The Phoenix and the Necromancer
is all life a tragedy of sorts?29 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a full and well told story in abab formatted quatrains. It tells of how being childless can lead you to do desparate things to have one. I like how safe the baby dragon sounds in the beginning. The poem show what desparate humans will believe and do to possibly make their lives safer and happier. Which doesn't always happen as the moral says.
Keep writing
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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This is a full and well told story in abab formatted quatrains. It tells of how being childless can lead you to do desparate things to have one. I like how safe the baby dragon sounds in the beginning. The poem show what desparate humans will believe and do to possibly make their lives safer and happier. Which doesn't always happen as the moral says.
Keep writing
Good luck in the contest.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thanks so much for reminding me of this piece from my portfolio. It's been a long time since I read it!
Mike
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No problem.
dragonpoet
Comment from WilliamDeen
Your "Share a Story in a Poem" Poem, The Phoenix and the Necromancer, is absolutely wonderful. I LOVE THIS Story!!! The poem has an excellent rhyming scheme and the cadence is sure and smooth. The lesson learned is exceptional too: You can't snuff out the flame and not get burned.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Your "Share a Story in a Poem" Poem, The Phoenix and the Necromancer, is absolutely wonderful. I LOVE THIS Story!!! The poem has an excellent rhyming scheme and the cadence is sure and smooth. The lesson learned is exceptional too: You can't snuff out the flame and not get burned.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks so much for this fantastic review, William. I'm thrilled you enjoyedbmy tale so much and hugely encouraged by your response :-).
Mike
Comment from James crofoot
Really liked the subject, magical and fantasy. It was a pretty easy read, although the rhythm was slightly off in a couple places. BUT the rhyme was definitely cool, you did and excellent job with that. keep up the good work. peace
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Really liked the subject, magical and fantasy. It was a pretty easy read, although the rhythm was slightly off in a couple places. BUT the rhyme was definitely cool, you did and excellent job with that. keep up the good work. peace
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks, James. I enjoyed telling a story this way - I'll have to write more poems like this. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend.
Mike
Comment from BadEducation
A tale from the fantasy world which grabbed my attention from start to finish. It flowed into a rhythm of pleasure and delight. I enjoyed reading and was entertained.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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A tale from the fantasy world which grabbed my attention from start to finish. It flowed into a rhythm of pleasure and delight. I enjoyed reading and was entertained.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks very much, BE - I'm really glad you enjoyed the read :-).
Mike
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, fleedleflump, you did a great job writing this poem about the phoenix and the battle he waged across the kingdom, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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this is very well written, fleedleflump, you did a great job writing this poem about the phoenix and the battle he waged across the kingdom, i enjoyed reading it. good luck in the contest
Comment Written 28-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thank you, SWJ :-). I really enjoyed writing this one.
Mike
Comment from micci
I did enjoy the read it was a very well written poem, it had a great flow to it which just made it so easy to read, the picture was perfect for your words too.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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I did enjoy the read it was a very well written poem, it had a great flow to it which just made it so easy to read, the picture was perfect for your words too.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thank you, Micci - I'm so happy yoi enjoyed it :-).
Mike
Comment from babylonia
mike,
a lesson that most refuse to learn. another good one would be the simplest ... when you play with fire ... you will get burned. sigh. very very intense. wow~ imagery is excellent. love the picture.
love,
barbara
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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mike,
a lesson that most refuse to learn. another good one would be the simplest ... when you play with fire ... you will get burned. sigh. very very intense. wow~ imagery is excellent. love the picture.
love,
barbara
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks so much, Barbara! The epic poem concept really appeals to me, althoigh obviously this is short by those standards, but I had a great time writing it. So glad you liked it!
Mike
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mike,
i remember some of your longer epics. they were good as well but this one definitely draws in the attention of the reader. how is your day going? well, i hope.
love,
barbara
Comment from TammyGail
Mike I do hope your poem wins it would be a damn shame if not... this was just wow simply amazing the way you weave your words.. each chosen carefully and placed with care
best of luck pal and thanks for the read.....
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Mike I do hope your poem wins it would be a damn shame if not... this was just wow simply amazing the way you weave your words.. each chosen carefully and placed with care
best of luck pal and thanks for the read.....
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks so much, Tammy! I wasn't sure what I was going to write for this contest, but when I sat down to try this just came pouring out. I'm thrilled you liked it :-).
Mike
Comment from Harlequin
Mike, I really enjoyed this poem. Great cross-rhyming kept up throughout the poem. A great thought-provoking story in this goof lowing poem. Thanks for sharing. :-) Ed
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Mike, I really enjoyed this poem. Great cross-rhyming kept up throughout the poem. A great thought-provoking story in this goof lowing poem. Thanks for sharing. :-) Ed
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks so much, Ed - I'm really glad tou enjoyed the read :-).
Mike
Comment from Chris Tee
This poem titled "The Phoenix and the Necromancer" is indeed an absolutely great piece of poetry. you have sprinkled excellent alliteration around as well. Mike well done here it is marvelous poetry.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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This poem titled "The Phoenix and the Necromancer" is indeed an absolutely great piece of poetry. you have sprinkled excellent alliteration around as well. Mike well done here it is marvelous poetry.
Comment Written 27-Jun-2012
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2012
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Thanks for the great review, Chris - I really appreciate it :-).
Mike