Who's the Idiot?
100 word dash28 total reviews
Comment from IndianaIrish
Congratulations on winning this contest, John! You got all the requirements of the contest and a different twist for the end. I'm so pleased you won.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Congratulations on winning this contest, John! You got all the requirements of the contest and a different twist for the end. I'm so pleased you won.
Smiles,
Indy :>)
Comment Written 24-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2012
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Thsnk you for everything... Johnny
Comment from firenice
This is indeed a full story told in the 100 words. Great job, I noticed you have won the contest congrats. Thank you for sharing your work with us and happy writing.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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This is indeed a full story told in the 100 words. Great job, I noticed you have won the contest congrats. Thank you for sharing your work with us and happy writing.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Thank you firenice for sharing. It's my first sole contest winner ( tied twice). John
Comment from deb552
Well done with this story. You capture the reader's attention right from the beginning, and your words create vivid images of the father/ son interaction. I can picture the impulsive 5 yr. old, running around, not thinking about possible dangers, and the father, act so quickly out of panic, to save his son. The cop is totally believable, as a cop. I think you managed to do a great job with including all you needed to according to the rules. Best of luck in the contest! I think this could be a winner!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Well done with this story. You capture the reader's attention right from the beginning, and your words create vivid images of the father/ son interaction. I can picture the impulsive 5 yr. old, running around, not thinking about possible dangers, and the father, act so quickly out of panic, to save his son. The cop is totally believable, as a cop. I think you managed to do a great job with including all you needed to according to the rules. Best of luck in the contest! I think this could be a winner!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Wow... Thanks Deb for reading and the commentary and of course the well wishes. I appreciate your time in all this. Oh yes, I might have s used telescope you can borrow.... JohnnyJersey
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You are so welcome! Hope you do well in the contest! I'll let u know about the other. LOL!
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Comment from Spitfire
Brilliant. Although I hope no cop would be stupid enough to write such a ticket. You had my attention from beginning to end. The cop could have ticketed the father too for arguing with him!
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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Brilliant. Although I hope no cop would be stupid enough to write such a ticket. You had my attention from beginning to end. The cop could have ticketed the father too for arguing with him!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2012
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All true Spitfire... Thsnks for reading and commenting. I truly appreciate it. JohnnyD
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Oh yes you have done well this is well written showing how stupid and thoughtless cops can be at times the car or the child no contention child every time well done good luck regards Jill
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Oh yes you have done well this is well written showing how stupid and thoughtless cops can be at times the car or the child no contention child every time well done good luck regards Jill
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you Jill for reading and commenting.
Comment from expressions9
Really illustrates the plight of having to deal with the trauma of potential danger, doing the right thing and then the frustration of being penalised. Shows the main character, setting and conflict well.
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Really illustrates the plight of having to deal with the trauma of potential danger, doing the right thing and then the frustration of being penalised. Shows the main character, setting and conflict well.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you do much for taking the time to read and for the positive comments. Greatly appreciated.
Comment from Carrie Carson
One way or another...some days are like that.
No spag, good form. And able to fit it within this format...amazing.
Excellent. Good luck in the contest. :) Carrie
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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One way or another...some days are like that.
No spag, good form. And able to fit it within this format...amazing.
Excellent. Good luck in the contest. :) Carrie
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you Carrie for reading and positive comments.
Comment from sgalletti
Different approach and ending, which I appreciated. What great fun to read these short little snippets with a whole variety of ideas for content. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Different approach and ending, which I appreciated. What great fun to read these short little snippets with a whole variety of ideas for content. Best of luck in the contest. Sue
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you Sue for reading and commenting. Appreciated!!
Comment from MizKat
This is a neat 100 Word Dash story. Can't win for losing it seems. I know he'd rather save his son than the car though. Great job on this. Kat
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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This is a neat 100 Word Dash story. Can't win for losing it seems. I know he'd rather save his son than the car though. Great job on this. Kat
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you do much Kat for reading and your time to comment. I appreciate it
Comment from Marisa3
A cop's perspective; go figure. My heart skipped a beat the minute I read that the five year old jumped out of the car and began to run around. I'm glad I only had to read a few more words to find out that he was corralled in time. To hell with the damn car it can be replaced and I think it was a pretty poor decision on the part of the officer to ticket the guy at all.
You did a tremendous job on this and I enjoyed it very much. You managed in very few words to engage my concern for the boy and to tick me off with the actions of the officer; that's a gift!!
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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A cop's perspective; go figure. My heart skipped a beat the minute I read that the five year old jumped out of the car and began to run around. I'm glad I only had to read a few more words to find out that he was corralled in time. To hell with the damn car it can be replaced and I think it was a pretty poor decision on the part of the officer to ticket the guy at all.
You did a tremendous job on this and I enjoyed it very much. You managed in very few words to engage my concern for the boy and to tick me off with the actions of the officer; that's a gift!!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2012
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Thank you Mariss for your time and positive review. I greatly appreciate this.