Pantoum Collection
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "To Sappho"Poems written using the pantoum form
56 total reviews
Comment from daeneam
This is a very creative and interesting poem. It was my first time to encounter Sappho and I have to google search about her and what made her interesting is her poetry which centers on passion and love for various people and both sexes. In addition, I was able to encounter the origin of the world Lesbian. Great!
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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This is a very creative and interesting poem. It was my first time to encounter Sappho and I have to google search about her and what made her interesting is her poetry which centers on passion and love for various people and both sexes. In addition, I was able to encounter the origin of the world Lesbian. Great!
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Bulletski. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from Eleanor Buron
The pattern of the pantoum gives tempo to the poetry and the lines seem to have the dynamics of loud/soft - fast/slow - I believe it comes across as a musical chant. I really enjoyed the poem being a dedication to Sappho ;)- I had exceptional Philosophy teachers - one, my friend and mentor, Leo Sweeney, S.J. -
The early Greek philosophers were Ionians and it's said Homer belonged to this world. It is significant that the greatest poet of Greece and the beginnings of systemic philosophy are of Ionian genius.
Members of Plato's Academy worshiped the Muses. I enjoy your author notes - always a learning experience. And, of course this your most recent poem is a delight.
I enjoyed your poem -
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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The pattern of the pantoum gives tempo to the poetry and the lines seem to have the dynamics of loud/soft - fast/slow - I believe it comes across as a musical chant. I really enjoyed the poem being a dedication to Sappho ;)- I had exceptional Philosophy teachers - one, my friend and mentor, Leo Sweeney, S.J. -
The early Greek philosophers were Ionians and it's said Homer belonged to this world. It is significant that the greatest poet of Greece and the beginnings of systemic philosophy are of Ionian genius.
Members of Plato's Academy worshiped the Muses. I enjoy your author notes - always a learning experience. And, of course this your most recent poem is a delight.
I enjoyed your poem -
Comment Written 26-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Eleanor. I appreciate your interesting comments and review. I studied Ancient Greek History many years ago. All a bit hazy now! A fascinating civilisation.
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Smile - well, I too have years on me but kept on with studies simply because I'm a seeker but forgot what it was I was seeking - smile.
Comment from denhagan
This is a beautiful pantoum poem dedicated by the author to the poet Sappho. Written in iambic tetrameter with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem. We have lost so much of the literature and other contributions of the Greeks due to various wars that took place.
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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This is a beautiful pantoum poem dedicated by the author to the poet Sappho. Written in iambic tetrameter with good rhythm and rhyming throughout the poem. We have lost so much of the literature and other contributions of the Greeks due to various wars that took place.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Dennis. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous 6-star rating.
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You're welcome Tony,
Dennis
Comment from Eternal Muse
Oh my dear friend, you posted it! just got back from a two day's trip to Eastern Long Island, and saw your poem. What a masterpiece; divine beauty, Sappho herself would be proud of you. A very good choice of the artwork. The pantoum is flawlesslessly executed, with a lot of lyrical lines. The visuals are so good, I can see the Pluto and Sappho, his muse, aboard that "silent silver ship." You took us centuries back in time, and I loved the journey.
Favorite lines:
Cruel Eros made it hard for me
To sing my soul's eternal tune
He set my heart adrift at sea
My lyric voice beseeched the moon
To sing my soul's eternal tune
With notes of tidal lunacy
My lyric voice beseeched the moon
Will Sappho ever join with me
I love the romanticism of the piece; your author notes are very helpful, and thank you for mentioning me as the inspiration.
Blessings and love, Yelena
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Oh my dear friend, you posted it! just got back from a two day's trip to Eastern Long Island, and saw your poem. What a masterpiece; divine beauty, Sappho herself would be proud of you. A very good choice of the artwork. The pantoum is flawlesslessly executed, with a lot of lyrical lines. The visuals are so good, I can see the Pluto and Sappho, his muse, aboard that "silent silver ship." You took us centuries back in time, and I loved the journey.
Favorite lines:
Cruel Eros made it hard for me
To sing my soul's eternal tune
He set my heart adrift at sea
My lyric voice beseeched the moon
To sing my soul's eternal tune
With notes of tidal lunacy
My lyric voice beseeched the moon
Will Sappho ever join with me
I love the romanticism of the piece; your author notes are very helpful, and thank you for mentioning me as the inspiration.
Blessings and love, Yelena
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2013
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Thanks, Yelena, firstly for the idea and secondly for your kind review and stars! I had one or two false starts and a bit of background research to do before selecting a subject. I chose Sappho partly because I think that history has mistreated her somewhat and partly because so much of her poetry has either been lost or destroyed. Once I got going the poem began to write itself to some extent. The ideas flowed smoothly as they sometimes do. Nice when that happens! Often it doesn't!
