Siblings
Just a fun poem at my siblings' expense.10 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
good use of occasional rhyme
I like the humorous thumb nail sketches of each sibling
excellent humor throughout
I like how you add that touch of sentiment to your closing :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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good use of occasional rhyme
I like the humorous thumb nail sketches of each sibling
excellent humor throughout
I like how you add that touch of sentiment to your closing :-) Brooke
Comment Written 06-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2013
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Thank you for taking a look at this one.
Comment from MidnightWriter4U
A most fun read about childhood siblings, their rivalry, and differences. This makes one wonder if the gene pool does this for kicks. Good artwork choice. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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A most fun read about childhood siblings, their rivalry, and differences. This makes one wonder if the gene pool does this for kicks. Good artwork choice. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thank you very much for taking a look at this.
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You are welcome. :)
Comment from Bobby Jo
Cute, my mom was the youngest of six, and growing up, I was always surrounded by many cousins. My aunt and uncles were like a second pair of parents. Loved your poem, love big families.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Cute, my mom was the youngest of six, and growing up, I was always surrounded by many cousins. My aunt and uncles were like a second pair of parents. Loved your poem, love big families.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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I'm glad we had a big family. Thanks for giving this a look.
Comment from Jeanie Mercer
This is sort of fun, but probably will get you in trouble with your siblings (if you show them). I think the instances where you used poetic license are fine. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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This is sort of fun, but probably will get you in trouble with your siblings (if you show them). I think the instances where you used poetic license are fine. Best regards, Jeanie Mercer
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thanks for giving this a look.
Comment from Evelyn Fort Stewart
I was they twelfth child to be born. So something was always going one at out house. But, we were young during the depression so we knew how to work. But, my father made work fun. Good piece. God loves you and I do too.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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I was they twelfth child to be born. So something was always going one at out house. But, we were young during the depression so we knew how to work. But, my father made work fun. Good piece. God loves you and I do too.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thank you Evelyn for reviewing and for sharing your life with us.
Comment from Solitude Poet
Hey there!
Nice humor poetry well drafted and crafted!
Good picture too to go with it!
All the best in the contest! The last stanza is the high light! :)
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Hey there!
Nice humor poetry well drafted and crafted!
Good picture too to go with it!
All the best in the contest! The last stanza is the high light! :)
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from Jean Lagace
I like the first and the last four lines the best. This is poesy with a stretch, am I wrong? One must free all living poets from academics and its despotic tyranny over words order and disposition. This author sure is showing the way.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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I like the first and the last four lines the best. This is poesy with a stretch, am I wrong? One must free all living poets from academics and its despotic tyranny over words order and disposition. This author sure is showing the way.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Here, here. I like to write a bit of 'not-to-be-taken-seriously' verse. Thank you for your kind review.
Comment from loibeth
Pretty good quatrains with abab rhyming scheme.
Some rhyme pairs are not as good as others (e.g., college/smart, but overall, you have a pretty nice, fun poem about your siblings. I hope none of them is mad at you! :-)
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Pretty good quatrains with abab rhyming scheme.
Some rhyme pairs are not as good as others (e.g., college/smart, but overall, you have a pretty nice, fun poem about your siblings. I hope none of them is mad at you! :-)
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your kind review and thoughtful comments.
Comment from The Death
This is really interesting and funny poem.you narrated so well all the traits of your siblings and they really draw a reader's attention.it is a total fun.it is a light hearted humor and written nicely
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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This is really interesting and funny poem.you narrated so well all the traits of your siblings and they really draw a reader's attention.it is a total fun.it is a light hearted humor and written nicely
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your kind review and thoughtful comments.
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
YES THIS WELL WRITTEN MY FRIEND THIS IS WELL WRITTEN A GOOD FUN POEM EACH VERSE WORKS WELL AND I ENJOYED WELL DONE GOOD LUCK REGARDS JILL
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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YES THIS WELL WRITTEN MY FRIEND THIS IS WELL WRITTEN A GOOD FUN POEM EACH VERSE WORKS WELL AND I ENJOYED WELL DONE GOOD LUCK REGARDS JILL
Comment Written 04-Jul-2013
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2013
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Thank you for your kind review.