Oops, I think I'm in trouble now.
A little girl meddles in her parents things17 total reviews
Comment from redrider6612
Goodness, you just never know what kids are going to get into next, do you? This was cute and very original. I have no suggestions for improvement. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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Goodness, you just never know what kids are going to get into next, do you? This was cute and very original. I have no suggestions for improvement. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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Thank you for the review and good wishes.
Comment from Mastery
Very clever story..You have provoke laughs and show good writing talents with this short story, writer. Good luck in the contest...
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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Very clever story..You have provoke laughs and show good writing talents with this short story, writer. Good luck in the contest...
Comment Written 27-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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Thank you. I'm glad you found it funny.
Comment from c_lucas
It seems like the child has found condoms. They make good water balloons. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your ocntest.
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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It seems like the child has found condoms. They make good water balloons. This is very well written with good imagery and descriptive scheme. Good luck in your ocntest.
Comment Written 27-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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Thank you for the review and comments.
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You're welcome.
Comment from gene_ink
I like how your story demonstrates how children get into trouble once they become bored. A good point for mothers to watch for to save themselves embarrassment. Hope you do well in the contest. Merry Christmas
-mommie (mommy)
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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I like how your story demonstrates how children get into trouble once they become bored. A good point for mothers to watch for to save themselves embarrassment. Hope you do well in the contest. Merry Christmas
-mommie (mommy)
Comment Written 27-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice comments.
Comment from Rama Rao
You have described the child's curiosity very well. U've put urself in the child's shoes and fitted well. I liked the idea of the child to make a raincoat for her Barbie doll. The whole piece made good reading and held my interest.
However, I doubt if a mother will yell at a child for loss of a such an insignificant thing. Here I couldn't agree with u completely. She may tell her daughter not to play with them, but yelling was a bit difficult to accept.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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You have described the child's curiosity very well. U've put urself in the child's shoes and fitted well. I liked the idea of the child to make a raincoat for her Barbie doll. The whole piece made good reading and held my interest.
However, I doubt if a mother will yell at a child for loss of a such an insignificant thing. Here I couldn't agree with u completely. She may tell her daughter not to play with them, but yelling was a bit difficult to accept.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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I'm sorry if it hard to accept, but sometimes mothers yell when they are frustrated and don't know how to explain certain things to their children. My daughter did this and I'm pretty sure I yelled. Not because of the loss of the thing but because I was upset about her finding something that was hard to explain to a seven year old, and I didn't like her going through places that I considered off limits. I appreciate the review.
Comment from skye
Very very funny, with delightful details, guilt, creativity, and a child's inner conversation and perception.
Very well done.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Very very funny, with delightful details, guilt, creativity, and a child's inner conversation and perception.
Very well done.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Comment from babylonia
LMAO at least it wasn't mommy's diaphragm. rubbers are a lot easier to replace. :P
made me smile and giggle and smile and giggle some more. very nicely done. still shaking head. best of luck with this one.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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LMAO at least it wasn't mommy's diaphragm. rubbers are a lot easier to replace. :P
made me smile and giggle and smile and giggle some more. very nicely done. still shaking head. best of luck with this one.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Barbara, I so glad you found it funny. I didn't at the time since it was the mummy in this true story but it is now funny. I really appreciate the review and comments.
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i remember a friend who's baby sister found his parents condoms. she was probably four or five. he was twelve. his parents were not happy at all. she brought them out when they had company and wanted them blown up. crazy things children do. i'm glad you can see the humor in it now.
love,
barbara
Comment from Belinda
Very funny, very childlike. Children do wonder about things that are 'secret' including those rubbers, one boy I know even steal one from the supermarket to know it better. This is a strong entry to the contest!
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Very funny, very childlike. Children do wonder about things that are 'secret' including those rubbers, one boy I know even steal one from the supermarket to know it better. This is a strong entry to the contest!
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you Belinda, for the review and the comments.
Cheers
Comment from MizKat
Your story is cute and humorous. Of course a little girl wouldn't know what it is. LOL I hope you the best in the contest. You have too many words in the sentence below.
There's (a is - delete) a bunch of them.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Your story is cute and humorous. Of course a little girl wouldn't know what it is. LOL I hope you the best in the contest. You have too many words in the sentence below.
There's (a is - delete) a bunch of them.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thanks for the review and comments MizKat. I'm glad you found the spag I overlooked.
Cheers
Comment from missy98writer
Writer,
Oh My God, your story is fantastic. The little girl found her parents stash of condoms and wanted to use one for Barbies rain coat. Terrific story. You did a great job telling the story from a view point of a nosy, naughty little girl. Boy, Ken didn't need it did he. I like how you describe her opening a package. So far your humor non-fiction story "Oops, I think I'm in trouble now" is the best I've read so far for the daily writing prompt.
Missy.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Writer,
Oh My God, your story is fantastic. The little girl found her parents stash of condoms and wanted to use one for Barbies rain coat. Terrific story. You did a great job telling the story from a view point of a nosy, naughty little girl. Boy, Ken didn't need it did he. I like how you describe her opening a package. So far your humor non-fiction story "Oops, I think I'm in trouble now" is the best I've read so far for the daily writing prompt.
Missy.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2009
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2009
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Thank you for your great review and witty comments. I'm glad you like it.
Cheers