Comment from simplyteresa
Your poem is so full of yearning and desire to find beauty. I truly enjoyed this piece and read it more than once to more fully capture all that you wrote.
I really appreciated you notes, and for me introduction, on the pantoum style.
Thank you for all you shared in this wonderfully written poem. I only wish I had a six star to give, but know I would without hesitation if I did.
Smiles,
Teresa
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Your poem is so full of yearning and desire to find beauty. I truly enjoyed this piece and read it more than once to more fully capture all that you wrote.
I really appreciated you notes, and for me introduction, on the pantoum style.
Thank you for all you shared in this wonderfully written poem. I only wish I had a six star to give, but know I would without hesitation if I did.
Smiles,
Teresa
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Teresa. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars. This was a beautiful review, so supportive that it has left my heart singing!
Comment from ann marie mazz
good morning
I have never attempted this format
however
it appears you have achieved it
very well executed
your theme and words are exquisite with much meaning
truly
I very much enjoyed the tone of this entry
and yes
the presentation and layout are more than lovely
thank you for sharing your talent with us
this was a pleasure and an education
ann marie
PS
thank goodness for challenges
why
look at the beautiful work that was created
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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good morning
I have never attempted this format
however
it appears you have achieved it
very well executed
your theme and words are exquisite with much meaning
truly
I very much enjoyed the tone of this entry
and yes
the presentation and layout are more than lovely
thank you for sharing your talent with us
this was a pleasure and an education
ann marie
PS
thank goodness for challenges
why
look at the beautiful work that was created
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Ann Marie. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars! Yes, I wouldn't have thought of anything like this if it hadn't been for the challenge. Since joining this site quite recently I have found quite a bit of inspiration from the support of its community. It has all the advantages of a writers' group without the inconvenience of having to turn out on a cold winter's night!
Comment from Sally Carter
Very nicely done! I know how challenging the pantoum can be, and you have pulled this off with aplomb.
It's not a subject I know much about, but that made it all the more intriguing. I must read more about this compelling woman.
Very natural rhymes, beautifully incorporated, and some fine enjambement, making the repeated lines sound fresh. The way you have completed the circle in the final four lines is superb. Did you start from that and work backwards, I wonder?
This is a fine example of the pantoum. I wonder if there is room for another on the Poetry Dances page?
Kind regards
Sally
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Very nicely done! I know how challenging the pantoum can be, and you have pulled this off with aplomb.
It's not a subject I know much about, but that made it all the more intriguing. I must read more about this compelling woman.
Very natural rhymes, beautifully incorporated, and some fine enjambement, making the repeated lines sound fresh. The way you have completed the circle in the final four lines is superb. Did you start from that and work backwards, I wonder?
This is a fine example of the pantoum. I wonder if there is room for another on the Poetry Dances page?
Kind regards
Sally
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Sally. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars. Thank you too for drawing my attention to the Poetry Dances page which, being fairly new to this site, I had not really looked at before. I have just written another pantoum in which the pantoum explains itself. A whimsical definition in verse! I'm just waiting to amass sufficient wealth in members' cents to launch it! The first and last lines of a pantoum are fairly critical to its success, I think! In this case the line came first and I built the rest of the poem around it.
Comment from pickthorn
A wonderful tribute to Sappho, the Greek poet who lived on the island of Lesbo. A great poem with exotic imagery sailing the Aegean. Destination, Lesbo
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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A wonderful tribute to Sappho, the Greek poet who lived on the island of Lesbo. A great poem with exotic imagery sailing the Aegean. Destination, Lesbo
Comment Written 25-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Pickthorn. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
Comment from Matoshka
This is so beautiful, your picture and your words. As you set out on the sea, seeking the island of Lesbos and Sappho. This is so soft in its feel. I enjoyed your Author's notes as well. Many blessings and thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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This is so beautiful, your picture and your words. As you set out on the sea, seeking the island of Lesbos and Sappho. This is so soft in its feel. I enjoyed your Author's notes as well. Many blessings and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Matoshka. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
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So welcome, my friend, I enjoyed the history and write. Blessings
Comment from Gungalo
With notes of tidal lunacy
I set out on a lonely trip
Will Sappho ever join with me
Aboard my silent silver ship
Beautiful Pantoum Tony with a historical lesson for us all. Wonderful repeating lines.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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With notes of tidal lunacy
I set out on a lonely trip
Will Sappho ever join with me
Aboard my silent silver ship
Beautiful Pantoum Tony with a historical lesson for us all. Wonderful repeating lines.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2013
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Many thanks, Gungalo. I appreciate you taking the time to review, your comments and your generous stars.
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Smiling at you TOny.