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Lonely Hearts Meet

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Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.

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Comment from MelB
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Great chapter and stats. The stats are accurate and hopefully, help to raise some awareness. I've been in the position Anna is in and it's not a fun place to be.

 Comment Written 08-Jan-2017


reply by the author on 08-Jan-2017
    Thank you for reading this with no moneys attached.
Comment from NaughtieScribe
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This is yet another powerful chapter. I like how Anna is trying to assert more control over her life. In doing so she begins to break Bobby's real power over her. The control she allowed him to exert. That's what abuse really is in the end, a means of control.

 Comment Written 17-May-2012


reply by the author on 20-May-2012
    Thank you so much.
Comment from rzubey
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Thanks for the background on Anna. I'm glad to know more about her and how she met Bobby. She did make a terrible mistake, but I don't think she should feel like she has to pay for that mistake by staying with him. I also feel for her situation. I'm really anxious to see what Troy's father will say to her.

 Comment Written 27-Jan-2012


reply by the author on 28-Jan-2012
    I am glad you got to the background, there is more coming.
Comment from Tammara
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I have been reading every page, and I am so sorry that you had to go through this. This had to be so hard for you to wright about.

Tammara

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2011


reply by the author on 21-Nov-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2011
    Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
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Something else I forgot to mention was that, in Arizona anyway, the initial hearing is held at 9pm of the day of the arrest, or 9am of the next day if the arrest is too late in the day to get it together, at which bail is set or denied and Bobby's appointed a public defender if he can't afford a lawyer. The prosecutor would, without doubt, ask the court to deny him bail.

Roberta

 Comment Written 10-Aug-2011


reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
    okay, I will make that clear. Thank you.
Comment from missy98writer
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Barbara,
chapter nine is awesomely written. Your dialogue is excellent. Your descriptive scheme is superb. I'm so behind. I hope you are feeling well. I pray for you, my friend. Keep on writing. I'm out of sixes so "virtual six."
Melissa.

 Comment Written 12-May-2011


reply by the author on 12-May-2011
    Thank you for the virtual six. I always appreciate hearing from you.
Comment from writerwish
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This is great dialogue. It took me awhile to catch on who Bobby and Troy were, but I did, despite that I just tuned in. I think this is believable and I do think the stats add to the realism. Great job. I'll have to read the rest now.

 Comment Written 06-May-2011


reply by the author on 07-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and understanding.
Comment from Espresso momma
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This is a part of a relationship I just can't understand. When someone harms someone they supposedly love and do it over and over like a sickness. You tell this so vividly and the emotion is felt through out the story.Thanks.

 Comment Written 05-May-2011


reply by the author on 05-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from yestyn
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What a story I have read it to chapter 9 and every one is so well written yes lots of women go through this violence and do not tell a soul, mostly we are ashamed to admit this happens to them well done and I hope you are feeling better

 Comment Written 05-May-2011


reply by the author on 05-May-2011
    Thank you for your kind review and support.
Comment from Helen Tan
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Seems like the attraction between Anna and Troy is inevitable - red alerts going off everywhere.

They won't even consider him their grandchild.
Harsh treatment - sometimes children are just born into a situation through no fault of theirs.

but winced in pain
Consider deleting "in pain", I feel it's implied in "winced".

How do I get away from my husband?
I think if Anna is thinking this, she would refer to Bobby as "Bobby" rather than "my husband".

 Comment Written 05-May-2011


reply by the author on 05-May-2011
    Thank you for your eagle eye and the kind review.