The Client
The last seance25 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Something wasn't right from the beginning. His grandma would have used him to help with customers. And her all-white thin hair and him only fifteen? The age was wrong.And, the grandma decides whether or not the child goes to the wedding? Not likely. And the kid stays with grandma not his mama,And the lady marries the man that hurt her kid? But heres the thing, when i was reading the story, none of it was obviouus. it was only a couples minutes after that it all hit me. Twilight Zone Time.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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Something wasn't right from the beginning. His grandma would have used him to help with customers. And her all-white thin hair and him only fifteen? The age was wrong.And, the grandma decides whether or not the child goes to the wedding? Not likely. And the kid stays with grandma not his mama,And the lady marries the man that hurt her kid? But heres the thing, when i was reading the story, none of it was obviouus. it was only a couples minutes after that it all hit me. Twilight Zone Time.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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That was the point. To ask why mom didn't have him? Why was his room filled with boxes? Why grandma didn't let mom and husband in the house? Glad you enjoyed.
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It was haunting. You have a real gift. What creepy thing should I read next? you could try "Unloading Micheal", and" One More" thank you Karen
Comment from Sally Carter
A wonderful story, Gretchen. As you know, I've not been around much lately, but spotting this won a place in the contest, I had to go and have a look. With all respect to the other entries, what a pity it didn't place higher! You were unlucky to be up against such stiff competition.
Clever concealment of the picture, which all became clear at the end. I never saw it coming.
A pleasure to read such professional writing, and sorry I've been missing out on the Shine Baby. We're slowly sorting ourselves out, so hopefully I'll be back up to speed before too long.
Best wishes and big congratulations.
Sally
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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A wonderful story, Gretchen. As you know, I've not been around much lately, but spotting this won a place in the contest, I had to go and have a look. With all respect to the other entries, what a pity it didn't place higher! You were unlucky to be up against such stiff competition.
Clever concealment of the picture, which all became clear at the end. I never saw it coming.
A pleasure to read such professional writing, and sorry I've been missing out on the Shine Baby. We're slowly sorting ourselves out, so hopefully I'll be back up to speed before too long.
Best wishes and big congratulations.
Sally
Comment Written 12-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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Thank you so much for the wonderful rating and the nice words. Can't wait for you to catch up on the shine Baby. Haven't been able to post much more than one chapter per week, so you aren't too far behind. Thanks again. Gretchen
Comment from MAMONIA
This is a super fantastic story. It held my interest
throughout. What a fabulous gift you have to tell a
tale like this.
To say that this was riveting and powerful is not
giving it all that it deserves.
I was so caught up while reading it, I jolted at the
end. What a convincing twist you gave it at the end.
Excellent entry for the contest.
Much luck.
Marie
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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This is a super fantastic story. It held my interest
throughout. What a fabulous gift you have to tell a
tale like this.
To say that this was riveting and powerful is not
giving it all that it deserves.
I was so caught up while reading it, I jolted at the
end. What a convincing twist you gave it at the end.
Excellent entry for the contest.
Much luck.
Marie
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the stellar rating and the nice review. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from zeldasmith
This was a very interesting little story...was the grandson the one who was dead roaming the house? Or am I mixed up? Also this is a contest entry. Why not offer your readers more member $ and cents to review your story? Good job. And good luck in contest.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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This was a very interesting little story...was the grandson the one who was dead roaming the house? Or am I mixed up? Also this is a contest entry. Why not offer your readers more member $ and cents to review your story? Good job. And good luck in contest.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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The grandson was the ghost. I had it out for the higher dollars a month ago. This was put into the contest after that. Thank you for the wonderful review. Gretchen
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Oh okay...just wondering....when I want my new stuff read I promote it with 5 or more $ some of the others I just let the certificate run out because I can't spend 24/7 on this site to raise enough. E ber dollars to promote....thanks for sharing....
Comment from Insane Membrane
ooh nice story ... I didn't for one moment suspect it was heading that way so a very nice twist in the tale
congrats and good luck with the competition
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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ooh nice story ... I didn't for one moment suspect it was heading that way so a very nice twist in the tale
congrats and good luck with the competition
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the nice words. Gretchen
Comment from RedMarie33
I liked this story a lot. I liked the twist in the middle that Christian was really a ghost but didn't know it. Good short story with a well-defined beginning middle and end.
Thanks,
RedMarie
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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I liked this story a lot. I liked the twist in the middle that Christian was really a ghost but didn't know it. Good short story with a well-defined beginning middle and end.
Thanks,
RedMarie
Comment Written 10-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from A Matter Of Words
This was riveting. Once I started the emotional tempo of the piece built to frantic pace. This is most definitely worthy of a Ghost Whisperer episode. Outstanding.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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This was riveting. Once I started the emotional tempo of the piece built to frantic pace. This is most definitely worthy of a Ghost Whisperer episode. Outstanding.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2013
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I'll alert Jennifer Love Hewitt, LOL. Thank you for the compliment. I used to love that show. Thank you for the great review. Gretchen
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You do that - it would be a great episode. Too bad she has moved onto The Client List (?). You are most welcome....Stephanie
Comment from Writingfundimension
This is a terrific supernatural story with a great ending. I worked as a professional medium once upon a time, and had the great blessing of helping a few folks pass over. I like how you portrayed that event in your story. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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This is a terrific supernatural story with a great ending. I worked as a professional medium once upon a time, and had the great blessing of helping a few folks pass over. I like how you portrayed that event in your story. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the great and personal review. I find it fascinating to say the least. thank you for the wishes in regards to the contest. Gretchen
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You're most welcome, Gretchen. :0)
Comment from barleygirl
Great story! Your storytelling here is sparse, without a lot of embellishment, & yet each thought & image is packed with feeling. The thing that's most remarkable is the voice of the son, throughout the story. For most of the time, I was thinking (adding up the chronology revealed in the story) that the boy "sounds" young, but must be fully grown-up by then. Finally, it's revealed that the boy died & so his presence & voice is suspended at age 15. This is a very believable story, even tho many don't believe in talking to the dead. Great job! Good luck!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Great story! Your storytelling here is sparse, without a lot of embellishment, & yet each thought & image is packed with feeling. The thing that's most remarkable is the voice of the son, throughout the story. For most of the time, I was thinking (adding up the chronology revealed in the story) that the boy "sounds" young, but must be fully grown-up by then. Finally, it's revealed that the boy died & so his presence & voice is suspended at age 15. This is a very believable story, even tho many don't believe in talking to the dead. Great job! Good luck!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you for the thoughtful and generous rating and review. I really appreciate it. Gretchen
Comment from MelReyn
I wanted to read one last bedtime story before I fall asleep and I'm glad I picked this one. Sixth sense meets medium. Right up my alley.
I thought you did a great job, as always! I don't think I've ever read a single one of your stories that I didn't like.
You handle first person very well. For some reason, when I try to write that way, I have to work much harder. Yours comes across effortlessly. I also loved how this had a feeling of immediacy--it kept me hooked the entire time. The ending was very satisfying. I can go to sleep knowing that all is well now. :)
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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I wanted to read one last bedtime story before I fall asleep and I'm glad I picked this one. Sixth sense meets medium. Right up my alley.
I thought you did a great job, as always! I don't think I've ever read a single one of your stories that I didn't like.
You handle first person very well. For some reason, when I try to write that way, I have to work much harder. Yours comes across effortlessly. I also loved how this had a feeling of immediacy--it kept me hooked the entire time. The ending was very satisfying. I can go to sleep knowing that all is well now. :)
Comment Written 14-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review and the excellent rating.