Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 25 "Part two, Chapter 8"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
I can understand Anna's hesitation and determination. Not only will the house bring back the horror she lived, but closing the door on even a bad part of your life takes a lot of will. I can't believe how involved you have me in this story. Very talented writer.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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I can understand Anna's hesitation and determination. Not only will the house bring back the horror she lived, but closing the door on even a bad part of your life takes a lot of will. I can't believe how involved you have me in this story. Very talented writer.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you.
Comment from rzubey
You kept us wondering what's going to happen next. That's awesome. In my last comment I wondering if someone would take away Anna's growing confidence. I hoped not, but I'm wondering if Bobby's attorney would be the person to do it. As always, I'm looking forward to reading more. Great job!
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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You kept us wondering what's going to happen next. That's awesome. In my last comment I wondering if someone would take away Anna's growing confidence. I hoped not, but I'm wondering if Bobby's attorney would be the person to do it. As always, I'm looking forward to reading more. Great job!
Comment Written 07-Feb-2012
reply by the author on 07-Feb-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
"Troy was the only person who knew about it." Her eyes met Paul's. "{But] I didn't tell him[] either]. I reached for a book and my sweater sleeve rose. He saw the bruises and wanted details. You know the rest."
Roberta
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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"Troy was the only person who knew about it." Her eyes met Paul's. "{But] I didn't tell him[] either]. I reached for a book and my sweater sleeve rose. He saw the bruises and wanted details. You know the rest."
Roberta
Comment Written 16-Sep-2011
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2011
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Thank you
Comment from *erin*
This was a very good chapter. Very well written and believable. I could connect with your characters instantly. I could not find any mistakes or grammatical errors. I'm looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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This was a very good chapter. Very well written and believable. I could connect with your characters instantly. I could not find any mistakes or grammatical errors. I'm looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Larrypic11
It continues to be believable, but more inportantly, absorbing. The characters are clear by what they do and how they react. Good luck as you continue. Larry
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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It continues to be believable, but more inportantly, absorbing. The characters are clear by what they do and how they react. Good luck as you continue. Larry
Comment Written 10-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Cogitator
A quick snapshot sometimes carries much meaning. Very enjoyable piece and well written. I hope your vacation was pleasant and look forward to more of your work...John
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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A quick snapshot sometimes carries much meaning. Very enjoyable piece and well written. I hope your vacation was pleasant and look forward to more of your work...John
Comment Written 10-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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I want to make it realistic with the daily stuff, but not boring, so I try to highlight it. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from arnie47
This was very well written. I mean the dialogue came so natural and in narrative you didn't stretch for descriptions. You used what was right there in front of you and this made the whole piece a slice of real life. I can really smell those biscuits and taste the jam and butter on them. Nice job.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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This was very well written. I mean the dialogue came so natural and in narrative you didn't stretch for descriptions. You used what was right there in front of you and this made the whole piece a slice of real life. I can really smell those biscuits and taste the jam and butter on them. Nice job.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review. I needed this review. Someone gave me a four stating I needed to describe the weather. I see no reason to discuss the weather. Your review confirmed my belief.
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Elmore Leonard in a book of his about writing said never mention weather.
Comment from ElPoetry001
Wonderful story.
Love cannot be bought or sold, and a person's emotions cannot be put on hold, people are not cattle, not chattel, and cannot be owned.
A beating has a predetermined fate:
It cannot produce Love, only hate, and so the circle of abuse must be broken, a beating is not Love, it is a token, of the control inflicted, of the freedoms always restricted, by someone who seeks to know why you avoid his greeting, disregarding the former beating.
Young women need the support of parents, friends, relatives, and the law to protect them from domestic violence they often face in a relationship where the aggressor is often fighting his own demons, but retaliates against his girlfriend or wife; collateral damage, for he cannot overcome his own demons; get away, make him stay away, or have the law put him away.
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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Wonderful story.
Love cannot be bought or sold, and a person's emotions cannot be put on hold, people are not cattle, not chattel, and cannot be owned.
A beating has a predetermined fate:
It cannot produce Love, only hate, and so the circle of abuse must be broken, a beating is not Love, it is a token, of the control inflicted, of the freedoms always restricted, by someone who seeks to know why you avoid his greeting, disregarding the former beating.
Young women need the support of parents, friends, relatives, and the law to protect them from domestic violence they often face in a relationship where the aggressor is often fighting his own demons, but retaliates against his girlfriend or wife; collateral damage, for he cannot overcome his own demons; get away, make him stay away, or have the law put him away.
Comment Written 10-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review and insight.
Comment from Auroraboreal800
I LOVED HOW YOU MANAGED THE DIALOGUES IN THIS STORY. THIS IS ANOTHER WONDERFUL CHAPTER, WELL WRITTEN. ANNA'S STORY KEEPS ALL MY INTEREST.
VERY GOOD JOB!!
:)
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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I LOVED HOW YOU MANAGED THE DIALOGUES IN THIS STORY. THIS IS ANOTHER WONDERFUL CHAPTER, WELL WRITTEN. ANNA'S STORY KEEPS ALL MY INTEREST.
VERY GOOD JOB!!
:)
Comment Written 10-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 10-Aug-2011
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
Lucky Anna to have so much support; I ran from my apartment in the middle of the night with my two children and left everything. I couldn't live alone, because he would find me and break in. Back then, even the police was no help unless he hurt you. But, I'm glad she's moving on and has a friend like Paul. I hope she's safe in her new apartment.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Lucky Anna to have so much support; I ran from my apartment in the middle of the night with my two children and left everything. I couldn't live alone, because he would find me and break in. Back then, even the police was no help unless he hurt you. But, I'm glad she's moving on and has a friend like Paul. I hope she's safe in her new apartment.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2011
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2011
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Bobby will return. I appreciate your kind review and insight.