Comment from Dan-C

Excellent

That was good. I really like the way you moved the story along and the way you described the sex scene. The ending was unexpected.
Thanks for sharing
Dan

 Comment Written 23-Feb-2017

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reply by the author on 23-Feb-2017

Hi there...I had to read this again to remember it. Thanks for going back and finding something older...this one took 'me own self' by surprise. It's fun to write things you normally don't, once in a while. Thanks again Dan...s.

Comment from jarrenh718

Exceptional

This was gripping work! I had a tense knot in my stomach reading all the way through. I enjoy stories that seem to have a clear path but deviate at the last second to a destination just as satisfying. The word choice ("Nubile breasts, firm and white peeked out from the gauzy top") created imagery that was both seductive and murderous. I'm definitely glad I subscribed to your work or I would miss out on stories like this. Keep it up, I look forward to the next.
- Jarren

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012

Hi again Jarren! One more sincere thanks for your confidence in this one. I appreciate you delving into the dark side. :) Susan

Comment from humpwhistle

Excellent

Another song title---are you planning a series, Suse?
It just goes to show that rape is a dangerous
line of work. I'm not sure though, if the man was chosen because he was convenient, or if he was a planned target.
Perhaps you mean to let that question dangle.

Peace, Lee

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012

I swear, this is not on purpose! I am putting a few of my stories together for a book. I will look at this again too. I think it's included. Flash is like that...supposed to be just that one scene? I get different 'rules' for flash from different people. Thank you Lee...it's nice to hear from you. :-> S.

reply by humpwhistle on 17-Jun-2012

Suse, it's not my business, but I don't think Flash has been officially defined yet. A story has to be a complete story. She called him 'daddy' but I don't know if he is her real daddy, or if he's a surrogate for her rage.
You say she has hated him all her life, but that can still be symbolic. Sue, I only ask these questions because I think you need to know. We cool?

Lee

reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012

Dear friend...your opinion is always welcome by me. No matter what it is. You are right, this is not clear...I wondered about it, but was tired...and so let it slide. Not good. :) You know you're cool with me, Lee. I hope. I like honest help. It's the ones who are just trying to being someone down, that I get upset over. I thank you and really appreciate!! :) Susan

Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)

Excellent

This was quite a surprise, both that you wrote it and in how it ended. I don't usually review the adult selections, but I broke my rule for you. Well written and done in good taste!!! Love you!!! Debbie

 Comment Written 17-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012

Hey there! Thank you for reading this, and I send you a huge hug. :) Susan

Comment from cheyennewy

Excellent

Hi Susan,

WOW, this is an erotic story which you wrote so well. Your surprise ending caught me off guard and I don't blame Miss Blue Jeans sinking the knife deep. You have such good writing skills that is apparent in everything you write....blessings, chey

 Comment Written 16-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 16-Jun-2012

Hi Chey! What a wonderfully enthusiastic note. I really admire that you braved the muddy waters. I enjoy stepping into the dark occasionally. AND it's fun to shock? Many expect just kitten and horse tales/tails lol! from me, I guess! Thank you my friend. xoxo. Susan

Comment from Dave M

Excellent

Susan,

This is an excellent story about a woman who planned better than the man. I enjoyed this post and found one nit:

"He moved gracefully [to toward - one of these words should go] the ladies room door and held it open for the blonde beauty."

Dave

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012

Hi Dave...thanks for braving the dark side...and thank you for seeing the extra word. I tried to change it the other night from 'toward' to 'to' and forgot/TOO Sleepy!!! , to delete the 'toward'. Like tonight, I have no business being up. The winds' howling tho, and I can't sleep even tho I feel like a zombie. Stress is a killer. Thanks so much. You're the best. Susan

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

You really caught me off guard with the ending of this one. Excellent story with awesome imagery too. I continue to be impressed and amazed by your ability to say so much in so few words. Great work with this one.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012

Hey there! Thank you for reading this, and I send you a huge hug. :) Susan

Comment from Darla9

Excellent

Very well written, you made me hate the guy! I was so happy to see him die. That's how all the rapists should end. Well done.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012

Hey there! Thank you for reading this, and I send you a huge hug. :) Susan

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Oh my. I guess bluejeaned gal is no body to mess with. Once again you told a complete story in a very few words. You did a good job.

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 17-Jun-2012

Hey there! Thank you for reading this, and I send you a huge hug. :) Susan

Comment from A.R. Curry

Excellent

Lol loved it. (I have a bum/father and his daughter/cop in sorta the same position), but I can't get into much detail with this review. I have to rush off to do some homework so I'm going to just point out a few things.

"watching closely her form"- sounds awkward
"He moved gracefully to toward"- too/also? Or cut it ?

Not much, but hope it helps. Enjoy your day.


Curry

 Comment Written 15-Jun-2012

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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2012

Good help Curry! You are right and I'll fix these asap! Thanks for the help!! :) Susan