RESIDUE OF WAR
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Comment from Sally Carter
Oh I LOVE this poem! Isn't one of the joys of receiving reviews that it sometimes sends you to the portfolio of someone you have never met before, and there you find an unexpected gem - which this surely is.
Wonderful characterisation, great meter, vivid imagery, natural use of language. For me it really has the lot.
And what a wonderful device, to use the older man reminiscing at the beginning, telling the son he need not hurry, only to see the son at the end, wishing he had acted sooner.
Truly one of the most human, the most enjoyable poems I have read on here for ages. I so hope it does well for you in the local poetry competition. I think you will blow them away!
Best wishes, and nice to meet you. (Love your profile notes).
Sally
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
Oh I LOVE this poem! Isn't one of the joys of receiving reviews that it sometimes sends you to the portfolio of someone you have never met before, and there you find an unexpected gem - which this surely is.
Wonderful characterisation, great meter, vivid imagery, natural use of language. For me it really has the lot.
And what a wonderful device, to use the older man reminiscing at the beginning, telling the son he need not hurry, only to see the son at the end, wishing he had acted sooner.
Truly one of the most human, the most enjoyable poems I have read on here for ages. I so hope it does well for you in the local poetry competition. I think you will blow them away!
Best wishes, and nice to meet you. (Love your profile notes).
Sally
Comment Written 07-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2012
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Again, I thank you very much for your kind comments, and your effort at reading this kinda long poem :) Very much appreciated! Cheers xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from Doc Holiday
Well-written poem about long lost items and the memories that can be rekindled by their presence. Interesting line in your poem about his thinking that Mom thought the medals would lead him back to his son.
Sounds like a worthy entry for a local poety competition to me. Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
Well-written poem about long lost items and the memories that can be rekindled by their presence. Interesting line in your poem about his thinking that Mom thought the medals would lead him back to his son.
Sounds like a worthy entry for a local poety competition to me. Good luck!
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Hey, thanks Doc! Glad you enjoyed this, and appreciate your kind words. Cheers :) xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxoxoxo
Comment from fast alligator
This was perfect in everyway I can think to say. Your wording offered a crystal clear image of all that transpires within this poem. It was very creative and perfectly structured. Excellent work.
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
This was perfect in everyway I can think to say. Your wording offered a crystal clear image of all that transpires within this poem. It was very creative and perfectly structured. Excellent work.
Comment Written 06-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 06-Mar-2012
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Thank you very much fast alligator (cool name!!) I have been despondent as hardly anyone seems to bother reading anything longer than four stanzas :( So your review is very much appreciated indeed, not to mention the six stars! Cheers xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxox
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I know EXACTLY how you feel. Take care.
Comment from alex banton
hello alpacalady,my name is alex banton,i am a author,i hve read your writing and believe me i telling the truth;i enjoy it,if their was a 10 star level for rating i would give it to you.it is realistic,readable.keep on this writing level it is working for you.i am a publish author,i have books that are going to publish in 2012...all genres
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2012
hello alpacalady,my name is alex banton,i am a author,i hve read your writing and believe me i telling the truth;i enjoy it,if their was a 10 star level for rating i would give it to you.it is realistic,readable.keep on this writing level it is working for you.i am a publish author,i have books that are going to publish in 2012...all genres
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2012
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Thanks very much Alex for your kind review :) xoxoxooxx
Comment from Gladness
Awesome story poem. Very compelling and poignant. The picture is perfect, but I can't read whatever is written in black at the top. Not enough contrast from the background. I noticed you reworked this, good for you! Great job!
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2012
Awesome story poem. Very compelling and poignant. The picture is perfect, but I can't read whatever is written in black at the top. Not enough contrast from the background. I noticed you reworked this, good for you! Great job!
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 05-Mar-2012
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Thanks Anita. I took that silly black bit off - it was a brief description of what the book was about, which isn't necessary I don't reckon! Glad you enjoyed this poem; I appreciate your kind words :) Cheers! xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from rightforyou
Wonderful poem and a pleasure to read and review...I read the notes and like this revision that you have posted wonderful job and thank you for sharing...Ron
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
Wonderful poem and a pleasure to read and review...I read the notes and like this revision that you have posted wonderful job and thank you for sharing...Ron
Comment Written 04-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 04-Mar-2012
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Thank you very much Ron. Glad you liked it :) Cheers xooxxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxx
Comment from sueseagull
wow! this is a very powerful entry. As I am reading all the different entries, I am amazed at the vast differences in each poets entry. Very sad but well told story. Good luck in the competition.
Sue
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2008
wow! this is a very powerful entry. As I am reading all the different entries, I am amazed at the vast differences in each poets entry. Very sad but well told story. Good luck in the competition.
Sue
Comment Written 03-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2008
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Thanks so much Sue. It is a bit depressing, but I figured that finding an old "relic" from the past would conjure up sad or wistful memories, rather than jolly ones! As said, thanks so much for stopping by and reviewing this, and your good luck wishes - it's very much appreciated xoxoxoxoxo
Comment from jshep
A very stirring story in a poem. Liked the unique idea a combing the artifact into a letter written from the father. Great emotional pull in the poem.
I did feel there were a couple of spots in the rhythm of the poem that could be tightened, but otherwise, the poem is beautifully written with great depth of feeling. No spag.
Excellent poem and enjoyed reading very much.
XOJoyce
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2008
A very stirring story in a poem. Liked the unique idea a combing the artifact into a letter written from the father. Great emotional pull in the poem.
I did feel there were a couple of spots in the rhythm of the poem that could be tightened, but otherwise, the poem is beautifully written with great depth of feeling. No spag.
Excellent poem and enjoyed reading very much.
XOJoyce
Comment Written 02-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2008
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Thanks Joyce for your encouragement here. I' m aware of those couple of lines, but can't seem to tweak them anymore to get the flow right - so frustrating! Still, your words are enough my friend: I feel like I've won anyway! Thanks again and very best of luck to you xoxoxoxoxox
Comment from Fleedleflump
I think this is my favourite amongst my fellow entries for the Artifact competition. It has a beauty and truth that's only enhanced by an excellently timed flow and some lovely turns of phrase. There's a couple of lines that seemed to jar initially, but considering the length of this piece, that's no real problem. Thankyou for posting :-)
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2008
I think this is my favourite amongst my fellow entries for the Artifact competition. It has a beauty and truth that's only enhanced by an excellently timed flow and some lovely turns of phrase. There's a couple of lines that seemed to jar initially, but considering the length of this piece, that's no real problem. Thankyou for posting :-)
Comment Written 02-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2008
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Those lines have driven me up te wall as I can't seem to 'soften' them up flow-wise! "The hazards of writing poetry, eh? I appreciate very much your kind review and comments - means as much as coming anywhere in this contest! So thank you and best of luck to you as well xoxoxoxoxoxo
Comment from ~Dovey
This was a touching tale, and I see something my relationship with my since I've grown up in it as well. An excellent offering for the contest! Good luck!
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
This was a touching tale, and I see something my relationship with my since I've grown up in it as well. An excellent offering for the contest! Good luck!
Comment Written 27-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2008
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Thanks so much Dovey. Sadly this happens all too often with that generation of unfortuntely stubborn men! Hopefully it'll be sorted for you and me one day soon.
Again, thanks so much for stopping by, and your good luck wishes xoxoxoxoxo