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Steamed

contest entry

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Comment from expressions9
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This is quite funny if I've understood it correctly. Looks like you've ditched the mean old lady's toy poodle and returned to your old job in the boiler room, as that was the last straw? Character, setting, conflict and resolution accomplished! :) Well written.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
    Thank you and you did read it correctly.
reply by expressions9 on 16-Sep-2012
    You're welcome.
Comment from Carrie Carson
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Ned did a fine job...what I would probably never have been brave enough to do.

No spag, good form.

Good luck in the contest. :) Carrie

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
    Thank you very much!
Comment from mauial
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Great 100 word flash dash as you met all the requirements of the prompt. Great and funny ending with fifi swims and Ned is back.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
    Thank you for your kind appraisal!
Comment from terry drake
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You stayed within you limit and told your story that surly will intrigue the reader to want more. The personality of your character shines through the language you presented.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
    Thank you very much!
Comment from Writingfundimension
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This is a great contest entry. I wish I had a six to give you. You've told a funny, complete story in a very short space of time. Good luck with this excellent post!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
    Thank you so much!
reply by Writingfundimension on 16-Sep-2012
    You're welcome.
Comment from mommerry
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Great job of telling an interesting tale in so few words. I found nothing negative to say about it. If the word count allowed it,I would have like it to end: Fifi swims. Ned is back in boiler room.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
    Thank you and I wanted that same ending as well!
Comment from jmdg1954
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Excellent! Now, I'm no expert but to me it appears you have all the components and no obvious errors.
Nicely done and best of luck in the contest...
John

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
    Thank you John! I am no expert but am now glad to think of you as one, given this review! :) Thanks again.
Comment from humpwhistle
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Well, the good news is that you seemed ill-suited
to the job anyway. I'm just glad Fifi wasn't an infant.
Besides, it was the old broad who deserved the dunking.
Very good entry. It has all the requisites.

Good luck.

Peace, Lee



tourists and other commercial freight--I suppose tourists are commercial freight of a sort, but that's not very flattering.


 Comment Written 15-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
    Astute remarks indeed! Thanks! I must point out that Ned is not the flattering type and thinks of both freight and tourists as on the same level. :)
    This just in; Fifi made it back to shore and was last seen living it up with a mongrel of uncertain morals who fathered her litter of three.
reply by humpwhistle on 15-Sep-2012
    Way to go, FiFi!

    You, author, have inspired me. I may need to enter this fray. L
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
    You go, Lee! Hope you win!
reply by humpwhistle on 15-Sep-2012
    That's very gracious of you. But I suppose I need to write something first. L
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
    That's the way it works ...
reply by humpwhistle on 15-Sep-2012
    easy for you to say.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
    It's only a hundred words combined with my brilliance ... oh, I'm sorry ... :)
Comment from Bloomer Burbs
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Hi the author

A very calm and sedate flash story until the final lines. I just had to laugh - but what about poor little cute Fifi

As well as laughing I nearly cried - I love dogs you see.

Excellent write. The very best of luck, Pete

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
    Yeah, I know, Fifi is the innocent bystander but if you have to throw a dog overboard, at least it's a poodle.

    This just in; Fifi made it back to shore and was last seen living it up with a mongrel of uncertain morals who fathered her litter of three.
reply by Bloomer Burbs on 15-Sep-2012
    It seems Fifi has become just like her ex owner - A right bitch, LOL

    Just could write another story about Fif and her new life with her sex mad mongrel - Could be the dog's bollcks!!!!!
Comment from wiljacro
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HI! A great tale of Ned, the guy with a Will of his own. A man who does not tolerate Rude, Bossy and Ill-mannered people. The mean old lady, certainly got her come-uppence, but, I hope that the Toy Poodle was a good swimmer! wiljacro.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2012

reply by the author on 15-Sep-2012
    This just in; Fifi made it back to shore and was last seen living it up with a mongrel of uncertain morals who fathered her litter of three.