Sea Refuge
a short poem about the sea & solitude10 total reviews
Comment from Caressa_08
The use of clever phrases: retreating sea leaves, wave-scarred wood, and sand print-free caught my eye.....A very creative write, this nature poem along with the interesting collection of what this beach has to offer & such a good ending, that showed who the true admirer just happened to be: and barren except for me ...Not an easy task poem along with the correct format for a Whitney...You did it beautifully!
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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The use of clever phrases: retreating sea leaves, wave-scarred wood, and sand print-free caught my eye.....A very creative write, this nature poem along with the interesting collection of what this beach has to offer & such a good ending, that showed who the true admirer just happened to be: and barren except for me ...Not an easy task poem along with the correct format for a Whitney...You did it beautifully!
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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I am delighted this poem made such an impact on you. I truly appreciate the exceptional rating and your effusive praise. RodG
Comment from adewpearl
beautiful presentation of your poem, which is in excellent syllable count and structure for the Whitney
I love the description of the wave-scarred wood
excellent use of rhyme
vivid details that create mood in a compelling way
Brooke
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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beautiful presentation of your poem, which is in excellent syllable count and structure for the Whitney
I love the description of the wave-scarred wood
excellent use of rhyme
vivid details that create mood in a compelling way
Brooke
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Brooke. I am immensely pleased you liked this Whitney so much. Rod
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Rod
You have written a poem about my favourite place, the seashore. The older I get, the more I am pulled to an ocean beach. I love walking along the beach at SeaView in Prince Edward Island, finding sand dollars and other shells. Beachcombing is a lot of fun. You never know what the tide will bring you.
Your beach is "print-free", deserted except for you. So you get all the tide has to offer.
I like the rhymes, "sea/debris/print-free/me". This might be the only entry that has the same rhyme throughout. Not easy to do, and keep the reader's interest.
I take it you also love to walk by the ocean.
Great entry! Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Hi Rod
You have written a poem about my favourite place, the seashore. The older I get, the more I am pulled to an ocean beach. I love walking along the beach at SeaView in Prince Edward Island, finding sand dollars and other shells. Beachcombing is a lot of fun. You never know what the tide will bring you.
Your beach is "print-free", deserted except for you. So you get all the tide has to offer.
I like the rhymes, "sea/debris/print-free/me". This might be the only entry that has the same rhyme throughout. Not easy to do, and keep the reader's interest.
I take it you also love to walk by the ocean.
Great entry! Good Luck in the contest!
cheers
Kimbob
Comment Written 19-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2014
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Thank you, Kimbob, for your descriptive comments about beach combing and your kind praise and encouragement. I love walking on the beach but seldom have the opportunity any more. Prince Edward's Island is definitely on my bucket list of places to visit. Rod
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We always took our kids for a week vacation to Adams' SeaView Cottages in Darnley, PEI. The beach is a half mile long, and every bit as nice as Cavendish Beach... but not nearly as crowded. You can find Don Adams' cottages in the internet. A great place! In the last few years, he has built a few 3-bedroom chalets complete with an upstairs deck and washer/dryer. You won't regret PEI being on your bucket list.
FF
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Thank you for the great travel tips!
Comment from JuneYvonne
I love this whitney Rod. The rhythm of your words reminds me of ripples coming and going on the beach, and I particularly love your last line. You have also chosen a perfect picture to illustrate your words.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
June
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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I love this whitney Rod. The rhythm of your words reminds me of ripples coming and going on the beach, and I particularly love your last line. You have also chosen a perfect picture to illustrate your words.
Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.
June
Comment Written 18-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2014
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Thank you, June, for such an encouraging review and your kind praise. I am delighted you like my whitney. RodG
Comment from Connie C
Such beautiful imagery you have here, Rod. I like the idea of the sand being print free except for you and perhaps your prints. My best to you in the contest.
Connie
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Such beautiful imagery you have here, Rod. I like the idea of the sand being print free except for you and perhaps your prints. My best to you in the contest.
Connie
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Connie, for reading my poem and your very encouraging praise. RodG
Comment from vapros
Good stuff, Rod. It's neat, how the falling tide rubs out all the footprints, as it goes. It will do it again next time, too. Well done.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Good stuff, Rod. It's neat, how the falling tide rubs out all the footprints, as it goes. It will do it again next time, too. Well done.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for giving this poem a peek and your kind praise. Rod
Comment from RYME4U
This is well done. Expressive and very descriptive. The loneliness and serenity come through well. You have done a good job with this whitney.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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This is well done. Expressive and very descriptive. The loneliness and serenity come through well. You have done a good job with this whitney.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much for your kind praise. I am delighted the format--new to me-- worked for you. RodG
Comment from seaglass
Your Whitney poem with 3/4/3/4/3/4/7 syllables is very descriptive of the sea at low tide. Even without a picture the reader can see the scene through your words. I live by the sea and I love low tide, walking barefoot looking for shells and sea glass.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Your Whitney poem with 3/4/3/4/3/4/7 syllables is very descriptive of the sea at low tide. Even without a picture the reader can see the scene through your words. I live by the sea and I love low tide, walking barefoot looking for shells and sea glass.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, sea glass, for your lovely tribute to my poem. May you find many treasures in the sand. RodG
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You are welcome
Comment from TAB_that's me
This is a good nature whitney poem for the contest. Your syllable counts are correct. I love the way the waves roll in and smooth out the sand.
~Teresa~
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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This is a good nature whitney poem for the contest. Your syllable counts are correct. I love the way the waves roll in and smooth out the sand.
~Teresa~
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Thank you so much, Teresa. I am delighted you enjoyed the imagery. Rod
Comment from playinaround
Just was checking out the contest and wanted to read one of the poems. There was yours.. I really enjoyed this Whitney, and I wish you the best of luck for the contest.. I feel yours will win. J
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Just was checking out the contest and wanted to read one of the poems. There was yours.. I really enjoyed this Whitney, and I wish you the best of luck for the contest.. I feel yours will win. J
Comment Written 17-Jan-2014
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2014
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Wow! I cannot thank you enough for this special recognition and your encouraging praise. RodG