Unacceptable Behavior
An Easy Way To Get Fired17 total reviews
Comment from Lucian Carter
Great stuff, nice twist. Poetic justice is the dish of the day and the serving is generous. This is mature, but not erotic and certainly not explicit. With just 99 words it tells a complete story. Good luck with selling the piece.
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Great stuff, nice twist. Poetic justice is the dish of the day and the serving is generous. This is mature, but not erotic and certainly not explicit. With just 99 words it tells a complete story. Good luck with selling the piece.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2017
Comment from HittorX
oh, Ouch and DAMMMNNNNNN! That was classic and funny as can be! I loved it, Im late I know, but ROFLMAO that was good!!! I still have a smile on my face :-)
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oh, Ouch and DAMMMNNNNNN! That was classic and funny as can be! I loved it, Im late I know, but ROFLMAO that was good!!! I still have a smile on my face :-)
Comment Written 13-Dec-2012
Comment from Mai Mai
Great flash fiction! So good I had to read it twice. It was a very unexpected ending. I absolutely loved it. It was very interesting, very well written and extremely entertaining. I'll have to take a look and see what other goodies you have hidden away. Best of luck, always.
Mai Mai
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Great flash fiction! So good I had to read it twice. It was a very unexpected ending. I absolutely loved it. It was very interesting, very well written and extremely entertaining. I'll have to take a look and see what other goodies you have hidden away. Best of luck, always.
Mai Mai
Comment Written 19-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Thanks so much, Mai Mai. I have a lot of naughty posts in my portfolio, with new ones added all the time, LOL. Thanks for reading. - John
Comment from adewpearl
Unexceptable - should be Unacceptable
don't be shy, honey - add comma for direct address
Excellent dialogue only story that conveys well the emotions and attitudes of both speakers
I laughed out loud at this poor schmuck's plight. LOL Brooke :-)
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Unexceptable - should be Unacceptable
don't be shy, honey - add comma for direct address
Excellent dialogue only story that conveys well the emotions and attitudes of both speakers
I laughed out loud at this poor schmuck's plight. LOL Brooke :-)
Comment Written 18-Sep-2012
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2012
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Thanks, Brooke. eah, this guy was screwed, LOL. I fixed the spag. Thanks for pointing it out. I read it several times late at night over a bottle of wine. Duh, okay, that was the problem. - John
Comment from Glasstruth
For a hundred words you did magnificent. The unexpected ending threw me, which is great. Knew by the writing something was up. Good luck with the contest! Les
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For a hundred words you did magnificent. The unexpected ending threw me, which is great. Knew by the writing something was up. Good luck with the contest! Les
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from deb552
LOL! Score a point for women business owners. Your dialog is totally believable, and I can easily picture the whole story in my mind. The employee's face is the brightest shade of red from embarrassment, and I have feeling the new owner has a big smile on her face, as she fires the jerk. Good luck in the contest!
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LOL! Score a point for women business owners. Your dialog is totally believable, and I can easily picture the whole story in my mind. The employee's face is the brightest shade of red from embarrassment, and I have feeling the new owner has a big smile on her face, as she fires the jerk. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from visionary1234
oh WELL DONE FLASH FICTION HERE! (though "unacceptable" perhaps??) You've hit all the high points, main character, setting, conflict, resolution - wham, bam, thank you ma'am ... so to speak! good luck - this is a GREAT entry!!! :) Sharyn
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oh WELL DONE FLASH FICTION HERE! (though "unacceptable" perhaps??) You've hit all the high points, main character, setting, conflict, resolution - wham, bam, thank you ma'am ... so to speak! good luck - this is a GREAT entry!!! :) Sharyn
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from forestport12
Now this was an original gaff twist. no doubt a top contender. Folks love the powerful ending of an unexpected and well written surprise. Good luck!
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Now this was an original gaff twist. no doubt a top contender. Folks love the powerful ending of an unexpected and well written surprise. Good luck!
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
I had to laugh at this you have done well my friend this reads well through out escorted out of the building very clever good luck in the contest regards Jill
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I had to laugh at this you have done well my friend this reads well through out escorted out of the building very clever good luck in the contest regards Jill
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012
Comment from elliejean
I love the story. The man got himself n big trouble. An escort doesn't get handled that way. You are also buying class when you pay one of them. I like the bosses attitude. Great work,.
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I love the story. The man got himself n big trouble. An escort doesn't get handled that way. You are also buying class when you pay one of them. I like the bosses attitude. Great work,.
Comment Written 16-Sep-2012