is:" Two of the girls were old hands at it, and me and will call her Mary were the rookies of the pack. This sentence might read better as 2 sentences. These editing suggestions are just suggestions. It's not like I am an expert myself. gayla
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2025
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Gayla,
Thank you for the kind review and feed back. It's interesting how people give me advice and it differs from someone else's advice. I'm
don't know you but the other authors who given me feedback on that sentence I will keep as I know them. Just saying.
Cecilia
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Queer, how similar the world can be. I had my bouts with horses, too. Riding along the post fenced line trying to scrape me off, and there are twin sisters peaks i Kodiak Alasks, too.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Queer, how similar the world can be. I had my bouts with horses, too. Riding along the post fenced line trying to scrape me off, and there are twin sisters peaks i Kodiak Alasks, too.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2025
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Tom,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I haven't been on a horse since. I'll leave those to the cowboy's.
Cecilia
Comment from Tim Margetts
Well, after the last one I had to go for this one next, Cecilia.
That horse ride sounded fantastic. I used to ride when I was younger but haven't been back on a horse in 40+ years.
Poor Mary!
Looking forward to hearing about Panama from you before I hear about Trumps invasion there on the news.
Tim x
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Well, after the last one I had to go for this one next, Cecilia.
That horse ride sounded fantastic. I used to ride when I was younger but haven't been back on a horse in 40+ years.
Poor Mary!
Looking forward to hearing about Panama from you before I hear about Trumps invasion there on the news.
Tim x
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Tim,
Thank you for the wonderful review. Panama has always been a mess even when I was over there. I don't watch the news so I have no idea what's going on in the world. It's better that way. The news is always so depressing.
Cecilia
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I had A ride on a horse Once, and that was enough for me.
And I have never felt the need to ride again, I feel for Mary. I'm glad you have fun memories of your visit. Nice read Cecilia. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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I had A ride on a horse Once, and that was enough for me.
And I have never felt the need to ride again, I feel for Mary. I'm glad you have fun memories of your visit. Nice read Cecilia. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Valda,
Thank you for the great review. I had a blast in Australia as you can tell from all the laughing.
Cecilia
Comment from Rick Gardner
A round the world in how many days, still believe a story of military hijinks and a agent hidden is a story to be done. You are the one and only. The good, the bad, the ugly.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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A round the world in how many days, still believe a story of military hijinks and a agent hidden is a story to be done. You are the one and only. The good, the bad, the ugly.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the wonderful review. I appreciate you. After my Panama story maybe I will start working on it.
Cecilia
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
If I had been Mary, I would have slid off the horse and punched you as hard as I could in the face. That guide was an awful person to let a person so scared come on the trip, and those horses were not trained. And the best rides should have been paired up with one of the not so good ones. I was a girl scout I know these things. I still like you, but you were a stinker there. I maybe, possibly, could have done some not so good stuff myself. :-)
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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If I had been Mary, I would have slid off the horse and punched you as hard as I could in the face. That guide was an awful person to let a person so scared come on the trip, and those horses were not trained. And the best rides should have been paired up with one of the not so good ones. I was a girl scout I know these things. I still like you, but you were a stinker there. I maybe, possibly, could have done some not so good stuff myself. :-)
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Karen,
Thanks for the wonderful review. I couldn't help her I had all I could do to maintain my horse. You're a feisty thing.
Cecilia
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing the rest of this trip with us. My editor says it's 'following' due to the definition of both words.
The next day after gathering fuel receipts and (The following day)
I had been riding maybe twice in my life, and like I say, Mary was scared to death (keep it in past tense 'said')
The next day we were flying into Sydney. (The following day)
The next morning, we decided we wanted t (the following morning)
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you for sharing the rest of this trip with us. My editor says it's 'following' due to the definition of both words.
The next day after gathering fuel receipts and (The following day)
I had been riding maybe twice in my life, and like I say, Mary was scared to death (keep it in past tense 'said')
The next day we were flying into Sydney. (The following day)
The next morning, we decided we wanted t (the following morning)
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Thank you for the wonderful review and helping me with my errors. I appreciate you.
Cecilia
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Cecilia. I enjoyed your final story about visiting Australia. It seems you got to see a lot of pretty interesting things while you were there. Great job on this part 1 and 2. :)
Melissa
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Hello Cecilia. I enjoyed your final story about visiting Australia. It seems you got to see a lot of pretty interesting things while you were there. Great job on this part 1 and 2. :)
Melissa
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Melissa,
Thank you for the wonderful review. Of all the countries I have been to Australia is my number 1 favorite.
Cecilia
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nice post. It doesn't sound like the stableman matched skills to horses all that well.
and had never road a horse before. - (rode) but ridden, actually
Like every other morning I collected fuel receipts - It would benefit with a comma after 'morning'.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Nice post. It doesn't sound like the stableman matched skills to horses all that well.
and had never road a horse before. - (rode) but ridden, actually
Like every other morning I collected fuel receipts - It would benefit with a comma after 'morning'.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Wayne,
Thank you for the wonderful review and finding my typos. I look these stories over, but don't always catch them. That's why I love this site everyone is so helpful.
Cecilia
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It's very hard to perfectly edit oneself. Your brain sees what you meant to type.
Comment from royowen
Yes, the three sisters in the Blue Mountains are an iconic spot in those Blue mountains, it's a favourite place for tourists. You were good little tourist Cecilia, the kangaroos can be a problem on Aussie roads dawn or twilight, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Yes, the three sisters in the Blue Mountains are an iconic spot in those Blue mountains, it's a favourite place for tourists. You were good little tourist Cecilia, the kangaroos can be a problem on Aussie roads dawn or twilight, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 15-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2025
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Roy,
Thank you for the wonderful review. Australia is a beautiful place and I would like to go back someday. You have kangaroos and we have deer that are a problem at dawn and twilight.
Cecilia
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Yes, I believe so
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Yes, I believe so
