How it feels everyday
10 word story10 total reviews
Comment from adewpearl
This is an interesting 10 word image, but it does not read like a flash fiction story to me. No characters, no plot, no conflict, no resolution, no story. It's a witty observation, but if I were voting in the contest I would be looking for an entry that tells a story.
Also, it should be every day, not everyday. Brooke
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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This is an interesting 10 word image, but it does not read like a flash fiction story to me. No characters, no plot, no conflict, no resolution, no story. It's a witty observation, but if I were voting in the contest I would be looking for an entry that tells a story.
Also, it should be every day, not everyday. Brooke
Comment Written 01-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2013
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Yes, I know. After i posted it. I knew it didn't work. But I left it up to remind me not to half do it. I ended up voting for a much better entry.
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I like a man who admits sometimes his work isn't his best work :-)
Comment from Leineco
This is actually pretty clever....
is it about feeling isolated, being on the sidelines while everyone else is playing a different game?
or is it about playing on a higher level, wondering why everyone else is chasing a single end game, without realizing strategy counts and keeps things more interesting?
then again....maybe it's about being an outsider
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ah ha! I just saw the Author's notes - I guess that means I'm a checkers player LOL
nice write :-)
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This is actually pretty clever....
is it about feeling isolated, being on the sidelines while everyone else is playing a different game?
or is it about playing on a higher level, wondering why everyone else is chasing a single end game, without realizing strategy counts and keeps things more interesting?
then again....maybe it's about being an outsider
or
ah ha! I just saw the Author's notes - I guess that means I'm a checkers player LOL
nice write :-)
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
I like the sentiment you express here. You make good use of the story description and author's notes to frame what is not actually a sentence.Good luck in the contest.
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I like the sentiment you express here. You make good use of the story description and author's notes to frame what is not actually a sentence.Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Writer
A number of excellent entries in this contest. I like the wit in this and it does tell a complete story in only ten words. Very impressive. I have to laugh .. readers need to write more than ten words to review your ten word flash. LOL
Very well done and a great entry for the contest. Best of luck. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
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Hi Mystery Writer
A number of excellent entries in this contest. I like the wit in this and it does tell a complete story in only ten words. Very impressive. I have to laugh .. readers need to write more than ten words to review your ten word flash. LOL
Very well done and a great entry for the contest. Best of luck. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
Comment from Sueellen11
Well done,, how very true,,,yes men way before their time,,good entry into the contest,,,meeting all contest requirements,,,good luck,,blessings,,,sueellen
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Well done,, how very true,,,yes men way before their time,,good entry into the contest,,,meeting all contest requirements,,,good luck,,blessings,,,sueellen
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
Comment from w.j.debi
Sometimes I think we all feel a little out of place. Great metaphor that you create for that feeling in such a few words. Best of luck in the contest.
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Sometimes I think we all feel a little out of place. Great metaphor that you create for that feeling in such a few words. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
Comment from Val Crisson
Very compelling question, and a great deal said in so few words. The idea of life and a game being combined comes across very clearly.
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Very compelling question, and a great deal said in so few words. The idea of life and a game being combined comes across very clearly.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
Comment from sweetwoodjax
this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this short story about the feelings of a genius living in a world of those who aren't as smart as they are. i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
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this is very well written, mystery writer, you did a great job writing this short story about the feelings of a genius living in a world of those who aren't as smart as they are. i enjoyed reading it, good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
Comment from Econ Teacher
Unfortunately this doesn't read as a story to me. Without the title it really doesn't make sense. Though the sentiment is funny.
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Unfortunately this doesn't read as a story to me. Without the title it really doesn't make sense. Though the sentiment is funny.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013
Comment from Matthew M.
I can totally relate. That is story of my life. I think sometimes a level far beyond my peers. However, maybe I should stop hanging out with my high school dropout friends.
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I can totally relate. That is story of my life. I think sometimes a level far beyond my peers. However, maybe I should stop hanging out with my high school dropout friends.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2013