Writings From the Heart
Viewing comments for Chapter 35 "Change"A book of Poetry & Writing
19 total reviews
Comment from Pyrrho
Moma don't let your babies grow up to be Cowboys, is one of my favorite songs from the past. But here is a cowboy that wants to be a farmer, Tunr about is fair play.
Please note that you could use a bit of practice with meter and flow, but it is clear you prefer your own way. That is about all that is cowboy about you.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Moma don't let your babies grow up to be Cowboys, is one of my favorite songs from the past. But here is a cowboy that wants to be a farmer, Tunr about is fair play.
Please note that you could use a bit of practice with meter and flow, but it is clear you prefer your own way. That is about all that is cowboy about you.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks I think
Comment from Delahay
I don't see any of these relationships working out for this cowboy if the women he is interested in don't care for his lifestyle. I guess he is destined to lead a lonely life on his ranch.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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I don't see any of these relationships working out for this cowboy if the women he is interested in don't care for his lifestyle. I guess he is destined to lead a lonely life on his ranch.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from emrpoems
All men believe that women would love to change them
. sometimes that is true and sometimes not. Couples should be willing to make some change to please the other. A thoughtful piece of writing
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All men believe that women would love to change them
. sometimes that is true and sometimes not. Couples should be willing to make some change to please the other. A thoughtful piece of writing
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thank you
Comment from c_lucas
Having a relationship without agreeing with your partner is spelling doom. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
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Having a relationship without agreeing with your partner is spelling doom. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a good read.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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thank you Mr C
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You're welcome, Gary. Charlie
Comment from acerisestory
Not as strong as your other poems, Gary. Your meter is off, and I think you've done some "forced" rhyming and then no rhyming at all. Next to last line: woman instead of women. Is that you on the "horse?"
Your poem has a nice rhythm but a bit rough. Thanks for sharing. Alana
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Not as strong as your other poems, Gary. Your meter is off, and I think you've done some "forced" rhyming and then no rhyming at all. Next to last line: woman instead of women. Is that you on the "horse?"
Your poem has a nice rhythm but a bit rough. Thanks for sharing. Alana
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Thanks Alana
Comment from Trybuck
City girls just don't understand
what it means to be a working man
Up way early and gone till late
They feel forsaken and begin to hate
The thing that makes their men a man
And for long, are making other plans
Fourth line - workers should be works, I think
Well done with this one, Buck
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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City girls just don't understand
what it means to be a working man
Up way early and gone till late
They feel forsaken and begin to hate
The thing that makes their men a man
And for long, are making other plans
Fourth line - workers should be works, I think
Well done with this one, Buck
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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changed thanks for the review Buck
Comment from Dean Kuch
Well, Gary, you know what they say... "You can take the boy out of the country, but you will never be able to take the country out of the boy."
I think your poem here speaks well to that very same sentiment.
Well done!~Dean
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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Well, Gary, you know what they say... "You can take the boy out of the country, but you will never be able to take the country out of the boy."
I think your poem here speaks well to that very same sentiment.
Well done!~Dean
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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thanks Dean
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this poem. It flowed well and it tells a story. If it's any consolation, being and Army wife for 23 years these guys are never home either. My husband retired a few years back.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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I enjoyed reading this poem. It flowed well and it tells a story. If it's any consolation, being and Army wife for 23 years these guys are never home either. My husband retired a few years back.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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thank you for the review Barbara, I was Army and away so I understand
Comment from Ben Colder
If the wheels were yellow I would think it was a John Deer. Not only cowboys does women like to change. Good job poet. Like the picture and the poem. Shalom.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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If the wheels were yellow I would think it was a John Deer. Not only cowboys does women like to change. Good job poet. Like the picture and the poem. Shalom.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2014
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2014
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thank Ben,
Comment from poetbear
Lots of ideas and levels of thought here.
Reads well and makes sense.
So much to think about and ponder.
Well written and crafted.
Good work.
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Lots of ideas and levels of thought here.
Reads well and makes sense.
So much to think about and ponder.
Well written and crafted.
Good work.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2014