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A memory from my childhood21 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your thoughts from line to line and from stanza to stanza
vivid detail of setting
shape, grip, rise...many strong action verbs to breathe life into your poem
good alliteration in walking the warmed
a warm, moving portrait :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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excellent use of enjambment to enhance the flow of your thoughts from line to line and from stanza to stanza
vivid detail of setting
shape, grip, rise...many strong action verbs to breathe life into your poem
good alliteration in walking the warmed
a warm, moving portrait :-) Brooke
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thank you Brooke for your lovely comments.
Comment from lorijean
Such a great poem and story well written and very descriptive, what a lovely old man, this was a real pleasure to read....
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Such a great poem and story well written and very descriptive, what a lovely old man, this was a real pleasure to read....
Comment Written 27-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for your lovely comments.
Comment from Bryana
Beautiful, well written poem but what I like the most is the content. It's so true, we take things and people for granted specially as children.
I love your poem, a tribute to your grandfather.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Beautiful, well written poem but what I like the most is the content. It's so true, we take things and people for granted specially as children.
I love your poem, a tribute to your grandfather.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2013
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Thank you Bryana. I remember my grandpa so vividly, he always wore a fedora hat and smoked a long stem pipe. The story is basically true. My grandparents lived downstairs growing up and our family upstairs.
Comment from Ben Colder
I like this poem. It sings a song many never learn. You have done a superb job with placing me watching the old man's routine of life. Well done poet. You should send this to a calendar making company.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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I like this poem. It sings a song many never learn. You have done a superb job with placing me watching the old man's routine of life. Well done poet. You should send this to a calendar making company.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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Thanks Ben, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from MoonMuse
This was really beautiful and touching. I love the silent routine Grandfather undertook to secure the comfort of all the family. There is so much love in those actions. Beautiful.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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This was really beautiful and touching. I love the silent routine Grandfather undertook to secure the comfort of all the family. There is so much love in those actions. Beautiful.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much!
Comment from donette1914
this was so beautiful and heart felt and all the love your grandfather did on your behalf and it is so true we should never take things for granted well done
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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this was so beautiful and heart felt and all the love your grandfather did on your behalf and it is so true we should never take things for granted well done
Comment Written 25-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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Thank you Donette, I appreciate your comments.
Comment from bossladyone
I like it. This is a very nice story poem you have written in free verse. The poem is written very well and flows nicely, The picture adds to the impact of the poem. Thank you for sharing
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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I like it. This is a very nice story poem you have written in free verse. The poem is written very well and flows nicely, The picture adds to the impact of the poem. Thank you for sharing
Comment Written 25-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2013
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Thank you for reading and for your comments.
Comment from Darkhorse555
from the picture of a weather washed house in the biting cold in the basement you speak a familys love beyond beauty a lovely piece
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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from the picture of a weather washed house in the biting cold in the basement you speak a familys love beyond beauty a lovely piece
Comment Written 24-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Thank you.
Comment from Cornelius2000
What a lovely memory, and a nice tribute to your grandfather. My dad did the same for us, and later tried to teach me how to shake the grate and shovel just the right amount of coal to keep the fire going. Thank goodness for the thermostat on my dining room wall these days. Things are better in many ways.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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What a lovely memory, and a nice tribute to your grandfather. My dad did the same for us, and later tried to teach me how to shake the grate and shovel just the right amount of coal to keep the fire going. Thank goodness for the thermostat on my dining room wall these days. Things are better in many ways.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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That's certainly true! Thank you so much!
Comment from The Death
All praise for such a heart touching reality.
You wonderfully describe his condition and the selfless love for family despite the neglectance by other members.
It just makes you feel sad for all those persons who are neglected.you words bring to life the whole scene.
I am amazed and influenced by the content of your write.
Its exceptional piece for it just touched my heart.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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All praise for such a heart touching reality.
You wonderfully describe his condition and the selfless love for family despite the neglectance by other members.
It just makes you feel sad for all those persons who are neglected.you words bring to life the whole scene.
I am amazed and influenced by the content of your write.
Its exceptional piece for it just touched my heart.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2013
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2013
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Thank you so much for such lovely comments.