Miss Nadine's Wait
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Comment from emrpoems
His clock worked not
And her wait turned hot,
But
He just forgot
Their wedding.
A short account of the inconsideration of the groom to be in 15 words.Well done
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His clock worked not
And her wait turned hot,
But
He just forgot
Their wedding.
A short account of the inconsideration of the groom to be in 15 words.Well done
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
Comment from Thatguypk
Lol... Men! There's no living with them! What an enjoyable short poem, summing up in so few words, just how inconsiderate men can be.... ;-) Although it has to be said.. it's USUALLY the female who chooses to turn up late for the wedding.
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Lol... Men! There's no living with them! What an enjoyable short poem, summing up in so few words, just how inconsiderate men can be.... ;-) Although it has to be said.. it's USUALLY the female who chooses to turn up late for the wedding.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
Comment from evrenios
How heartbreaking! I love this short poem you have written. the strong rhye you set up in the first part with the strong emphasis on the last syllable is beautifully set off by the the trochaic foot in the last line. It sets off the heartbreak beautifully. Loved the alliteration of clock, not, hot, forgot - especially since one of those rhymes was internal. Also - the alliteration of wait and wedding.
This is a terrific write! Hope you win.
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How heartbreaking! I love this short poem you have written. the strong rhye you set up in the first part with the strong emphasis on the last syllable is beautifully set off by the the trochaic foot in the last line. It sets off the heartbreak beautifully. Loved the alliteration of clock, not, hot, forgot - especially since one of those rhymes was internal. Also - the alliteration of wait and wedding.
This is a terrific write! Hope you win.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2014
Comment from jandeck
This is a cute, touching little poem. It manages to tell a whole story in just a few words. To the forgotten bride---after that excuse, she should stop his clock!
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This is a cute, touching little poem. It manages to tell a whole story in just a few words. To the forgotten bride---after that excuse, she should stop his clock!
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
Comment from MagKing
Beautifully written.
I love this piece.
What a fine way to write about such matters on men forgetting their wedding, and leaves their wife to be waiting at the altar.
Good luck
MagKing
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Beautifully written.
I love this piece.
What a fine way to write about such matters on men forgetting their wedding, and leaves their wife to be waiting at the altar.
Good luck
MagKing
Comment Written 15-Jan-2014
Comment from nelliesellie
One watch stopping is not going to let the late groom off the hook. Most homes have clocks in every room. Marriage is very important. Near death is the only excuse for being late. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
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One watch stopping is not going to let the late groom off the hook. Most homes have clocks in every room. Marriage is very important. Near death is the only excuse for being late. Great work. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
Comment from allborn66
This is a wonderful poem. You told a great story. The word choice is quite vivid. My sweetie forgot to fix the time on his "wedding" watch. He freaked out because he thought he lost an hour. But wedding would have started on time if not for a few guests being late.
Barbara
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This is a wonderful poem. You told a great story. The word choice is quite vivid. My sweetie forgot to fix the time on his "wedding" watch. He freaked out because he thought he lost an hour. But wedding would have started on time if not for a few guests being late.
Barbara
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
Comment from RYME4U
Well done. There is a subtle humor to your words and the rhyming is well done,The way you have presented this adds to the meaning of your words. Good job
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Well done. There is a subtle humor to your words and the rhyming is well done,The way you have presented this adds to the meaning of your words. Good job
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
Comment from CowboyToo
Very humorous and quite clever. This poor gut had better get himself a good clock before he gets in MORE trouble. If they ever marry, he will no doubt forget their anniversary, and then what ?
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Very humorous and quite clever. This poor gut had better get himself a good clock before he gets in MORE trouble. If they ever marry, he will no doubt forget their anniversary, and then what ?
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Comment Written 14-Jan-2014
Comment from RodG
This is an amusing poem, but only to a bride NOT left waiting at the altar. Good use of rhymes--not, hot, and forgot.
Well done in only 15 words.
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This is an amusing poem, but only to a bride NOT left waiting at the altar. Good use of rhymes--not, hot, and forgot.
Well done in only 15 words.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2014