Tall Tales and Short Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Hoppity Grasshopper "Personal growth stories for children
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello to you notesandmore
I like to read fun poems like your they are so full of life and happiness for children to read
Smiles and thank you for sharing.
Gert
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2012
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Hello to you notesandmore
I like to read fun poems like your they are so full of life and happiness for children to read
Smiles and thank you for sharing.
Gert
Comment Written 27-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2012
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You are so welcome. Thanks for the review. I am trying to write some 'serious' stuff.(just kidding) I enjoy being alive and writing when I can. Best wishes for 2013, Carolyn
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Smiles to you Carolyn
Gert
Comment from BeasPeas
Imaginative and warm, two friends having fun together and tuckered out at the end of their jaunt. Last three lines aren't as smooth to read as the others. I think it's because the first two of the last stanza are a bit too long and need to be shortened.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Imaginative and warm, two friends having fun together and tuckered out at the end of their jaunt. Last three lines aren't as smooth to read as the others. I think it's because the first two of the last stanza are a bit too long and need to be shortened.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Thanks for your feedback and constructive critism, it's always good the get another opinion about your work. I will look at this and probaly make some much needed revisions. Best wishes, Carolyn
Comment from elliejean
I love the poem. Two friends playing, my what a day. The friends hopped along. My kids used to experiment. Some times they would try to hop every where they went just to see how a cricket or bunny would spend their day. Great work.
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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I love the poem. Two friends playing, my what a day. The friends hopped along. My kids used to experiment. Some times they would try to hop every where they went just to see how a cricket or bunny would spend their day. Great work.
Comment Written 26-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 26-Dec-2012
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Thank you so much for the cute review. Aren't kids just wonderful. I think that is why I find tem so much fun to write for. Best to you always
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Thank you so much for the cute review. Aren't kids just wonderful. I think that is why I find tem so much fun to write for. Best to you always
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Thank you so much for the cute review. Aren't kids just wonderful. I think that is why I find tem so much fun to write for. Best to you always
Comment from nurendi
This was a very cleverly imagined poem, and one that I could easily see being read to a child or a group of children. A lovely image of friendship and lighthearted fun. Well written.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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This was a very cleverly imagined poem, and one that I could easily see being read to a child or a group of children. A lovely image of friendship and lighthearted fun. Well written.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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thank you for reviewing the poem. It is always gratifying to hear from your peers. Best wishes in 2013
Comment from Mission Girl
Sweet. I like the flow. Perfect for a children's book of poems. I think you might want to arrange the words differently. I would like to see it right justified instead of centered.
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Sweet. I like the flow. Perfect for a children's book of poems. I think you might want to arrange the words differently. I would like to see it right justified instead of centered.
Comment Written 25-Dec-2012
reply by the author on 25-Dec-2012
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Thanks for your encouragement and suggestions for improvement. I appreciate your candor. Best wishes for a great new year.