Old Man at the River
An old man paints a river scene30 total reviews
Comment from Charles D Ezell
Out of six but it deserves it. I can just see the old guy sitting there trying to capture the moment. I was think about the Mississippi so long so wide but yet so narrow. Good post.
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Out of six but it deserves it. I can just see the old guy sitting there trying to capture the moment. I was think about the Mississippi so long so wide but yet so narrow. Good post.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from rjuselius
This is a beautifully written piece of poetry dear pamusart! I love the storyline. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings with hugs and kisses,!
Rebekka x
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This is a beautifully written piece of poetry dear pamusart! I love the storyline. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem!
Thank you for sharing!
Blessings with hugs and kisses,!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 17-Jan-2025
Comment from LJbutterfly
You are a phenomenal poetic storyteller. An old man sits all day, painting a beautiful scene of the river, but sees only what he wants to include in his painting which is a tribute to his diseased mother. Your descriptions and story are well thought out and enjoyable.
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You are a phenomenal poetic storyteller. An old man sits all day, painting a beautiful scene of the river, but sees only what he wants to include in his painting which is a tribute to his diseased mother. Your descriptions and story are well thought out and enjoyable.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Barry Penfold
Totally lovely package. Image and wording is spot on. Thanks for sharing and I am glad the man drowning was going to be saved. A fine tribute to mum. Well done. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Totally lovely package. Image and wording is spot on. Thanks for sharing and I am glad the man drowning was going to be saved. A fine tribute to mum. Well done. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from mermaids
I enjoyed reading your words and love how the painting is for this man's Mom, even though she has passed on. You tell a story here in poetic form. Your poem reads like a mini movie. Your descriptive words create a clear scene and I admire your smooth rhyming of words. Excellent work here.
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I enjoyed reading your words and love how the painting is for this man's Mom, even though she has passed on. You tell a story here in poetic form. Your poem reads like a mini movie. Your descriptive words create a clear scene and I admire your smooth rhyming of words. Excellent work here.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Pam,
This poem tells a nice rhyming story about the painter and the reason for the painting. I don't know why doesn't see the swimmer that's drowning. Or maybe he thinks the boater will get to him in time, so he doesn't react to try to save him. It wouldn't me such a serene painting if he included the drowning swimmer. This is a good way to finish the grieving process.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of your week.
Joan
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Hi Pam,
This poem tells a nice rhyming story about the painter and the reason for the painting. I don't know why doesn't see the swimmer that's drowning. Or maybe he thinks the boater will get to him in time, so he doesn't react to try to save him. It wouldn't me such a serene painting if he included the drowning swimmer. This is a good way to finish the grieving process.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Enjoy the rest of your week.
Joan
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent poem about art and human nature. I paint too but mostly people. Yo described it so well. Thank you.
Excellent haiku poem. Good composition and theme. Beautiful presentation. Thank you for participating in the haiku club.
Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
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Excellent poem about art and human nature. I paint too but mostly people. Yo described it so well. Thank you.
Excellent haiku poem. Good composition and theme. Beautiful presentation. Thank you for participating in the haiku club.
Well done!
Gypsy
"The poet waits quietly to paint the unsaid." - Atticus
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from ESOSTINE
I love the narrative poem of an artist, drawing and painting by the river side, creating memories. Thanks so much, dear Pam for sharing your work. I enjoyed reading the piece.
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I love the narrative poem of an artist, drawing and painting by the river side, creating memories. Thanks so much, dear Pam for sharing your work. I enjoyed reading the piece.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this story in a poem with us. I enjoyed reading. I would have been sad if he didn't finish this painting. It was his journey to complete it.
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Thank you for sharing this story in a poem with us. I enjoyed reading. I would have been sad if he didn't finish this painting. It was his journey to complete it.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
Comment from royowen
Not quite up to your usual standard Pam, but you've worked in all sorts of sympathetic imagery into your literary canvass, I enjoyed it, probably needs an edit, well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : The old man's at the river painting scenes. 2: for houses on hillsides...
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Not quite up to your usual standard Pam, but you've worked in all sorts of sympathetic imagery into your literary canvass, I enjoyed it, probably needs an edit, well done, blessings Roy
Suggestion : The old man's at the river painting scenes. 2: for houses on hillsides...
Comment Written 16-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2025
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Hi Roy
I have to admit I don't understand your suggestions but in any case thank you for them and for the wonderful review
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Well done
