The Tree
A picture inspired story30 total reviews
Comment from billscott
I wanted more the story to continue...that is my only complaint..lol.
Great concept, character development, plot, issue and resolve.
I enjoyed it greatly!
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
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I wanted more the story to continue...that is my only complaint..lol.
Great concept, character development, plot, issue and resolve.
I enjoyed it greatly!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2013
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I'm so glad you enjoyed the story. That's for the great review.
Beth
Comment from sjkelly
I see how you were inspired by the photo is it real or photoshopped. There's a tree in my garden that looks like it has a face and freaks me out all the more now thanks to your story. Love a good scare story without to much blood or guts. Nicely portrayed .
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I see how you were inspired by the photo is it real or photoshopped. There's a tree in my garden that looks like it has a face and freaks me out all the more now thanks to your story. Love a good scare story without to much blood or guts. Nicely portrayed .
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I laughed about your face in the tree but maybe it is not so funny. Don't go digging around the roots. LOL
Beth
Comment from apacheman
It seems a little obvious and linear to me, without enough development of the wife's supposed talent, or anything in the way of a twist.
The wife should have gotten a stronger, more clear impession the closer they got to the tree and the grave. It might have been better if it turned out to be NOT associated with anything the uncle did, somehow; perhaps a far older crime or injustice, or something that he had no control over.
As it is, there is no mystery, no depth to pull one further in. A richer description of the woods and house might help, but in the end it is the STORY behind it all that is lacking.
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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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It seems a little obvious and linear to me, without enough development of the wife's supposed talent, or anything in the way of a twist.
The wife should have gotten a stronger, more clear impession the closer they got to the tree and the grave. It might have been better if it turned out to be NOT associated with anything the uncle did, somehow; perhaps a far older crime or injustice, or something that he had no control over.
As it is, there is no mystery, no depth to pull one further in. A richer description of the woods and house might help, but in the end it is the STORY behind it all that is lacking.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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I have to thank you for reading and I'm very thankful your rating doesn't count on FanStory. I got so many six star reviews that it would have hurt anyway. I'm sorry it fell flat for you. The idea on this site are to try to look for things you do like as well as those you don't.
Comment from Soledadpaz
To me it looks like a woman in agony. I sure hope it's not a real tree, but I can see how it would inspire you to write such a beautifully detailed story, very descriptive and eerie. I probably shouldn't have read it before going to bed!
Sol
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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To me it looks like a woman in agony. I sure hope it's not a real tree, but I can see how it would inspire you to write such a beautifully detailed story, very descriptive and eerie. I probably shouldn't have read it before going to bed!
Sol
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I have no idea about the picture but I doubt if it is read. It may have been photoshopped.
Beth
Comment from Shela Francis
Wow! Doubled wow! That's unbelievable! I mean I believe it it's just have me lost for words. That's something, and I think that should be told like you said, may be a book are is it already a book? This is very scary, and you were right she wanted rest and closure. Thank you for sharing this with the site. God Bless!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Wow! Doubled wow! That's unbelievable! I mean I believe it it's just have me lost for words. That's something, and I think that should be told like you said, may be a book are is it already a book? This is very scary, and you were right she wanted rest and closure. Thank you for sharing this with the site. God Bless!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you for a really great review and for the beautiful six stars. No it isn't in a book. It's just something I came up with after seeing the picture our writing group gave us for inspiration. I really enjoyed reading your comments.
Beth
Comment from Cornelius2000
A very spooky story indeed, and one well told. Your dialogue writing is very good and you have a nice balance of dialogue and narrative. The picture is amazing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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A very spooky story indeed, and one well told. Your dialogue writing is very good and you have a nice balance of dialogue and narrative. The picture is amazing.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the great review. I appreciate your comments. The picture is amazing. I can't believe it could be real but I don't know how they did it.
Beth
Comment from tklivory
Very well told story! You set up the concept well, doled out information at just the right pace, and deftly worked with Jon's inner thoughts to show the progression of the story.
The ending was slightly predictable with the tree being destroyed now that the dead woman had closure, but it wasn't a detraction from the story. Merely an observation.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Very well told story! You set up the concept well, doled out information at just the right pace, and deftly worked with Jon's inner thoughts to show the progression of the story.
The ending was slightly predictable with the tree being destroyed now that the dead woman had closure, but it wasn't a detraction from the story. Merely an observation.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and the nice ocmments. You're probably right about the ending although it wasn't planned. I just threw that in as an afterthought. In the beginning the story was much shorter and everyone kept telling me it needed to be longer.
Beth
Comment from amada
I like your story, the picture is amazing but sort of creepy as well, very for a fast moving story. The dialog works very well. Women have great intuition.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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I like your story, the picture is amazing but sort of creepy as well, very for a fast moving story. The dialog works very well. Women have great intuition.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. I'm glad you liked the story.
Beth
Comment from Fluffyhead
This sounds like something on criminal minds or something. I couldn't atop reading it. I might have to read again just because
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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This sounds like something on criminal minds or something. I couldn't atop reading it. I might have to read again just because
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Wow! Thanks so much for the six star review. I'm so glad you like the story.
Beth
Comment from trevendon
Hey, that is really inspired writing. The atmosphere is tense and uncertain until things really start to move. I like the short staccato sentences, driving me on to read more. Just couldn't resist. What a great story !
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Hey, that is really inspired writing. The atmosphere is tense and uncertain until things really start to move. I like the short staccato sentences, driving me on to read more. Just couldn't resist. What a great story !
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you so much for the six star review. I'm so glad you liked the story and it held your interest.
Beth