Comment from Sallyo

Excellent

Onya, MrG! It's good to catch up with a song that doesn't go for the easy rhymes or the obvious beat. I enjoyed this one, and was especially drawn to the chorus, which is my kinda rhyme.

 Comment Written 28-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 30-Jun-2007

Hey there dear friend!

Thanks for leaving a comment, I really appreciate it!!
Finally decided to put together a bunch of my poems to publish.
Hugs Sal
grant

reply by Sallyo on 30-Jun-2007

Who're you pubbing with? I did some lulu books, just for fun.

reply by the author on 30-Jun-2007

Yep I'm lookin at lulu for the print on demand aspect sespeshly from this part of the yoonyverse!! hehe

any hints appreciated. Did the publishing extra thing help??

Hugs and a boags/cascade ... or both...

g 

reply by Sallyo on 30-Jun-2007

I didn't pay anyone to do anything at lulu - aside. I do recommend doing what they said about ordering a single book first. I thought I'd fine-combed REPLAY, but I still found several typos in the print version. Just little things, like an for and, or two commas ,, instead of one. I marked them and then corrected the proof and republished. I'm expecting the new test copy soon. The postage is the worst aspect. It's cheaper to import lots of books than one, but then you have to be confident of selling them. A single copy of a short kids' book cost about $18 by the time I got it to Oz (mostly postage!) My Oz-published books of the same length retail for $7.95 so you see the problem. If I sold mail order physical books and charged postage from my to the Oz customer, that price would balloon again. Therefore, I'm just regarding the physical books as gratis gifts for schools and contests etc. It would be cheaper for me to import 500... but I'm not a bookseller. I tried local printers, but they charge big upfront payments for short runs At least with lulu you never LOSE money. It was fun, and the books look good. You can see them at the lulu url with sallyodgers tacked to the end.

Comment from ooh baby

Excellent

I enjoyed reading this, mcgrunty. It has a lilting rhythm and the rhymes work well to bring this to life. I also enjoyed te imagery...this made me feel a little sad, like something was slipping away.

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 18-Jun-2007

Hi again!
Nice spot on the tone.
cheers hon
grant

Comment from Miss Sarah

Excellent

Chance upon the mystery,
of dance indulgent history.
The last remaining versions
of your face

--Love, love, LOVE this section!

This piece was quite mysterious in it's genuine beauty and realism. Passionate and full of fire that burns brightly in each of your lines. Great flow...nice harmony...loved it.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2007

Thank you very much friend!!
cheers and hugs!
grant

reply by the author on 09-Sep-2007

So one day when I take a holiday in the USA maay I ask of a tour guuiide?? hehe

Comment from skye

Excellent

Yes, it made me want to dance.
Very well done.
Great lines, nice chorus, sweet, sad images.
I can see myself saying this, when I am older, and wanting to finish the dance.
Thanks for a wonderful poem. Kathy

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2007

Hi there Kathy
I think you got the right feel for the songas I had a certain age in mind of the participants.
cheers for the understanding!
grant

Comment from Phill-Phonics

Excellent

This is a very enlightening and poignant song/poem. Your words express well the thought you wish to convey.Your well written words flow well and I see no errors. Thank you for sharing . Your friend Phill.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2007

Hey there Phill
Good to see you found this one too!
I appreciate the cool comments and rating!
cheers
grant

Comment from cheshire blue

Excellent

These song lyrics have a Bryan Ferry/ Roxy Music kind of feel to them.
The words flow well, and the presentation was excellent.
I particularly liked the chorus.

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2007

Hi there Chesh
I believe I remember your name from the last time I loitered here for a while! LOL
Appreciated your words are
Comparison Ferry good thought I
cheers
grant
#;~D

Comment from Pat Mohr

Excellent

Dear Grant,

You are so spot on with the rhythm of this poem. It rocks!

Your choice of words and descriptions tell the reader just how much you love your gal; she is very lucky. And dancing with you, I believe, would be "delish."

Can't find any errors in your poem; however, in your About McGrunty, its is possessive all on its own. Does not need the apostrophe. You see, I believe one can be creative and grammatically correct as well.

Keep writing . . . you're good!

Blessings, Pat

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2007

Hiya Pat!
Thanks for a really refreshing review without having to cut and paste my whole song!! haha
Again Thanks and if brave, check out my bulging portfolio!
cheers
grant

Comment from Moniqua P. Tomaz

Exceptional

Wonderful song. This should definetely be published. Please get this song out there. It is vibrant, classy, and very affectionately poetic. Keep up the good work

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2007

Hi there Moniqua!
Well thank you very much for the ultra cool review and nice shiny stars!!! LOL
I am pleased that it hit the right chord (pun intended!!) with you.
cheers
grant
p-s I have another song in the list there too a few above or below this one.
#;~D

Comment from Trena One Who Cares

Excellent

Hi MG this song presents with a story line and has great rhythm and flow that is steady and smooth throughout this entire song nicely done. Trena

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2007

Hello Trena
I appreciate the comments and the fact you didn't need to fill space by including half my song! LOL
cheers
grant

Comment from 1archangel

Excellent

When we go dancing,
I watch from my chair.
for the love in your eyes,
at the time that we've shared.
and if we remember
our history today;
then, we should be dancing favorite verse...love the refrain..nicely written
and a pleasure to read and review

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2007

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reply by the author on 14-Jun-2007

Thanks archangel
Appreciated.
cheers
grant