Lonely Hearts Meet
Viewing comments for Chapter 64 "part three, Chapter 19"Anna and her son escape from a man-made Hell.
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Comment from NaughtieScribe
Goodness how much is this poor woman supposed to take. Coma, beating, surgery, and now a code blue. Are you leading us to a fatal ending, or just tugging at our hearts one last time. Either way I need to know the outcome.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Goodness how much is this poor woman supposed to take. Coma, beating, surgery, and now a code blue. Are you leading us to a fatal ending, or just tugging at our hearts one last time. Either way I need to know the outcome.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2012
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2012
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Thank you for your kind review. I have been on vacation and came back 43 reviews. I think they are all from you. Holy Cow!!!!!!!!!!
Comment from teacherdub
Anna still struggling to survive. Plot weaves Troy's past into storyline i.e. adopted. Cliffhanger effect used well at the end to carry reader on to the next Chapter. Well done, good flow. td
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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Anna still struggling to survive. Plot weaves Troy's past into storyline i.e. adopted. Cliffhanger effect used well at the end to carry reader on to the next Chapter. Well done, good flow. td
Comment Written 11-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2012
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I am sorry you have to read this with no bonus points attached. Thank you.
Comment from Roberta Joan Jensen
From one crisis to another. Poor Anna. When will it ever stop?
Nice insert about Troy's background, but maybe Paul should mention something about what a problem Troy was in the beginning to contrast with Michael. Since Michael is so little, he won't have those memories. Troy couldn't have been a model child in the beginning.
Roberta
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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From one crisis to another. Poor Anna. When will it ever stop?
Nice insert about Troy's background, but maybe Paul should mention something about what a problem Troy was in the beginning to contrast with Michael. Since Michael is so little, he won't have those memories. Troy couldn't have been a model child in the beginning.
Roberta
Comment Written 31-May-2012
reply by the author on 01-Jun-2012
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Thank you for the kind review. I am so sorry you are reading these when they don't have any points attached.
Comment from writerwish
Great going. Anna is really messed up. Only one suggestion. Troy says...She's such a good person"..Sounds too impersonal. Maybe add something what they used to do. Or that she was always there to help or something.
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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Great going. Anna is really messed up. Only one suggestion. Troy says...She's such a good person"..Sounds too impersonal. Maybe add something what they used to do. Or that she was always there to help or something.
Comment Written 13-May-2012
reply by the author on 14-May-2012
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I will check that area. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from whizpurr ^-^
Hello Barbara,
Good to read this chapter of your book. I enjoyed it even though I popped in on a middle chapter. I right away noticed how well you do dialogue and I liked the way you combine speech and thought. Great technique. The converstations flowed naturally and did not seem at all forced. This gave me an immediate "feel" for your story. Your last line did had a pull to it which arouses the reader's curiosity and leaves one wanting to read the next chapter. I can see I could learn much about good writing through reading yours! Thanks for sharing. Hugs, W ^-^
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Hello Barbara,
Good to read this chapter of your book. I enjoyed it even though I popped in on a middle chapter. I right away noticed how well you do dialogue and I liked the way you combine speech and thought. Great technique. The converstations flowed naturally and did not seem at all forced. This gave me an immediate "feel" for your story. Your last line did had a pull to it which arouses the reader's curiosity and leaves one wanting to read the next chapter. I can see I could learn much about good writing through reading yours! Thanks for sharing. Hugs, W ^-^
Comment Written 03-May-2012
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review and the encouraging words,
Comment from Belinda
Hi, Barbara. A relieving chapter. I think the foudation of love between Troy and Anna is very strong. A perfect fairy tale ending, I suppose.
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Hi, Barbara. A relieving chapter. I think the foudation of love between Troy and Anna is very strong. A perfect fairy tale ending, I suppose.
Comment Written 03-May-2012
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from The Stranger
well I have been otherwise occupied of late, sorting out my very own "Anna", as my daughter found to her dismay that her latest male friend was a total asshole, this certainly brings home all you have written
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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well I have been otherwise occupied of late, sorting out my very own "Anna", as my daughter found to her dismay that her latest male friend was a total asshole, this certainly brings home all you have written
Comment Written 02-May-2012
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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I am sorry for the things going on in your life. I will pray for the situation.
Comment from xxjsfuncxxxity
This is another good, well-written, entertaining installment. I think the dialogue could maybe use a little work still, but maybe that's just me.
Overall, great stuff, not much to critique. Keep going...
cheers
js
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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This is another good, well-written, entertaining installment. I think the dialogue could maybe use a little work still, but maybe that's just me.
Overall, great stuff, not much to critique. Keep going...
cheers
js
Comment Written 02-May-2012
reply by the author on 03-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amada
Great chapter and a very ending because now I can't wait what will be happening to Anna. Fast and furious chapter will all the happening in the hospital ward. Fabulous.
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Great chapter and a very ending because now I can't wait what will be happening to Anna. Fast and furious chapter will all the happening in the hospital ward. Fabulous.
Comment Written 02-May-2012
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from jadapenn
I really liked this chapter. One could feel Troy's angst and the tension while everyone waits to hear whether Anna will make it. I don't know what code blue is. Guess another emergency. Well written with good action. luv jada
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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I really liked this chapter. One could feel Troy's angst and the tension while everyone waits to hear whether Anna will make it. I don't know what code blue is. Guess another emergency. Well written with good action. luv jada
Comment Written 02-May-2012
reply by the author on 02-May-2012
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Yes, a code blue is emergency. It usually means the heart has stopped. Thank you for the kind review.