Metaphorical Seas
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Myth of the Sea"a series of blank impressions
22 total reviews
Comment from rhymelord
Dear Phil,
What a great rendition of Daedalus/Icarus story. Beautifully maintained iambic metre with excellent sentence structure. Not the same metre, but compares well with Hiawatha.
Regards
Reg
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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Dear Phil,
What a great rendition of Daedalus/Icarus story. Beautifully maintained iambic metre with excellent sentence structure. Not the same metre, but compares well with Hiawatha.
Regards
Reg
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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Hello there Reg
I thank you yet again for the kind words and encouragement:
I actually put the notes in after the first couple of reviews mauled me for celebrating family violence!
Your feedback serves to encourage me â??
Warm regards
phill
Comment from squid152
Phil, you did a great a job here. Sounds to me like you want to write a book. I liked "wells of wax" and "the plumage of a thousand mortal beasts: each folded, layered, blended one by won. You make me feel like I am in a evil video game.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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Phil, you did a great a job here. Sounds to me like you want to write a book. I liked "wells of wax" and "the plumage of a thousand mortal beasts: each folded, layered, blended one by won. You make me feel like I am in a evil video game.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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Hello there
I thank you yet again for the kind words and encouragement:
I actually put the notes in after the first couple of reviews mauled me for celebrating family violence!
Your feedback serves to encourage me â??
Warm regards
phill
Comment from Sherry Asbury
You are a great writer. I was horrified at first mention of the branding iron, but did quickly surmise who this was about. Legends are marvelous things that take on a life of their own.
You wrote this wonderfully and I enjoyed every single word.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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You are a great writer. I was horrified at first mention of the branding iron, but did quickly surmise who this was about. Legends are marvelous things that take on a life of their own.
You wrote this wonderfully and I enjoyed every single word.
Comment Written 28-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2012
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Hello there
I am sorry to come back to you so late â?? thank you for the kind words and encouragement:
I actually put the notes in after the first couple of reviews mauled me for celebrating family violence!
Your words encourage me â?? and the fact you review with blinkers is a real plus in my book.
Warm regards
phill
Comment from Chris Tee
Phill you are writing excellent poetry but take it one step further now and add colour and artwork to you work for enhancement.
Edgar Allan Poe commissioned artist in the 1800's to enhance his poetry and I suggest you look at it from this angle old sport.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Phill you are writing excellent poetry but take it one step further now and add colour and artwork to you work for enhancement.
Edgar Allan Poe commissioned artist in the 1800's to enhance his poetry and I suggest you look at it from this angle old sport.
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hello Chris
Thanks for the note: I have thought about this â?? let us see...
Cheers
phill
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Before you paste your poem you click on FanArtreview.com just above the title ok.
Then you click there and follow all the prompts. Once you have selected the art then only you paste your poem.
The color is in two circles at the bottom you can click on the circles or select from the box the one is back ground on the right and font on the left. go and try you might have to cut the poem and paste again after you have selected the picture Now if your poem is posted go to edit and click as per the previous instruction
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
A great new spin on the Greek classic tale of Icarus. Bold and descriptive and graphic. Really well done, in my opinion. Most effective.
great work. keep going...
cheers
js
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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A great new spin on the Greek classic tale of Icarus. Bold and descriptive and graphic. Really well done, in my opinion. Most effective.
great work. keep going...
cheers
js
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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many thanks
I had to explain the tale in the notes as I picked up flak for writing about domestic violence!
cheers
phill
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your blank verse and its strong meter. I admired you multiple metaphors, including "welts of wax," "garnet scalds," "plumage" and "canopy." Thanks for adding the notes about the legend. -Joan
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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I enjoyed your blank verse and its strong meter. I admired you multiple metaphors, including "welts of wax," "garnet scalds," "plumage" and "canopy." Thanks for adding the notes about the legend. -Joan
Comment Written 27-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hello Joan
Thank you for your kinds words and encouragement
warm regards
phill
Comment from ajdevore
Sorry, I can't see Icarus surviving. It's just not Greek! But of course that's a matter of opinion and the imagery and meter is firs class. Please select a picture, it makes the entire reading experience much more pleasurable.
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Sorry, I can't see Icarus surviving. It's just not Greek! But of course that's a matter of opinion and the imagery and meter is firs class. Please select a picture, it makes the entire reading experience much more pleasurable.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hello
Thanks for the review.
Yes youâ??re right â?? like all the Greek legends, he dies.
Ah well...
Cheers
phill
Comment from marilyo
This is is a lovely poem! The romance of the myth that you expressed in poetic parlance is palpable in your work. The notes helped put the story together but even without it, the poem because of its vivid imagery could have stood alone. Kudos!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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This is is a lovely poem! The romance of the myth that you expressed in poetic parlance is palpable in your work. The notes helped put the story together but even without it, the poem because of its vivid imagery could have stood alone. Kudos!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hello
Thanks for the review.
Yes, I put the notes in so that people would not misunderstand. When I first put it up I had several comments around the pros and cons of household abuse!
Thank you for the kind words and the encouragement
I hope you have a brilliant day
Cheers
phill
Comment from Amy Comstock
Thank you for your author notes! At first, I thought this was about abuse..it is so nice to read your meaning. Great job expressing this!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Thank you for your author notes! At first, I thought this was about abuse..it is so nice to read your meaning. Great job expressing this!
Comment Written 26-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2012
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Hello
Thanks for the review.
Yes, I put the notes in so that people would not misunderstand. As I read it, it is just a story of a boy leaving home, who ignores his parents advice and...well, sails too close to the sun.
Cheers
phill
Comment from jtconcessions
I love the story of Daedalus and Icarus. It's always been one of my favorites. I really like how you summarized it in your short poem.
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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I love the story of Daedalus and Icarus. It's always been one of my favorites. I really like how you summarized it in your short poem.
Comment Written 25-Mar-2012
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2012
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Hello there
Many thanks for finding the time to read this
I really appreciate it
phill