Sories Poetically Speaking
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Disclosure"A complete story in written as a poem.
37 total reviews
Comment from Alchera
I do like its thematic subject! It's perfectly penned throughout its eight rhyme versification stanzaic structure ballad format and its beautifully maternal life lying narrative storyline to her son and death's truth revelation. In the end all the knots come to a head. Great work!
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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I do like its thematic subject! It's perfectly penned throughout its eight rhyme versification stanzaic structure ballad format and its beautifully maternal life lying narrative storyline to her son and death's truth revelation. In the end all the knots come to a head. Great work!
Comment Written 14-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 15-Feb-2020
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Thank you so much for the comments on this poem a wrote several years ago. I'm glad you liked it. I'm sorry it wasn't still paying.
Beth
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Happy Saturday Beth and take care of yourself joyfully with all your beloved ones. Please, never tell me about paying because I really never cared of these cents for reviewing and I have alwauys been saying that I would like to pay an only sum at the beginning of the year and reviews should be written by people that really like the text, poem or passage otherwise it's better fir them to skip it because many reviews are only nonesense and very poor indeed. they put just words that have so sense without referring to the text not examoned but only for those few cents. Excuse me for this but there are reviewers who have a set fitted model to copy and paste and go on. The hipocrite lecteur hasn't the strength to say no and skip in front of that money and believe me those are not real poets but only poor miserable people without a soul. Real reviewing takes time and comprehension of the text examined as you, dearest new friend well know. I only review when I have time enough without subtracting my time to writing. I am nobody but my dream is to leave something written to my children and six grandchildren. I have never try seriously to publish because editors require to much money and few a serious people ( this is what happens in Italy for publishing for the first time) I would like to find a serious editor evrn paying if it's Worth doing it but I want to see my work distributed not left and abandoned for ages and never put on the market. You are Always welcomed, new friend of mine. it has been a pleasure to review your poem whose thematic I had also treated some time ago. Blessings from Italy. Tony
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I appreciate you writing the long note to let me know, the money doesn't matter. You are right about a lot of the work we read not making sense. If I can't find anything good about It, I
have to pass no matter what it is paying. I may publish with Amazon because it is not expensive and if people like it, it will be there for them to purchase. You have control of the promotion. I have friend, who is doing quite well on Amazon.
Beth
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Thank you so much for your help and suggestion! I will give a look at it. Blessings Tony
Comment from MAMONIA
What a truly fantastic work and a deserving win.
You wrote a most worthy piece and it was enough
to break any mother's heart.
Is this a true story or did you make it up?
I cannot believe how beautifully the rhyme and
flow and meaning and message was so strong.
My best to you. Congratulations.
Marie
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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What a truly fantastic work and a deserving win.
You wrote a most worthy piece and it was enough
to break any mother's heart.
Is this a true story or did you make it up?
I cannot believe how beautifully the rhyme and
flow and meaning and message was so strong.
My best to you. Congratulations.
Marie
Comment Written 29-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much Marie for the wonderful six star review. It is mostly fiction but loosely based on something I heard about. I'm so you liked it.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
Great poem, Beth. Can see why it was awarded so worthily, too.
Good work. Very real and I am sure we know folks in this situation.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Great poem, Beth. Can see why it was awarded so worthily, too.
Good work. Very real and I am sure we know folks in this situation.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2013
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2013
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Thank you so much for the six star review. I really appreciate the nice comments.
Beth
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No worries
Re-organizing my book a bit some more info I thought of to add so changing some chapters around a bit.
Comment from mrskristinball
Wow! Powerful, beautiful, tragic...I simply love your poetry. I only have a few six stars left, so I'm rating this poem a five because it is a contest winner. You are a very gifted poet!
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Wow! Powerful, beautiful, tragic...I simply love your poetry. I only have a few six stars left, so I'm rating this poem a five because it is a contest winner. You are a very gifted poet!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2013
reply by the author on 21-Aug-2013
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Thank you for reading and ocmmenting on this one even though it is no longer active. i'm so pleased you liked it.
Beth
Comment from expressions9
Wow - what a story!
Congrats on winning this contest, though some time ago. It's through reviewing another of your poems that I had a look at your profile page and discovered this. I love your style of writing Beth and this is a truly heartbreaking story, told so well in your poem.
(I think I'll fan you now :))
God bless you,
Christine
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Wow - what a story!
Congrats on winning this contest, though some time ago. It's through reviewing another of your poems that I had a look at your profile page and discovered this. I love your style of writing Beth and this is a truly heartbreaking story, told so well in your poem.
(I think I'll fan you now :))
God bless you,
Christine
Comment Written 31-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2013
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Thank you Christine for reviewing this older poem. I glad you like my style of writing and I'd love to have you for a fan.
Beth
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You're welcome Beth :)
Christine
Comment from marre5
Some revelation - you've conveyed the awfulness of hearing this news from a loved parent.
Skillful use of all the key words - the only one that's a bit of a stretch is orangle glow to face.
The refrain is great.
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Some revelation - you've conveyed the awfulness of hearing this news from a loved parent.
Skillful use of all the key words - the only one that's a bit of a stretch is orangle glow to face.
The refrain is great.
Comment Written 21-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the review on this much older poem. There probably would have been a more effective way to use the word "orange". I really appreciate the six stars.
Beth
Comment from H. Rebecca
You have reviewed some of my work I found my way to this poem from your profile. It deserves the win it received. Well done!
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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You have reviewed some of my work I found my way to this poem from your profile. It deserves the win it received. Well done!
Comment Written 19-Nov-2012
reply by the author on 19-Nov-2012
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Thank you so much for the lovely review. I'd almost forgotten about that one. I'm so pleased you liked it.
Warm wishes,
Beth
Comment from Janeyjane
Amazing poem, just want to say congrats on coming 1st !!, you deserve it great use the words given, i wrote one myself although it didnt come as close as being as good as this one !
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2010
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Amazing poem, just want to say congrats on coming 1st !!, you deserve it great use the words given, i wrote one myself although it didnt come as close as being as good as this one !
Comment Written 22-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for the six star rating. I really appreciate your kind words. I think they are fun to write. I was really surprised to win.
Beth
Comment from teacherdub
BethShelby, I am amazed at the quality of this one. The pain, the loss, the truth, the cost...all are evident within the stanzas of this fine piece of poetry. Congradulations on this masterfully woven poem.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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BethShelby, I am amazed at the quality of this one. The pain, the loss, the truth, the cost...all are evident within the stanzas of this fine piece of poetry. Congradulations on this masterfully woven poem.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you so much for the six star rating. I appreciate so much the review and lovely comments. I'm just sorry you didn't get points or member dollars for reviewing this.
Smiles,
Beth
Comment from Heather Wilkes
This is a very good and extremely creative approach to this writing prompt! You've crafted this poem expertly and have a wonderful voice throughout with a great twist at the end. That's not an easy feat. Wonderful! I can see why you've won :-) Congratulations!
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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This is a very good and extremely creative approach to this writing prompt! You've crafted this poem expertly and have a wonderful voice throughout with a great twist at the end. That's not an easy feat. Wonderful! I can see why you've won :-) Congratulations!
Comment Written 20-Dec-2010
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2010
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Thank you Heather, I really appreciate the six star rating. I was pleasantly surprised to have won.
Beth