Saturday Matinee
This town ain't big enough for both of us.28 total reviews
Comment from Spiritual Echo
I can see why the win. This is terrific. Have not read your tie-mate, but will do that in a sec.
Maybe you should spend a little more time in this genre. You are combining story-telling skills with great alliteration.
There's a more light-hearted treatment of the subject that has to feel like a vacation. Have some fun with poetry.
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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I can see why the win. This is terrific. Have not read your tie-mate, but will do that in a sec.
Maybe you should spend a little more time in this genre. You are combining story-telling skills with great alliteration.
There's a more light-hearted treatment of the subject that has to feel like a vacation. Have some fun with poetry.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 07-Jul-2012
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Thanks so much, Ingrid. I do like playing with poems, but my strength lies in prose. Promoting on both sides of the aisle is difficult. Thank you again. Peace, Lee
Comment from Oldsteamer
Wonderfully pieced together. Nice staccato effect with the bullets.
I was there once upon a time. Twenty cent double feature and a cartoon.
Doesn't get any better.
Thank you.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Wonderfully pieced together. Nice staccato effect with the bullets.
I was there once upon a time. Twenty cent double feature and a cartoon.
Doesn't get any better.
Thank you.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Oldsteamer. I'm glad this brought back some memories. X
Comment from Ekim777
Those were the days when fun and entertainment were a cheap irrepressible matinee with a smooch on the side, with a bit of luck and the old walls of the flick-house trembled with the brouhaha and no one cared about the script. You say it all and more, making it sound like an old time ballad. Those were the days when kids were not too hung up to be kids and they were ready to shout it to the roof tops. Ekim777
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Those were the days when fun and entertainment were a cheap irrepressible matinee with a smooch on the side, with a bit of luck and the old walls of the flick-house trembled with the brouhaha and no one cared about the script. You say it all and more, making it sound like an old time ballad. Those were the days when kids were not too hung up to be kids and they were ready to shout it to the roof tops. Ekim777
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thank you so much, Ekim. I'm delighted my poem evoked a memory or two. Thanks again. X
Comment from barkingdog
This was just like going to the Saturday Movies. I used to stay all day. I guess it was a place to dump the kids in the olden days. LOL
It was great to hear the old western again. Wonderful post and you had my vote earlier before this popped up for review.
Best of luck in this contest. :)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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This was just like going to the Saturday Movies. I used to stay all day. I guess it was a place to dump the kids in the olden days. LOL
It was great to hear the old western again. Wonderful post and you had my vote earlier before this popped up for review.
Best of luck in this contest. :)
Comment Written 06-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thank you, barking dog. I'm so glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from Carole Rosa
To the author of Saturday Matinee, You've completed the requirements for the contest and I believe that your piece is a winner. I could feel your noise and it completed the story with clearly composed words to compliment your piece. Very Nice. Carole
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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To the author of Saturday Matinee, You've completed the requirements for the contest and I believe that your piece is a winner. I could feel your noise and it completed the story with clearly composed words to compliment your piece. Very Nice. Carole
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Carole. I'm delighted you enjoyed. X
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Humpwhistle, And I'm delighted that you won even if it was a tie!Good piece. Carole
Comment from Gungalo
Yessir those were the days, eh? A movie and popcorn and the whole shebang! IT's unfortunate that they don't exist like this any more for kids don't know what they are missing.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Yessir those were the days, eh? A movie and popcorn and the whole shebang! IT's unfortunate that they don't exist like this any more for kids don't know what they are missing.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thank you. Yes, it's a shame the days of double features with a cartoon are gone. Fun to remember, though. Thanks again. X
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Sigh ...
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ditto. sticky floors and all. Lee
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LOL.
Comment from Jean Lutz
Reminds me of a trip into town on Saturday. The wildest thing I did was go to the movies. I think admission was 10 cents. But I suspect most of them other things were carried on, too. Best wishes with your entry.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Reminds me of a trip into town on Saturday. The wildest thing I did was go to the movies. I think admission was 10 cents. But I suspect most of them other things were carried on, too. Best wishes with your entry.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Oh, Jean, I remember those days. We kids ruled the theater on Saturday afternoons. If you had a quarter, you had everything you needed. I'm so glad you enjoyed. X
Comment from JennaG
This is a great cacophony poem! The topic is so creative and the words you've used to create noise in the reader's mind are perfect! I especially liked the "clop, clop, clopping" of the ponies and the "piano plinking, glasses clinking". Wonderful choice of words! This was truly a pleasure to read. Best of luck to you in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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This is a great cacophony poem! The topic is so creative and the words you've used to create noise in the reader's mind are perfect! I especially liked the "clop, clop, clopping" of the ponies and the "piano plinking, glasses clinking". Wonderful choice of words! This was truly a pleasure to read. Best of luck to you in the contest. :)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thank you, Jenna. I'm delighted you enjoyed. X
Comment from J.Byers
A wonderful cacophony poem. Excellent rhyming couplets, and good use of internal rhyme in your stanzas. You also use onomatopoeia well, which can be difficult to do. An excellent entry. I wish you all the very best of luck in the contest.
Blessings,
~ J.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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A wonderful cacophony poem. Excellent rhyming couplets, and good use of internal rhyme in your stanzas. You also use onomatopoeia well, which can be difficult to do. An excellent entry. I wish you all the very best of luck in the contest.
Blessings,
~ J.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2012
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Thank you, J. I'm glad you enjoyed. I went to high school with a guy named Jeff Byers--could you be he? X
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No, I'm Juliana Byers ;)
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Good. I think I still owe Jeff a dollar. Nice meeting you, Juliana.
Lee
Comment from minihawke
Oh Wow! What a great job you did. This poem stands on its own merit but is also the perfect poem for cacophony contest! Sure brings back lot of memories. Didn't see anything I would change...meter or words or rhymes. Wish I had a 6 star.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Oh Wow! What a great job you did. This poem stands on its own merit but is also the perfect poem for cacophony contest! Sure brings back lot of memories. Didn't see anything I would change...meter or words or rhymes. Wish I had a 6 star.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2012
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2012
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Thank you, minihawke. I love those memories myself. I really appreciate. X
