Happy Birthday Annie
story in 10 word23 total reviews
Comment from poesyapprentice
I'm sorry I missed this contest entry! Wow! I'm giving it a six because in ten words you punched me in the gut! I find that impressive! The write is soooo sad, and I can just imagine the scene. It assaults the emotions and begs the reader to ponder. Wonderful job!
(Ps. I am having a complete hysterectomy on Thursday and will be out of work for over month and would like to request your prayers, my friend, for safety and healing as well as for my finances. It's just me and there's no one to take up the slack. Thank you so much! Hugs, love, and blessings!)
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I'm sorry I missed this contest entry! Wow! I'm giving it a six because in ten words you punched me in the gut! I find that impressive! The write is soooo sad, and I can just imagine the scene. It assaults the emotions and begs the reader to ponder. Wonderful job!
(Ps. I am having a complete hysterectomy on Thursday and will be out of work for over month and would like to request your prayers, my friend, for safety and healing as well as for my finances. It's just me and there's no one to take up the slack. Thank you so much! Hugs, love, and blessings!)
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
Comment from hifein
good luck with the contest. you were able in ten words to convey a sad and poignant story of a loss and a time of remembrance. twelve years of memory.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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good luck with the contest. you were able in ten words to convey a sad and poignant story of a loss and a time of remembrance. twelve years of memory.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the wonderful review and good luck
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello author, You've told a sad story with vivid imagery in only ten words ~ very good. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hello author, You've told a sad story with vivid imagery in only ten words ~ very good. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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thank you
Comment from jmdg1954
Ah, that's sad. First entry I've read that has bummed me out. The others are more light and free. Still, you accomplished the goal of the contest. Well done my friend, well done.
John
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Ah, that's sad. First entry I've read that has bummed me out. The others are more light and free. Still, you accomplished the goal of the contest. Well done my friend, well done.
John
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much John - as I'm sure you know not everything in life is "light" Hugs
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Oh, I know. If you have an opportunity, read my story called "The Timecard" from March 2011. You'll understand...
Comment from TAB_that's me
Very sad tale. Well said though in only 10 words - it gives the reader the full story or most of it anyway. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Very sad tale. Well said though in only 10 words - it gives the reader the full story or most of it anyway. Good luck in the contest.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you Teresa. It is sad, but not an uncommon tale. I think I might make this one into a longer story. Grief and lose of a small child is the worst.
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I can't even imagine how you feel. Writing though is good to help with grief. How long ago did it happen?
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Not me Teresa, but someone very close to me. Thank you for the concern.
Comment from humpwhistle
Yes. I give you credit. There is story lurking here. How did she die? Why is there a birthday cake? These are good questions for the reader to ponder.
Well done.
Peace, Lee
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Yes. I give you credit. There is story lurking here. How did she die? Why is there a birthday cake? These are good questions for the reader to ponder.
Well done.
Peace, Lee
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you, Lee, it means a lot coming from you.
Comment from Cry the Vile Rebel
This is such a challenging prompt! You manage quit a bit with your allotted words. Here there is a setting, A beginning, a heartbreak, and an end.. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This is such a challenging prompt! You manage quit a bit with your allotted words. Here there is a setting, A beginning, a heartbreak, and an end.. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you so much for the great review
Comment from Lovinia
Hi Mystery Writer
A poignant write which conveys so much raw emotion. Excellent phrasing to add a lot of power to your 'flash' of a mere ten words. An great entry for the contest, one of the top four or five. I will find it difficult to vote. lol The best of luck in the contest. Well done. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Hi Mystery Writer
A poignant write which conveys so much raw emotion. Excellent phrasing to add a lot of power to your 'flash' of a mere ten words. An great entry for the contest, one of the top four or five. I will find it difficult to vote. lol The best of luck in the contest. Well done. Warm Regards - Lovinia xoxoxo
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you, Lovi. I love your reviews
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You're welcome! I see you are already on your way up the ladder. :)) Fingers crossed. xoxoxoxoox
Comment from Jackarrie
Although this is a fiction contest, this 10 word story is really true for many people.
Well done and good luck in the contest. Mary
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Although this is a fiction contest, this 10 word story is really true for many people.
Well done and good luck in the contest. Mary
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you, and yes it is true for many.
Comment from Sueellen11
This is very sad,, but a good tribute to her twelfth birthday,,, true to the contest requirements,,,and ten word count,,,good luck,,blessings,,sueellen
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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This is very sad,, but a good tribute to her twelfth birthday,,, true to the contest requirements,,,and ten word count,,,good luck,,blessings,,sueellen
Comment Written 29-Oct-2013
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2013
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Thank you for the great review.