Chronicles of the Wandering Man
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "The Wishing Well of Fate"An extended story in poem form
22 total reviews
Comment from findingmyroom
So from the deepest despair hope once again lives. Great chapter, a lot of vivid imagery. My favorite image is this:
and from its shadow crawled the judge
to underline our strife.
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2010
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So from the deepest despair hope once again lives. Great chapter, a lot of vivid imagery. My favorite image is this:
and from its shadow crawled the judge
to underline our strife.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 11-Aug-2010
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Thank you :-). It's all about hope, redemption, andeventually the triumphant end of both. I'm thrilled you're enjoying the earlier chapters :-)
Mike
Comment from shy1250
Again, 5 means6 here. DArn darn darn!! I knew she had to die but in such a hateful way after finding her Adam!! Madness and religion seem to have historically been friends--hard for me to understand since God defines love, is love. Well, let's see how u get out of the well. Wow, this is just like my discovering Edgar Allen Poe in 7th grade (I'm 58 now lol) later and God bless, shy
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Again, 5 means6 here. DArn darn darn!! I knew she had to die but in such a hateful way after finding her Adam!! Madness and religion seem to have historically been friends--hard for me to understand since God defines love, is love. Well, let's see how u get out of the well. Wow, this is just like my discovering Edgar Allen Poe in 7th grade (I'm 58 now lol) later and God bless, shy
Comment Written 08-Aug-2010
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2010
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Thanks again, shy :-). It's exciting, replying to these reviews in real time, knowing that somebody is reading my chapters a few minutes ahead! I wasn;t sure whether to kill his Eve until it happened, but the story was finding its own way at this point, and I was just the monkey sitting in front of it with a pen :-)
Mike
Comment from MyYiaYia
Excellent! I have to ask as I am not sure. In the poem, his companion threw herself in front of him to save him from the bullets, right? or not?
-The eyes behind were wild with hyp - was this supposed to be 'hype'?-
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Excellent! I have to ask as I am not sure. In the poem, his companion threw herself in front of him to save him from the bullets, right? or not?
-The eyes behind were wild with hyp - was this supposed to be 'hype'?-
Comment Written 01-Jul-2010
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2010
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Thank you :-). I'm so glad you're continuing to enjoy the Wandering Man. You're quite right, his female companion, on whom he'd come to rely, sacrificed herself to give him a chance to live and fulfill his destiny.
Hyp is an old word for a morbid feeling of depression. I do like resurrecting words that have fallen out of use!
Mike
Comment from Hitcher
What can one say Mike... You know set new standards every-time you post one of these chapters mate, your talent is unique and you stand alone as far as I'm concerned mate, YOU are in a league of your own when it comes to dark descriptive, visual explosive writing, this was CLASS, pure Class, can't wait for the next one. Fu*k! It[the site] won't let me six you...AGAIN![it Says I have three left]
It was a six mate, without doubt.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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What can one say Mike... You know set new standards every-time you post one of these chapters mate, your talent is unique and you stand alone as far as I'm concerned mate, YOU are in a league of your own when it comes to dark descriptive, visual explosive writing, this was CLASS, pure Class, can't wait for the next one. Fu*k! It[the site] won't let me six you...AGAIN![it Says I have three left]
It was a six mate, without doubt.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2010
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Thanks, Hitch! I'm really enjoying the Walking Man, and I now know the ending. Not sure all will like it, but we shall see. A dark poem can only have a dark conclusion.
Mike
Comment from patmedium
I enjoyed it very much indeed, Mike. Shame you had to finish her off, though. I wait with interest to see future developments. xxxx
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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I enjoyed it very much indeed, Mike. Shame you had to finish her off, though. I wait with interest to see future developments. xxxx
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Thank you, Pat :-). We're heading towards the conculsion now, and unfortunately her end was necessary... I'm so glad you're still ejoying the ride!
Mike
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From its humbler beginning, Mike, this has developed into a marvellous tale. Full of agony and desperation. Gilded with love and shot down in flames. Lovely. Pat. xxx
Comment from fionageorge
I am not sure that the word 'enjoyed' is appropriate. As I read this long and well structured poem, I found it to be morbid and depressive, yet it had a glimpse of redemption. The words flowed well, and the depth of your words were powerful.
Warmest regards, Marijke
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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I am not sure that the word 'enjoyed' is appropriate. As I read this long and well structured poem, I found it to be morbid and depressive, yet it had a glimpse of redemption. The words flowed well, and the depth of your words were powerful.
Warmest regards, Marijke
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Thank you, Marijke. I do have a habit of saying 'I hope you enjoyed', when it's not always appropriate! I'm so glad you're continuing to read and appreciate this series. Writing it has been an interesting experience for me.
Mike
Comment from Realist101
YES! What an apocalyptic scenario!!! JEEZZZ, I never want to be in a place like this. Your words are so descriptive, this really could be a good novel even Mike! I could find no errors either. I am trying to train myself to look for them, rather than just give opines! A soft pet for the adorable feline?? ") Susan
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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YES! What an apocalyptic scenario!!! JEEZZZ, I never want to be in a place like this. Your words are so descriptive, this really could be a good novel even Mike! I could find no errors either. I am trying to train myself to look for them, rather than just give opines! A soft pet for the adorable feline?? ") Susan
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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There's nothing wrong with opines, Susan. They're just as important and helpful as error correcting and nitpicking. Little Ozzy (aka Cartman) says thankee kindly! :-)
Mike
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Thank you Mike, I am glad to hear this. ANd please don't ever? take the pix of Ozzy off? ") S.
Comment from J.E. Brown
You tell a great story with only a few words. Dark story, yes, but great none the less!! Thanks for sharing this one with us and I look forward to reading more from you.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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You tell a great story with only a few words. Dark story, yes, but great none the less!! Thanks for sharing this one with us and I look forward to reading more from you.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Thank you, JE. I'm sop glad you enjoyed it; this series is heading for its conclusion now and it's been a fascinating writing experience.
Mike
Comment from Bethany5121
Only the Lord can save your souls,
you cannot him deny."
He is the only one who can save our souls
I loved reading this part it probably is my favorite.
I hope to read more of you work.
you are a very talented individual
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Only the Lord can save your souls,
you cannot him deny."
He is the only one who can save our souls
I loved reading this part it probably is my favorite.
I hope to read more of you work.
you are a very talented individual
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Thank you, Bethany :-). Im so glad you enjoyed this chapter.
Mike
Comment from Vicwhiskey
This reminds me of Percy Shelly's "Mask of Anarchy" and I loved the whole thing. I'd quote the bits I really liked, but that might take awhile, so I'll leave you with a hearty and heartfelt WELL DONE! and bid you goodnight. VW
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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This reminds me of Percy Shelly's "Mask of Anarchy" and I loved the whole thing. I'd quote the bits I really liked, but that might take awhile, so I'll leave you with a hearty and heartfelt WELL DONE! and bid you goodnight. VW
Comment Written 29-Jun-2010
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2010
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Thanks, Vic. Now that's how I like to star the day, with a great review :-). I'm thrilled you enjoyed it, mate, and stoked you were moved to a special rating. I'm really enjoying writing this series.
Mike