Comment from Marie Alvarado

Excellent

Hi! This is so sad, I wasn't expecting the ending though. It made me think of the different tones of the piece. It struck me that there could be a few ways to interpret the feelings of both people which I enjoy. Thank you

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025

Thank you, Marie. I appreciate your review and comments.

Patricia

Comment from Marilyn Hamilton

Excellent

An excellent entry for the 100 Word Flash Fiction contest. You followed the rules for the contest format. The ending had the surpsie twist that is common place in flash fiction and i enjoyed the story. good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025

Thank you, Marilyn. I appreciate your review and comments.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Thank you for the notes as I might not have understood this post. Not sure how anyone can marry someone without knowing whether they are male or female but I reckon it would be grounds for divorce, an unusual story for the contest, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025

Hi Dolly. Thank you for your review and feedback. He was male, no question about it, but she didn't know he was gay until she came home early and caught them.

Patricia

Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I really enjoyed the twist in your story! The opening felt so --- normal.
Sheila's really set the tone for something a bit off. I loved how you ended with that perfect line. It leaves me wondering about what's going on behind the scenes. Keep it up - this left me wanting more!

 Comment Written 26-Jan-2025

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reply by the author on 26-Jan-2025

Thank you, Michael. I love your comments.

Patricia