An Innocent Affair?
A lusty afternoon19 total reviews
Comment from eyesthatsee
"Seconds later...running [hip should be his I think] ...
Awwww Thesis, wonderfully written. I thought it was a little strange that you wrote from a woman's perspective, however you pretty much got it right. I was with you every second. Well done you. If I were your wife I would definintely say what cha doing Thursday night sweetie ... warmly ETS
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"Seconds later...running [hip should be his I think] ...
Awwww Thesis, wonderfully written. I thought it was a little strange that you wrote from a woman's perspective, however you pretty much got it right. I was with you every second. Well done you. If I were your wife I would definintely say what cha doing Thursday night sweetie ... warmly ETS
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
Comment from missy98writer
You've written excellent erotic purple prose, Thesis. Your splendid descriptive writing is erotic. Your dialogue is sexy and your narrative made my key board catch on fire. Your ending is great. Their son had drank perfume interrupting their anniversary roll in the hay. Thanks for joining a writing promote contest I sponsored. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Melissa.
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You've written excellent erotic purple prose, Thesis. Your splendid descriptive writing is erotic. Your dialogue is sexy and your narrative made my key board catch on fire. Your ending is great. Their son had drank perfume interrupting their anniversary roll in the hay. Thanks for joining a writing promote contest I sponsored. I wish you good luck in the contest.
Melissa.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
Comment from zwrite1
sexy and well-written. I loved the little twist at the end. The encounter with the couple on the elevator really helped to set the stage too. I wish they had not been interrupted. What a bummer! zwrite1
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sexy and well-written. I loved the little twist at the end. The encounter with the couple on the elevator really helped to set the stage too. I wish they had not been interrupted. What a bummer! zwrite1
Comment Written 27-Jun-2011
Comment from c_lucas
A very interesting read. As usual, it is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
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A very interesting read. As usual, it is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for an easy read. There is very good imagery and descriptive scheme.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2011
Comment from tjames
Holds a person's interest, as most sex scenes do. The ending was surprising which had a nice twist. I did feel there were a couple of places that maybe a different choice of words would have been a little better, but I think overall, it was good.
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Holds a person's interest, as most sex scenes do. The ending was surprising which had a nice twist. I did feel there were a couple of places that maybe a different choice of words would have been a little better, but I think overall, it was good.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
Comment from IndianaIrish
This is a hot and exciting story, John. You are the master of erotica. Great ending that had me fooled...you placed the seduction and sex like it was an affair. Best of luck in the contest with this steamer.
Indy :>)
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This is a hot and exciting story, John. You are the master of erotica. Great ending that had me fooled...you placed the seduction and sex like it was an affair. Best of luck in the contest with this steamer.
Indy :>)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
Comment from irishauthorme
Good, hard stuff with a surprise ending, and I liked the exchanges with strangers in the elevator, hilarious!
It's reassuring for a couple to still be that passionate on what must have been at least their 5th anniversary.
Good, tight writing with a chronology that made sense.
irish
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Good, hard stuff with a surprise ending, and I liked the exchanges with strangers in the elevator, hilarious!
It's reassuring for a couple to still be that passionate on what must have been at least their 5th anniversary.
Good, tight writing with a chronology that made sense.
irish
Comment Written 24-Jun-2011
Comment from amada
This was an adventure in its own. The end was surprising. You got me fooled! This is also a good example to follow for all of us married for a long time ladies.
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This was an adventure in its own. The end was surprising. You got me fooled! This is also a good example to follow for all of us married for a long time ladies.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Very cute story and good luck with the contest.
He backed away slightly and stared into my eyes. (adverb close to the verb, slightly backed)
Trader Vic's (wonderful resteraunt, although I haven't been there in years)
Derek was pulling my skirt up slowly, (slowly pulling)
His lips found my neck and he kissed me while her (HE) unbuttoned my blouse, pulled it off my shoulders, and let it fall to the floor.
running hip lips and tongue on my inner thighs (hips, lips,)
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Very cute story and good luck with the contest.
He backed away slightly and stared into my eyes. (adverb close to the verb, slightly backed)
Trader Vic's (wonderful resteraunt, although I haven't been there in years)
Derek was pulling my skirt up slowly, (slowly pulling)
His lips found my neck and he kissed me while her (HE) unbuttoned my blouse, pulled it off my shoulders, and let it fall to the floor.
running hip lips and tongue on my inner thighs (hips, lips,)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011
Comment from Darla9
Brilliant read :) I was convinced the woman was having an affair, I was not expecting the twist at the end. Great contest entry, well done :)
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Brilliant read :) I was convinced the woman was having an affair, I was not expecting the twist at the end. Great contest entry, well done :)
Comment Written 23-Jun-2011