Comment from Author Unknown

Excellent

I'm intrigued as to what this murderer has against the priest!! This chapter continues to pull us in Bev...very good dialogue in combination with narration. You know how to end these with a cliff-hanging draw. :) I'm sitting here trying to decipher what all this has to do with the Native Americans. Most interesting. :) x. A.

 Comment Written 16-Dec-2013

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reply by the author on 17-Dec-2013

Well, it might be said he has good reason which becomes more clear as the story progresses. Thanks so much, buddy, your insights are so helpful and will be all part of the revision pool. Hugs, Bev

Comment from CALLAHANMR

Exceptional

I'm new to your writing and I'm really glad I found it. I had to go back and start from the beginning. You had me hooked right away. I noticed that one reviewer compared it to Father Dowling. The writer that came to my mind is one of my favorites, the late Tony Hillerman. The combination of Native American mysticism and Catholicism is intriguing. I see a winner here. The viewpoint question has also been brought up, but it doesn't bother me. I have one question just out of curiosity. The name Debra Padget reminds me of the beautiful young actress who played a Native American in the movie Broken Arrow. Is that just a coincidence? Best wishes, Marilyn

 Comment Written 07-Jun-2013

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reply by the author on 08-Jun-2013

Hi, Marilyn. I'm really honored by this gracious and very generous review. I consider Tony Hillerman one of the finest mysery writers of his generation. Your oberservation is most humbling. And I am surprised at the fact that Debra Padget was in that movie. I've never seen it, but I do remember it. I loved the stars of the 40's and 50's so much, but don't recall ever seeing a movie of hers. I will have to check it out.

I know that reading through my novel again when I begin the extensive editing process, I will find some chapters that won't work as well as others and that my writing has changed as I've gone along - the influence of reviews, classes and books on writing. POV is definitely one of my boogaboos, so I'm trying to stay on top of that.

Long-winded response :0)

Thanks you for getting it, Marilyn. That means so much to me. And I appreciate, once again, your supportive insights.

Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from justjo66

Excellent

Wow, the suspense is really increasing right off the bat.
I'm enjoying reading your work very much. Your descriptions
put me right in the scene. I'm afraid that is where I'm often weak...I tend to get to the point too fast. ;o) I would like to ask a question, however, does the first paragraph about the geese have any underlying meaning or is it just setting the scene?
Thanks

 Comment Written 01-Feb-2013

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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2013

Hi, justjo. Thank you so much for going back to read my chapter - that's very kind of you.

As to the description of the geese, my intention was to show the continuity of nature, as opposed to events in the human realm. Also, I wanted it as a means of showing that the 'death' of winter was coming. Thanks for asking. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from eowyn0003

Exceptional

Once again you provide an excellent read. I assume (and we know what that does) you are using omniscient POV. Are you sure that's the best POV. I think it works, just asking so I am not surprised later.

Lura

 Comment Written 20-Dec-2012

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reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

Well, I'm going to freely admit that I have been learning as I've gone along with this novel. I gravitated toward that POV as a rookie. I may not stick with it for my subsquent novels (though this one will have to stay consistent). Some folks do it very well, like charlie, but it's a bit off-putting sometimes. So, I do appreciate your sharing that insight and your very generous review, Lura.

reply by eowyn0003 on 20-Dec-2012

I know how precious those six star ratings are, you deserve it. The thing about omniscient POV is it isn't used too often now days. Personally I don't mind it -- although you might want to use limited omniscient where you have insight into your murder and one other character. Just a suggestion.

Lura

reply by eowyn0003 on 20-Dec-2012

I will read more of it as I go along. It may be a few days before you hear from me again.

Lura

reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

Lura, I'm just thrilled with the interest and insights you've already shown! I know this is a busy time of year. Thanks again, Bev

reply by the author on 20-Dec-2012

And I do appreciate your suggestion. I'm always learning from my reviewers and love getting the helpful feedback. POV is a tricky beast to conquer, at least it is for me LOL. Thanks for the information. :0) Bev

reply by eowyn0003 on 20-Dec-2012

Your welcome.

Lura

Comment from Jean Lutz

Excellent

The ending begs the reader to go on. Is the good priest to be his next victim. Or is now a spiritual battle to be continued. Very suspenseful.

 Comment Written 07-Oct-2012

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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2012

There is a spiritual battle brewing that's going to involve several people. I thank you for reading and so generously reviewing, Jean. Hugs, Bev

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

You have my attenion with this story, Bev! I had a strange dream last night about being chased through a church by a crazy priest. I can't remember it enough to write about it. Funny how I would find this story today to remind me of it.

 Comment Written 28-Sep-2012

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reply by the author on 28-Sep-2012

Whoo boy, we're meeting on some otherworldly plain. That's so cool! Thanks so much, Joy.

Love ya, Bev

Comment from gazzagodbod

Excellent

love to see them geese geese flying in there v formation it amazes me how they all know how to do it lol thanks love your work my friend gazzaxx

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2012

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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2012

Thanks so much, gazza. I really appreciate the supportive and generous review. Warm regards, Bev

Comment from LAFraser

Excellent

This is a great chapter in a wonderful story. I am certainly enjoying this read. Now, on to A Graveyard Moon. Thanks for posting. :)
~Eilish

 Comment Written 19-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 19-Mar-2012

Thanks so much, Eilish. I so appreciate your interest in the novel. And your generous review! Cheers, Bev

reply by LAFraser on 19-Mar-2012

You're welcome, Bev. :)
Have a great night, my friend.
~Eilish

reply by the author on 19-Mar-2012

You, too, Eilish.

Comment from Margaret Snowdon

Excellent

Another great chapter, my friend..
good clear descriptive writing, which
makes it a pleasure to read.

self-pity
inheritence
inheritance
Anxiety began to leach his euphoria[;](,) when, at last, the one he'd been waiting for arrived - by using a semi-colon you are separating this sentence (if that makes sense) - I feel the semi-colon needs to be a comma

Margaret

 Comment Written 13-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 13-Mar-2012

Thank you, Margaret. I really appreciate your great review and taking time to improve some of the areas. I'll be sure to make the changes. Warmest regards, Bev

Comment from hyway94

Excellent

I must have missed something in the story. What is the message that he left? This is a really good story and I tried but could find no mistakes. Very good, keep it up.

 Comment Written 12-Mar-2012

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reply by the author on 12-Mar-2012

Hi, hyway. This is only the second chapter in the novel and I've got about twenty more to go. So, the message and other details have going to be spread out over that length. Hope you will stop by again! And thanks for the great review. Bev