Wide Awake
It was not a dream.7 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
I learned my father had stopped breathing in a frantic middle of the night phone call from my stepmother - I remember waking my small children, throwing coats on them and rushing over to my father's home to arrive just when the ambulance did. You capture so well the feelings upon receiving such news - late night phone calls chill me to the bone. Your rhyming couplets with good flow and strong rhyme enhance this sorrowful tale. Brooke
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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I learned my father had stopped breathing in a frantic middle of the night phone call from my stepmother - I remember waking my small children, throwing coats on them and rushing over to my father's home to arrive just when the ambulance did. You capture so well the feelings upon receiving such news - late night phone calls chill me to the bone. Your rhyming couplets with good flow and strong rhyme enhance this sorrowful tale. Brooke
Comment Written 03-May-2010
reply by the author on 03-May-2010
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Thank you
Comment from anabelle
Very beautiful and sad poem. You have an ease with words. It's difficult sometimes to linger on a painful subject, but you manage it with ease. The poem flowed really well and the words reached deep inside me.
Thanks for the good read. Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Very beautiful and sad poem. You have an ease with words. It's difficult sometimes to linger on a painful subject, but you manage it with ease. The poem flowed really well and the words reached deep inside me.
Thanks for the good read. Best of luck in the contest.
Regards, anabelle
Comment Written 02-May-2010
reply by the author on 02-May-2010
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Thank you
Comment from jlsavell
author, a great contender for the contest. It is that call that eventually touches every life on the face of this Earth. Intitial shock, then denial..then pure hell..well done..best wishes on the contest..jlsavell
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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author, a great contender for the contest. It is that call that eventually touches every life on the face of this Earth. Intitial shock, then denial..then pure hell..well done..best wishes on the contest..jlsavell
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from azwildrosa
such a tiny poem that says so much. or was this my first taste of sorrow. what a line, really makes one think. this is the perfect kind of poem for this contest. thank you for sharing and good luck!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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such a tiny poem that says so much. or was this my first taste of sorrow. what a line, really makes one think. this is the perfect kind of poem for this contest. thank you for sharing and good luck!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from fairydancer
Very heart wrenching poem about the distress of finding out a loved one has died.
Very well written - minmimalist style with good word choice makes this poem very punchy.
Best wishes in the contest :)
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Very heart wrenching poem about the distress of finding out a loved one has died.
Very well written - minmimalist style with good word choice makes this poem very punchy.
Best wishes in the contest :)
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review.
Comment from harleyangelbrat
This is a beautiful poem. It is sad, but it expresses your emotions. It is well written and has a wonderful flow. I really enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent read, God bless you!
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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This is a beautiful poem. It is sad, but it expresses your emotions. It is well written and has a wonderful flow. I really enjoyed reading this very much. Excellent read, God bless you!
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you for your review.
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You are very welcome. Have a blessed weekend. Marilyn
Comment from Nicki_Mist
Very good artwork for this sorrowful poem. Those calls will always be like a nightmare and nothing can make them go away. You did a good job with imagery to present this poem. Emotional too.
Nicole
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Very good artwork for this sorrowful poem. Those calls will always be like a nightmare and nothing can make them go away. You did a good job with imagery to present this poem. Emotional too.
Nicole
Comment Written 30-Apr-2010
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2010
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Thank you for the review.