Mango and Bert
A children's story23 total reviews
Comment from Devon Phipps
Very nice, and also very inspirational. It made me feel many different type of feelings, but also it allowed me to feel serenity as well. Thank you for posting such a lovely piece of work and I hope to see more from you. Thank you
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Very nice, and also very inspirational. It made me feel many different type of feelings, but also it allowed me to feel serenity as well. Thank you for posting such a lovely piece of work and I hope to see more from you. Thank you
Comment Written 09-Nov-2013
Comment from Schalk Jacobs
An excellent kiddies story with an outstanding message that should be adhered to at all times. Nicely written and good word choice, John. You really do have a knack for writing children stories.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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An excellent kiddies story with an outstanding message that should be adhered to at all times. Nicely written and good word choice, John. You really do have a knack for writing children stories.
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thank you Schalk. It's my dream to write and publish something. Becoming a millionaire at the same time would be nice... John
Comment from adewpearl
Great character names :-)
Excellent action verb choices like scamper and venture add so much life to the scene
I love the rules they set for themselves to accommodate the needs of the slow goose or to make things fair since not everyone can fly :-)
when Bert, a St. Bernard, would come - add the second comma
I like the friendliness of the characters and the moral of your story :-) Brooke
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Great character names :-)
Excellent action verb choices like scamper and venture add so much life to the scene
I love the rules they set for themselves to accommodate the needs of the slow goose or to make things fair since not everyone can fly :-)
when Bert, a St. Bernard, would come - add the second comma
I like the friendliness of the characters and the moral of your story :-) Brooke
Comment Written 07-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2013
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Thank you Brooke... Always appreciated. John
Comment from Mrs Happy Poet
Yes john this is well written you bring the characters to life so well and such a beautiful moral at the closing we enjoyed well done regards Jill and Erick
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Yes john this is well written you bring the characters to life so well and such a beautiful moral at the closing we enjoyed well done regards Jill and Erick
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Thank you very much you two... I doubly appreciate your encouraging review. John
Comment from barkingdog
Great moral. Mango was very frightened and lost her way home because she went to the park without a friend or parent.
I like the way Bert shows up to save her in the end. She learns her lesson but still gets home safely.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Great moral. Mango was very frightened and lost her way home because she went to the park without a friend or parent.
I like the way Bert shows up to save her in the end. She learns her lesson but still gets home safely.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Thank you Ellen for the encouraging review.
Always appreciated. John
Comment from MelReyn
I read this aloud to my kids, ages two-seven and they liked your character names. Particularly stinky skunk. Lol
We're all glad that Mango is ok. :)
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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I read this aloud to my kids, ages two-seven and they liked your character names. Particularly stinky skunk. Lol
We're all glad that Mango is ok. :)
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 07-Nov-2013
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Thank you Mel for sharing that with me. Some words may have been slightly over there heads... I should tone it down a bit.
Thanks for reading...
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi John,
this is you forte my friend... I could not help but read this out aloud to my wife Jade, and yes we both enjoyed it very much.
Great likable characters makes this a fun read, and a must for a bed-time story.
I'm just glad I had this six left to give, it deserves nothing less... wish I had children to read it to... oh well, Jade's just going to have to listen!
Well written John, I truly love these animal stories.
Kindest thoughts,
James
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Hi John,
this is you forte my friend... I could not help but read this out aloud to my wife Jade, and yes we both enjoyed it very much.
Great likable characters makes this a fun read, and a must for a bed-time story.
I'm just glad I had this six left to give, it deserves nothing less... wish I had children to read it to... oh well, Jade's just going to have to listen!
Well written John, I truly love these animal stories.
Kindest thoughts,
James
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Wow... Thank you James. Not just for the six, but the encouraging review. Identifying this as my forte, and sharing it with your wife, thank you! Sometimes I lose track of what my goals are and have to re-construct.
Thanks again for a great review, John
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
This is very cute, fun story. I think maybe some of the words like 'disparity' might be a little hard for kids to understand, but they can always ask a parent, unless the parent has no idea what it means. =} Maybe rather than writing, "The moral to the story..." You could just have Mango think about what a bad idea it is to go out alone and what a good idea it is to have a friend. But over all it's very cute. Rox
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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This is very cute, fun story. I think maybe some of the words like 'disparity' might be a little hard for kids to understand, but they can always ask a parent, unless the parent has no idea what it means. =} Maybe rather than writing, "The moral to the story..." You could just have Mango think about what a bad idea it is to go out alone and what a good idea it is to have a friend. But over all it's very cute. Rox
Comment Written 06-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Rox, thank you for both suggestions. I was unsure when I used "disparity" and honestly waited for a reviewer to mention that possibility. Thanks.
I like your idea for the "moral to the story" part.
Always appreciated.... John
Comment from country ranch writer
it is better to walk in groups because if something were to happen some one could get help fast same with hiking, swimming or any other things
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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it is better to walk in groups because if something were to happen some one could get help fast same with hiking, swimming or any other things
Comment Written 05-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Thank you do much for reading and reviewing. John
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welcome
Comment from BunnyS
Awww... that was really cute! We have a Beagle so I loved that part of the story. I only WISH she weighed 21 pounds... but we're working on that! This was a really good story and I'm so glad things worked out for Mango!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Awww... that was really cute! We have a Beagle so I loved that part of the story. I only WISH she weighed 21 pounds... but we're working on that! This was a really good story and I'm so glad things worked out for Mango!
Comment Written 05-Nov-2013
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2013
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Our Beagle was my little "porker" also, but didn't want to portray that in the story. I could up her poundage a little bit. Thank you for reading and reviewing.
Always appreciated... John