Sir Derrick of Loserville
Short take on lust.15 total reviews
Comment from Korton
Excellent story, thoroughly enjoyable. This is a bawdy romp that undoubtedly happens quite often in the real world and probably much like you describe. Loved it!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2008
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Excellent story, thoroughly enjoyable. This is a bawdy romp that undoubtedly happens quite often in the real world and probably much like you describe. Loved it!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2008
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Thanks Frank. I needed a change of pace and a bit of fun. Thanks for reading and for the great review. ZeeZee
Comment from schiestyboy
Hilarious! Also a great insight into these types of situations where you can't understand why one would hook up with someone perceived to be a loser or just inadequate in some sense. Thanks for sharing this :)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hilarious! Also a great insight into these types of situations where you can't understand why one would hook up with someone perceived to be a loser or just inadequate in some sense. Thanks for sharing this :)
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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thanks so much schiestyboy.. hey, I love your name. cool. Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. ZeeZee
Comment from Celtic~Soul
Ha, Zee, this is a hoot! Don't we all get into those 'relationships' where we know it's profoundly bad but something just won't allow us to end it...not just yet...
This was short, sweet, expressive and HOT! In a devilishly bad way, of course.
One suggestions for you. Lines like:
Ok, you tell me, who says Java these days?
Seem to be a thought and, even in first person, it can help to put them in italics. BTW, you should spell Ok as, Okay. That's it! Thanks for the hot sweaty laugh and groan!
Dawn
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Ha, Zee, this is a hoot! Don't we all get into those 'relationships' where we know it's profoundly bad but something just won't allow us to end it...not just yet...
This was short, sweet, expressive and HOT! In a devilishly bad way, of course.
One suggestions for you. Lines like:
Ok, you tell me, who says Java these days?
Seem to be a thought and, even in first person, it can help to put them in italics. BTW, you should spell Ok as, Okay. That's it! Thanks for the hot sweaty laugh and groan!
Dawn
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hi Dawn.. I will try to remember to spell okay as okay.. Okay? lol now I have done it three times, hopefully it will stick in my dinky brain. Thanks much for the kind words. ZeeZee
Comment from jshep
I always know I'll be in for a good read, a good laugh, and fun surprises. You can never be declared boring. Great write. NOt a spag to be found and I would be afraid to suggest one change. You are a spit, a very raw and funny one. Thanks for the laugh. Great job. Joyce
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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I always know I'll be in for a good read, a good laugh, and fun surprises. You can never be declared boring. Great write. NOt a spag to be found and I would be afraid to suggest one change. You are a spit, a very raw and funny one. Thanks for the laugh. Great job. Joyce
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Thanks so much Joyce. If you laugh.. it must be funny. Smoochers, ZeeZee
Comment from btru2u66
Only thing I saw needing corrected was the PHD, it's PhD. Other than that it was a nice read. You may have written it for fun, but it's REALITY. I'm not sure if you read my piece on Some Man, if not read it and see doesn't it relate. Women do this very thing for real. They already know it won't work from the beginning, but because of that (Sir Gallacock) and the good twisting he put in his hips they lose focus. I say FORGET THAT!!!! But, truth is, it's real life. So thank you and I certainly appreciate you taking the time to share it with us.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Only thing I saw needing corrected was the PHD, it's PhD. Other than that it was a nice read. You may have written it for fun, but it's REALITY. I'm not sure if you read my piece on Some Man, if not read it and see doesn't it relate. Women do this very thing for real. They already know it won't work from the beginning, but because of that (Sir Gallacock) and the good twisting he put in his hips they lose focus. I say FORGET THAT!!!! But, truth is, it's real life. So thank you and I certainly appreciate you taking the time to share it with us.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hi btru2u66 I will take a gander at the Some Man write. I look forward to it. Thanks for reading and leaving the clue about PhD. I will change it. ZeeZee
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Your welcome and please do take a look when you have time.
Comment from Judian James
"Needles of excitement ran up my arm, across my sternum, slowing down long enough to make laps around my nipples and then taking a dive into my damp panties" Excellent
"sir Gallacock" Priceless! I loved it! good laughs throughout. How've you been?
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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"Needles of excitement ran up my arm, across my sternum, slowing down long enough to make laps around my nipples and then taking a dive into my damp panties" Excellent
"sir Gallacock" Priceless! I loved it! good laughs throughout. How've you been?
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hey baby doll. I had a bit of fun with this one. I have been in the serious too long. thanks for reading and leaving the generous review. ZeeZee
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How are you? Where've you been?
Comment from babylonia
zeezee,
LOL i think someone else mentioned this guy to me some years ago. she said she finally bought him a new pair of tennis shoes and sent him on his way. LOL made me smile. made me laugh. keep up the good work~ easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent.
love it~
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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zeezee,
LOL i think someone else mentioned this guy to me some years ago. she said she finally bought him a new pair of tennis shoes and sent him on his way. LOL made me smile. made me laugh. keep up the good work~ easy to read and follow. no spaggies do i see. imagery is excellent.
love it~
love,
barbara
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Hi baby, This was a fun write for me. A no brainer, my favorite kind. Thanks for reading and commenting.. kisses hon. ZeeZee
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zeezee,
you are truly welcome. LOL some guys are just born to serve. hmmm....
love,
barbara
Comment from Nicky B
Very hot and raunchy zeezee.
When the lights go out, he turns into Sir Gallacock. He is a love machine. He turns me inside out. He has a PHD in pussy. The guy is great in the dark. I hate him.
Love these lines too.
I started to pull away when it hit me. Needles of excitement ran up my arm, across my sternum, slowing down long enough to make laps around my nipples and then taking a dive into my damp panties.
You really know how to put the ass in class. Love it!
Take care my ribald friend.
Nick.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Very hot and raunchy zeezee.
When the lights go out, he turns into Sir Gallacock. He is a love machine. He turns me inside out. He has a PHD in pussy. The guy is great in the dark. I hate him.
Love these lines too.
I started to pull away when it hit me. Needles of excitement ran up my arm, across my sternum, slowing down long enough to make laps around my nipples and then taking a dive into my damp panties.
You really know how to put the ass in class. Love it!
Take care my ribald friend.
Nick.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Ahh Nicky.. if only you had a skate board. Thanks honey. I had fun with this one. ZeeZee
Comment from IndianaIrish
I loved this story, Zee. Your humor and perfect words are a joy to read and laugh to. Some of the best moments of our lives is lust!
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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I loved this story, Zee. Your humor and perfect words are a joy to read and laugh to. Some of the best moments of our lives is lust!
Indy :>)
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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HI Indy. I had fun with this. It felt good to get in the comedic muse again. Kiss Kiss honey. ZeeZee
Comment from adewpearl
expired Summer's Eve freshness guarantee - whether it's political rants or lust stories, you are one of a kind, lady!
I'll never think of love stories the same way again! LOL
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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expired Summer's Eve freshness guarantee - whether it's political rants or lust stories, you are one of a kind, lady!
I'll never think of love stories the same way again! LOL
Comment Written 16-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2008
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Thanks for reading and commenting adewpearl. I so appreciate the feedback. ZeeZee